You have a good start with this one. If you wanted to keep writing on it, you could make this one in to something really interesting. There are a few minor details with the dialog, for me it wasn't believable, but maybe if I read it on a different day it may make more sense to me. But as I said it's just minor, otherwise it can stand alone. So far good.
Very good! Your descriptions where clear, we know who is who and the food I could see with just the brief descriptions given. I wish I could have eaten most of what your character did, yum. There is always room for improvements, but until we actually want to improve on this that would be the time to do so. Other than that, this can stand on its own. Very good and entertaining.
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