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Review of Kept in the Dark  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review








Your Prompt was:

Write your story or poem about a pet that likes to destroy things.








What I liked most about this piece was the cuteness of the puppy. How adorable.



Further Corrections & comments:

Glad he ended up with a good squeaky toy. That should help the situation!




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Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (5.0)




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Your Prompt was:

Write your story or poem about a pet that likes to destroy things.








What I liked most about this piece was THE BELIEVABILITY. Very cute.



Further Corrections & comments: I really like this poem! Great poem.



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Review of Friday's Fortune  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review








Your Prompt was:

Oh no! It's Friday the 13th! And Halloween is just around the corner! Write a story or poem about experiencing good luck on Friday the 13th.








What I liked most about this piece was the positive nature of this poem. It made me feel good! LOL



Further Corrections & comments: I love how you spelled "triskaidekaphobia" correctly -- or at least I assume so. I sure couldn't have spelled it correctly, that's a head-scratcher.

And, of course, the wonderful images you flashed enclosed with such beautiful language. Sigh. Outstanding!




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Review of Thank You, Santa!  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Your Prompt was:

Oh no! It's Friday the 13th! And Halloween is just around the corner! Write a story or poem about experiencing good luck on Friday the 13th.








What I liked most about this piece was the cute ending.l It was an "ah, how cute" ending.



Further Corrections & comments:

That was one amazing letter. The five-year-old didn't misspell a single word except trampoline!!!! (Well, okay -- please, too, but I've seen grown-ups spell the word that way, so I'm not sure it counts.)





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Review of The Have Nots  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Wow! What an amazing peek into this man's life. Thanks for the journey.




Your Prompt was:

Use the following words/phrases in your story or poem. Make them bold to make the judge's job easier:
plastic
ignore
space heater
itinerant
abalone








What I liked most about this piece was the concept of writing about someone who lives on the outskirts of society. I loved the exchange between him and the woman, too.



Further Corrections & comments:

I'm not sure that bakery items should be his hard-earned meal. I hope he has access to other sources of nourishment. It makes me itch to pass him a sandwich -- some fruit, too.




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Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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What a great reflective piece! It's a good reminder of how we need to pause to appreciate the grandeur of physics, chemistry, and, well, in general Mother Nature. LOL




Your Prompt was:

Use the following words/phrases in your story or poem. Make them bold to make the judge's job easier:
plastic
ignore
space heater
itinerant
abalone








What I liked most about this piece was the way you used all the words so beautifully. Marvelous job.



Further Corrections & comments:

The sentence: Why would it not? Didn't quite fit (for me) the sentence before it. Why would it not be? Or simply leave it out/substitute something else? Just a thought.





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Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Why else can I say? This is adorable!




Your Prompt was:

Use the following words/phrases in your story or poem. Make them bold to make the judge's job easier:
plastic
ignore
space heater
itinerant
abalone








What I liked most about this piece were the puns, of course.



Further Corrections & comments:

My only suggestion is that in paragraph two: lines one and two, delete one of those sentences. It spoils a piece when things are repeated -- in my opinion.




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Review of THE SPEECH  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Your Prompt was:

Write a story or poem about having to deliver an important speech on short notice.








What I liked most about this piece was the last line, of course. How funny!



Further Corrections & comments:

What a decision -- to read it extra fast!

I'd love to have heard his answers to the questions.

What is the main organ transplanted? Answer: the brakes? the transmission?




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Review of Speech Maker  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review








Your Prompt was:

Write a story or poem about having to deliver an important speech on short notice.








What I liked most about this piece was the way you used the prompt so cleverly.



Further Corrections & comments:

I loved the scene with the stress ball. Very nice. That gave us an image of this poor, hall-pacing man.




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Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Please remember to follow all the rules for entry. You have to place your line count/word count in the POSTING.




Your Prompt was:

Write a story or poem about having to deliver an important speech on short notice.








What I liked most about this piece was running into her old English teacher. What a clever idea.



Further Corrections & comments:

I liked the topic of the speech. IT had great potential.

Watch the order of your sentences, though. She began working on the speech . . . She struggled . . . She picked a topic. The last should be first.

Details would improve this piece. Maybe she decided to wear a sweater that clashed with her pants, so she could take it off and show how another really improved the outfit? Or a flashy scarf???

Now I'm wondering what the English teacher has to share with her? LOL




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Review of Fulfillment  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Your Prompt was:

Some people think the world is going to end tomorrow, September 23rd. Write a story or poem about what happens to an end-of-the-world believer just after the Earth once again fails to be destroyed on schedule.








What I liked most about this piece was, as usual, your sense of humor. I also liked the part about life being magnificent and several lines that came after that. They took the piece from being merely sadly humorous to thought-provoking.



Further Corrections & comments:

he flipped his one flip-flop <-- Is this a localism? I had no idea what you meant by that. In California a flip-flop is a shoe. Is that what you meant or is it some piece of his shirt?

My own personal misunderstanding of this term caused me to backroad for meaning. So judge for yourself if this item should be changed or not.

Otherwise, I very much enjoyed your poem. Well done.

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Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Your Prompt was:

Write a story or poem about a mysterious leaf. What's so mysterious about it, and how is the mystery resolved (if at all)?








What I liked most about this piece was that it was praise of the humble leaf. Nice.



Further Corrections & comments:

I think this would do well for a meditation. Can't you see the yoga student sitting under a fully-leaved tree, contemplating the wonder. Good reminder of nature's gift.




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Review of Leaf Matters  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Your Prompt was:

Write a story or poem about a mysterious leaf. What's so mysterious about it, and how is the mystery resolved (if at all)?








What I liked most about this piece was, of course, the subject matter since I love trees, but also the way you painted your pictures. Nice.



Further Corrections & comments:For some reason I felt that stanzas four and five should be switched. Of course, you're the poet (an excellent one, too,) but you might try it that way and see what you think.

Great job.




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Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Your Prompt was:

Write a story or poem about a mysterious leaf. What's so mysterious about it, and how is the mystery resolved (if at all)?








What I liked most about this piece was the concept. I loved the metallic elements in the leaves. Bravo.



Further Corrections & comments:

Watch those antecedents. For instance, in the sentence: . . . focused on the pair's heads. They fell to the ground . . . implies that their heads fell.

Personally, I would delete the last sentence. It is obvious, and the one preceding that one is much stronger.

Retracted into the earth? Then, it didn't pull up and relocate.

Avoid then, then: Then he returned to his office . . . Then she turned . . .

This has great potential. I hope you fine-tune it.




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Review of Celebrating Irma  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Please, may everyone keep safe. For those endangered by Mother Nature, we send our prayers and good wishes.




Your Prompt was:

Birthday Week is now over, but I have a different kind of birthday prompt for you today (though the prize goes back to the usual 10K GPs). Sunday, September 10, would have been my father's 100th birthday - he died nearly a decade ago, so he didn't quite make it. Now imagine someone born Sunday, 10 September 2017, and write about his or her 100th birthday, one century from now. Robert Waltz








What I liked most about this piece was the good spirits of the piece. It was amazing that you could find something inspirational concerning our hurricane siege. Good for you!



Further Corrections & comments:

I wish I could have seen into Ms. Irma a bit. What did she think about all this?

But, that was your choice, and you wrote a fine piece.




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Review of A Century  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Please, may everyone keep safe. For those endangered by Mother Nature, we send our prayers and good wishes.




Your Prompt was:

Birthday Week is now over, but I have a different kind of birthday prompt for you today (though the prize goes back to the usual 10K GPs). Sunday, September 10, would have been my father's 100th birthday - he died nearly a decade ago, so he didn't quite make it. Now imagine someone born Sunday, 10 September 2017, and write about his or her 100th birthday, one century from now. Robert Waltz








What I liked most about this piece was a peek into the future. Oh, my. I expected more -- all those pills -- YICK



Further Corrections & comments:

You forgot to mention that he has all his teeth since that's, perhaps, a simple yearly shot to keep the cavities away. LOL

Paragraph two: typo: Almost all the rest of me is fake.

Grandkids unless you meant it to say Grankids. (It's true that spelling may change, too.)




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Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning! And Happy 17th Birthday Writing.com ,




Your Prompt was:

To be eligible for the special Birthday Week prize of 17,000 GPs tomorrow, you must write in the Friendship genre, and select Friendship as one of the three genres in your (story or poem) Static Item.
All other rules still apply.

PROMPT:
Two friends have an argument. What's it about, and how is it resolved to everyone's satisfaction?







What I liked most about this piece was the ending, of course. That was a real surprise. I thought she was pregnant. Don't ask me why I jumped to that conclusion. LOL



Further Corrections & comments:

You forgot to POST the word count. You must follow the rules.

You did a great job with this theme. I really liked this piece. But rules are rules.




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Review of Wake  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning! And Happy 17th Birthday Writing.com ,




Your Prompt was:

To be eligible for the special Birthday Week prize of 17,000 GPs tomorrow, you must write in the Friendship genre, and select Friendship as one of the three genres in your (story or poem) Static Item.
All other rules still apply.

PROMPT:
Two friends have an argument. What's it about, and how is it resolved to everyone's satisfaction?







What I liked most about this piece was the way the two made up in the end. This piece was very believable. . . except why wasn't Marie fired from her job? Did the pub manager buy the story that she had the flu? Maybe you could show Sally, despite the phone hangup & name-calling, covering for Marie, and Marie finding that out.



Further Corrections & comments:

You must place your word count in the POSTING. Please follow the rules.

Nice job with the theme.

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Review of The Kiss  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning! And Happy 17th Birthday Writing.com ,




Your Prompt was:

To be eligible for the special Birthday Week prize of 17,000 GPs tomorrow, you must write in the Friendship genre, and select Friendship as one of the three genres in your (story or poem) Static Item.
All other rules still apply.

PROMPT:
Two friends have an argument. What's it about, and how is it resolved to everyone's satisfaction?







What I liked most about this piece was the storyline. This has great potential. I could see those girls. It felt real.



Further Corrections & comments:

Red is not a good color for a story/ Black is much easier to read.

This had a lot of errors which made it a rough read, but, as I said, the potential is there. Great story.




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Review of Parasite  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning! And Happy 17th Birthday Writing.com ,




Your Prompt was:

To be eligible for the special Birthday Week prize of 17,000 GPs tomorrow, you must write in the Friendship genre, and select Friendship as one of the three genres in your (story or poem) Static Item.
All other rules still apply.

PROMPT:
Two friends have an argument. What's it about, and how is it resolved to everyone's satisfaction?







I really liked this piece. The hurt felt raw & true. I liked the comparison to a mosquito, too.



Further Corrections & comments:

I would delete:
Good night
And

Goodbye is so much more profound.




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Review of Agree To Disagree  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning! And Happy 17th Birthday Writing.com ,




Your Prompt was:

To be eligible for the special Birthday Week prize of 17,000 GPs tomorrow, you must write in the Friendship genre, and select Friendship as one of the three genres in your (story or poem) Static Item.
All other rules still apply.

PROMPT:
Two friends have an argument. What's it about, and how is it resolved to everyone's satisfaction?







Cute, cute, cute. Another humorous poem!



Further Corrections & comments:

This was clever. From you, what else would I expect?




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Review of Bah Humbug  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:

It's August, so of course some stores have Christmas displays up. Write a story or poem about encountering one of these transparent attempts at cashing in on the season.







What I liked most about this piece was the explanation for Amazon's great success; we're all protesting! FOFL



Further Corrections & comments:This was beautifully done. I enjoyed every line (and agree!) Although, I will admit that I understand the frustrations of such stores. All sales are down, and their stock prices are sinking, sinking, sinking. Sigh.



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Writer's Cramp Review




Your prompt was: My city's been featured in international news for all the wrong reasons lately. It's not our fault; I swear - all the troublemakers were from out of town. For tomorrow, write a story or poem that says something nice about Charlottesville, Virginia.


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*Smile*  Great job! I don't know why you excluded this from judging. You would have won. I really liked all you had to say, and the sentence structure was great!  *Smile*


What I liked most about this piece the Heroes Program. What a lovely idea to concentrate on the good. Our news, sometimes, seems to look for BAD. Sigh.


Corrections & comments: I also went to the website. I saw lots of green in the parks -- something really wonderful to me since our summers see nothing but BROWN. Also, they have a diesel train tour that sounds marvelous, a day trip that tours the countryside.



I am so glad I got to read this. Thank you for posting this. I hope you keep on writing and sharing your work!




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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:

Write a story or poem about going back go school after a long hiatus.







What I liked most about this piece was the listing of differences or the history of years.



Further Corrections & comments:

Your tenses were a little confusing. You begin with a statement, then end the piece with a conditional: I would be . . . I'd choose one or the other to do the whole piece in.


It is interesting that progress/events change, but do people? Aren't there the same malicious kids in school, the same nerds, the same high-flyers, the same politicos? Has that changed?

I have been in and out of schools. I like the process. I like learning. It is very true that my fellow students in Music Appreciation class often skipped class and seemed inattentive during class, but that's one part maturation and one part interest. I wanted to be there; I didn't have to take the class. LOL

On the good side, I wasn't afraid to ask questions, even though there were fifty or so students in the class. I wasn't ashamed of looking stupid. I didn't have to fear a bad grade.

I liked the ideas in your piece. I wish you'd SHOWN us more. (Your graying or sparse hair -- your stiff hands when you took notes, etc. vs. the gum-chopping multi-pierced and tattooed kid who sat next to you in the jeans last washed a millennial ago . . .)




I am so glad I got to read this. Thank you for entering the Writer's Cramp. I hope you keep on writing and sharing your work!




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Review of School Days  
Review by Spooky Shaara
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:

Write a story or poem about going back go school after a long hiatus.







What I liked most about this piece was the fact that it gave the unhappy characters in this piece a chance to change their lives. Nice. I love possibilities!



Further Corrections & comments:

I wondered what these characters looked like. The janitor had some nice health problems SHOWN to us, but I couldn't judge ages of either character.

This is a rough draft, but it really, really needs a good read over and a word check. Some sentences really made me stumble and have to FIGURE out what you meant. That is never a good idea for an author. A story, to be effective, must flow smoothly so the reader can fall into the scene.

But this piece has fine bones.




I am so glad I got to read this. Thank you for entering the Writer's Cramp. I hope you keep on writing and sharing your work!




Weekend Judge for the Writer's Cramp



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S h a a r a



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The Bluebird Stories  (ASR)
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#1876841 by Spooky Shaara


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