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Review of The Presentation  
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about being sick but having to go to work (or school or whatever) anyway.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the originality of the tale. I liked that this was a private business. That was a good angle.






Further Corrections & comments:

You must learn the past tense of drink, which is drank.

It really makes me cringe to see a grammatical error like that. (Drunk requires the past perfect tense -- I have drunk.) Does it make a difference? Yes, yes, yes. It is like ignoring a toothache. It obscures the pleasure of everything else.

Your story was good, but I can't help feeling sorry for the people who tasted those cookies. I hope they didn't all get sick. I can just picture the next chapter -- Headline: the day the whole new products division came down with a cold.












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Review of Fortitude  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about being sick but having to go to work (or school or whatever) anyway.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: It said it all most perfectly!!!! Anyone who has ever been sick will identify with this piece!






Further Corrections & comments: The first stanza left me a bit confused, but a quick reread after hitting the second stanza, aligned this piece. That second stanza is what deserves the perfect 5.0. It is marvelous how you can image us into a scene!












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Review of Sick Of Things  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about being sick but having to go to work (or school or whatever) anyway.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the seemingly humorous concept. (But it might work. LOL)






Further Corrections & comments: The story moved as little too quickly for me. I would slow down to get some sensory in there. But it has great promise.












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Review of Sick As A Dog  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about being sick but having to go to work (or school or whatever) anyway.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was:"you look like fifteen miles of bad roads." If you made that up, it's great!






Further Corrections & comments: I thought the punchline was going to be that the employer now was sick. The bankruptcy came out of nowhere. Big surprise!












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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


There has been a strange van parked across the street for a week now...







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#333655 by Sophurky
but you forgot to follow the rule about putting the word count in the POSTING. So, I am sorry, but I have to disqualify this piece.

What I liked most about this piece was:the result of not following one's instincts turned out to be a very, very bad thing!






Further Corrections & comments: There is a paragraph or two where you wore out the word, right.

And she was right. As I stood beside her and watched the traffic, there were at least twenty white vans driving either up or down the street. Maybe she was right and I was letting myself get a bit carried away.

"Okay, you're right, Carla. I'm just going stir-crazy."


You could replace right with correct and change the last sentence to: I see your point, etc. I recommend that you always scan for repetitions.

Also: avoid telling.

This makes me frown. Is Carla suggesting that I'm imagining how strange this van and its sudden appearance is? "I don't think you understand. Whenever I'm here and I look out of the window, there it is. It was never there before, and now it sits there every single day!"

Do you really need to tell us what Carla is suggesting? Doesn't your next sentence show us that? Couldn't you delete: Is Carla suggesting that I'm imagining how strange this van and its sudden appearance is? Also, if the van has been there for a week, is its appearance sudden?

Anyway, this was an interesting story. I enjoyed it.






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Review of Van of the Dead  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


There has been a strange van parked across the street for a week now...







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was:It was most unexpected. This piece definitely goes in the Halloween folder. LOL






Further Corrections & comments: My mine does race (mind?)

Well done. The zombie fans will love this!












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Review of Dismay On Mars  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Weather forecasting has improved, but sometimes we can still be surprised. Write about plans that have to change due to unexpected weather.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was:that to tales place on Mars! How creative.






Further Corrections & comments: I loved your use of language and imagery. Good job!












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Review of Pumpkin Man!  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


A young trick-or-treater is stuck in their costume!







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was:This was a marvelous story. I would work on the ending; it was a bit of a let-down, but I think you've got a children's book here!






Further Corrections & comments: I think if this were a children's version, it could end with something about how Pumpkin Man keeps the world safe from all those critters, who scurry back into hiding until Halloween. You said that more-or less but . . . Anyway, sorry for the suggestion, I just think you've written a read winner here!












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Review of Beyond Belief  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


A young trick-or-treater is stuck in their costume!







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the humor in this tale. Marvelous about his desire to become president. (How sad that the child's words made me nod my head in agreement.)






Further Corrections & comments: This had a few mistakes that you might want to reread and correct, but it was cute. I enjoyed the read.












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Review of Other Than Magic  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


A young trick-or-treater is stuck in their costume!







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the wonderful way you SHOWED us this scene. Marvelous!






Further Corrections & comments: I loved the line about the Merlin blather! LOL This piece is absolutely wonderful.












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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:


A young trick-or-treater is stuck in their costume!







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was:You came up with an entirely new idea for a story! I hope you run with it. It sounds intriguing.






Further Corrections & comments: This was interesting, but it was all TELL. To SHOW a reader, you would need to describe through sensory. Of course, you, as the poet, have the option to write whatever and however you want, but I'd love to see some sensory here: For instance, instead of saying,"with shocked eyes," she gasps, she cries out, she whimpers at the sight, etc. When her mom took a deep breath, that was almost SHOW. I could tell the Mom had reservations about blurting out the tale. That gave us some insight into her feelings, but what was the girl feeling?

Anyway, just a suggestion about how you could start that story, if you choose to.












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Review of A Major Annoyance  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about being overwhelmed by telemarketers.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was:the wonderful uplift when the phone call is of significance -- and such a wonderfully important event!






Further Corrections & comments: When he grabs the phone and shouts, No, I think there is a typo you might want to correct. It shows the {/linespace }

This was fun. Good job with the prompt.












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Review of They Run Amok  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about being overwhelmed by telemarketers.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was:"the calling guano reeks." Bravo. So illustrative for the situation!






Further Corrections & comments: I looked this up out of curiosity. The expression is: to a T, not a tee.

Excellent job. I agree, I agree, I agree!












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Review of Telemarketers  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about being overwhelmed by telemarketers.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: I identified with this!!!! (Who doesn't?)






Further Corrections & comments: I liked your format. It showed the progression of irritation. Yes, naps are almost impossible when the phone is hooked up. I have increasingly started disconnecting mine. And like everyone I know, I keep asking myself why I pay for this torture.












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Review of The Prefect  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Use the following words/phrases in your entry. Bold them to make tomorrow's judge's job easier.

ethical quandary
unfortunate incident
got away with it
expectations









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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the decision at the end. Very nice job in describing the situation and resolving it.






Further Corrections & comments: Nice writing. This was a good prank. I liked the choice Lyn made.












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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:


Use the following words/phrases in your entry. Bold them to make tomorrow's judge's job easier.

ethical quandary
unfortunate incident
got away with it
expectations









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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the subject matter. Shame on those Grays!






Further Corrections & comments: This was wonderful. Great dilemma, marvelous analysis of the solution.












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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:


Use the following words/phrases in your entry. Bold them to make tomorrow's judge's job easier.

ethical quandary
unfortunate incident
got away with it
expectations









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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the wonderful rhythm while writing a perfect tale of woe and revenge!






Further Corrections & comments: I wouldn't change a thing. This is absolutely perfect!












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Review of A.L.F.  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:


Use the following words/phrases in your entry. Bold them to make tomorrow's judge's job easier.

ethical quandary
unfortunate incident
got away with it
expectations









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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was:the ending. The tale certainly defeated from where I had guessed it was going.





Further Corrections & comments:

Be careful about pronouns antecedents. When a pronoun does not refer to the last noun stated, the reader has to back-up to figure out the meaning. (Example: first paragraph: his accountants had written it off . . . He (refers to the accountant structurally, but your meaning is to the character.)

Another point about pronouns, is that they "wear-out." I used to instruct my writing students that the noun should be reused every third time. That is not an iron-clad rule, but it helps, especially when you begin a new paragraph.

Again. He dropped a fiver (refers to the homeless man.)

Does one change clothes in a toilet? Perhaps that is something one would say in Europe? In the States, we would say in the restroom, in the bathroom . . . Perhaps W.C.?

When he was beaten up

I needed to know about Armitage Louis Frederick Smythe's relationship to Sophie. You didn't give us even a line about an argument between the two of them. You might want to plant that before we reach the end.






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Review of The Climb  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem in which an elastic band fails at an unfortunate time.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the ending! It was, gulp, very surprising.






Further Corrections & comments: This was a well-written piece. I felt like I was there on the cliff --not a good feeling for me since I'm very afraid of heights. But, if one has to face such a situation, I sure do appreciate sitting in my comfortable chair instead of being there in person! LOL

I loved the scene about the wife scolding him about his old Calvin Klein's. That will teach the fellow to listen to his wife. Whoops. Guess not.

I sure hope he meets up with another very close overhang, one softly padded with damp grass.












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Review of Lost Luggage  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about the incredible adventures of lost airline luggage.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: Is that you gave us the suitcase's version of what happened. How cute.






Further Corrections & comments: This was adorable. You did a great job!












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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about the incredible adventures of lost airline luggage.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: that amazing rhythm! This was almost a song -- maybe you have written a ballad? Next best seller in the music world?






Further Corrections & comments: I also think you should send this to Samsonite. This is definitely a suitcase of honors.

Dynamite job!












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Review of What a ride!  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



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Your Prompt was:


Write a story or poem about the incredible adventures of lost airline luggage.







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#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: That it was in the suitcase's voice. How funny even to start off! Then the rest of the ride was great fun.






Further Corrections & comments: I loved the ending. I didn't know the word, sledging. We don't get to use such words in Southern California, so I visited the dictionary, always an interesting thing to do! Yes, the word works and was very descriptive now that I know how to use it. LOL

This was well done. I thoroughly enjoyed it!












I am so glad I got to read this. Thank you for entering the Writer's Cramp. I hope you keep on writing and sharing your work!




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S h a a r a



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Review of DUD Racing  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:


Write about the next "social media challenge" (examples from the past include the planking challenge and the ice bucket challenge). Make it as realistic or unrealistic as you like!







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Write the best story or poem in 24 hours (or less) and win 10KGPs.
#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the utter ridiculousness of India's passions! This piece was a whimsical delight.






Further Corrections & comments: My favorite part was how you described the volcanic activity. Very cleverly done.












I am so glad I got to read this. Thank you for entering the Writer's Cramp. I hope you keep on writing and sharing your work!




Weekend Judge for the Writer's Cramp



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S h a a r a



Please drop in to see my stories and poems. Or . . .

Go directly to



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In affiliation with The Writer's Cramp Judges ...  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:


Write about the next "social media challenge" (examples from the past include the planking challenge and the ice bucket challenge). Make it as realistic or unrealistic as you like!







First off, you successfully wrote to and therefore, have qualified for today’s Writer’s Cramp contest:
FORUM
The Writer's Cramp  (13+)
Write the best story or poem in 24 hours (or less) and win 10KGPs.
#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: That I assume it is true??? Either way, it was incredibly fascinating!






Further Corrections & comments: I would stop with the self-deprecating. You have written this piece quite well, indeed. I very much enjoyed it.












I am so glad I got to read this. Thank you for entering the Writer's Cramp. I hope you keep on writing and sharing your work!




Weekend Judge for the Writer's Cramp



Smiles,
S h a a r a



Please drop in to see my stories and poems. Or . . .

Go directly to



for some of my witch tales, which I hope to one day turn into a novel.


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Review of Rocking  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Writer's Cramp Review



Happy, happy morning!




Your Prompt was:


Write about the next "social media challenge" (examples from the past include the planking challenge and the ice bucket challenge). Make it as realistic or unrealistic as you like!







First off, you successfully wrote to and therefore, have qualified for today’s Writer’s Cramp contest:
FORUM
The Writer's Cramp  (13+)
Write the best story or poem in 24 hours (or less) and win 10KGPs.
#333655 by Sophurky


What I liked most about this piece was: the novel idea. Rocking might be good for us -- who knows?






Further Corrections & comments: This was a fun poem. I especially liked the last stanza. Very cute.












I am so glad I got to read this. Thank you for entering the Writer's Cramp. I hope you keep on writing and sharing your work!




Weekend Judge for the Writer's Cramp



Smiles,
S h a a r a



Please drop in to see my stories and poems. Or . . .

Go directly to



for some of my witch tales, which I hope to one day turn into a novel.


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