I like this poem. It pulls the reader down the page like the jumping in your third line. I thought the second stanza of silence did not seem to work. It just drew my eye back up to it after I left. I enjoyed your imagery, and I thought silence seeping between her teeth was a great phrase. Well done. Keep up the good work.
Grifter
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