This poem holds nothing back. It is extremely personal and the imagery is really quite vivid. The pain of humiliation is palpable and deeply felt by the reader. Well done writing this and being able to share such personal information in a very well written poem.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. You can truly sense the ache and longing and the inability to do anything about it. I love the flow of this poem as it goes from obsession to peace and then back to obsession. It really captures the hold an obsession can have over someone. Well done.
This poem is both heart warming and heart breaking. The simplicity is perfect and in just a few lines so much love and sadness is conveyed. This is a beautiful tribute to those who have died too young. The rhyming is well thought out and does not take away from the message of the poem, which I appreciate. Very well done.
This a very good poem that perfectly portrays the struggle faced by the narrator. I very much enjoy the structure of the poem and the way that it flows perfectly from one idea to the next. The sentences themselves also flow together nicely. Very nice job.
Very well done. The rhyming works very well with this poem. The messages conveyed are so broad and enormous but manage to be encapsulated perfectly in these few lines. This is truly very philosophical and demonstrates the questioning that has been going on since the beginning of time.
While your writing is somewhat confusing, it is still entertaining to read. Your style of writing is very unique and interesting and I enjoyed reading this piece. I've truly never read a poem quite like this, and I applaud you for the originality. Well done on this poem.
A very interesting story. I almost wish there was more of it, though the ending leaves it up to the readers imagination. This feels like the introduction to a grand story, but it also works on its own as just a short story. Very nice job on this piece, look forward to seeing more from you.
A very good and simple poem, with so much meaning. The writing style is easy to read, and there is a lot conveyed in just a few simple lines. I very rarely find poems about sports that are as well-articulated as this one, and I commend you for it. Very well done.
Very well written. The rhyming scheme is well thought out and the poem effectively depicts the struggle of mental illness. I very much appreciate the uplifting end of the poem, and it is inspiring to see someone with such strength to battle through depression.
This piece is haunting. The style of writing flows so perfectly and it's a very interesting look into the mind. I greatly enjoyed reading this, even though it was a bit hard to read some parts, purely because of the subject matter. Very, very well done.
Great story! I love the slow realization that the main characters are actually dogs. The use of only dialogue is very interesting and very fitting to the story, as it prevents the reader from immediately realizing that the two speaking are dogs. Very nice job.
Absolutely lovely to read. I thouroughly enjoyed the rhyming and the story was entertaining from start to finish. A very wild ride that keeps the reader wondering what will happen next and how things will play out. I'm wondering if this is based on real life events or if it is completely fiction. Either way, very fun poem to read!
A very interesting look at mental illness. This poem is very dark and the ending especially hits close to home. You are so strong and your ability to write about your experience is very impressive. I really appreciated the simplicity of this poem which is able to capture so much emotion.
This is haunting to read. It truly captures the essence of an eating disorder, and the style of poetry perfectly adds to the message. I was very moved reading this, and I hope to see more from you. Very good job tackling a sensitive topic and handling it elegantly.
This piece is full of emotion, as the opening line immediatly alerts the reader to the situation. The idea of writing to an unborn child that will never get to know you is a fascinating premise, especially since you mention that you are not actually pregnant. I found this wonderful to read.
This was an entertaining read. I enjoyed the build up to the reveal that it really was the fairies. The writing style fits very well with the story, and the descriptions really add to it as well. I must admit I'm confused at the title, but maybe it's just something I'm not reading deep enough into.
A very interesting story to read. It is a bit confusing at times, and feels as though some details are left out, though this may be intentional. A bit more context could be helpful to the reader. Regardless, the plot is captivating and I had to keep reading to find out what would happen next!
This was very interesting to read. As someone who does not dream in words it is hard for me to imagine it, but I'm very intrigued. It is a very well organized piece of writing that is easy to follow. I would love even more detail about your dreams, and hope you continue to write about them.
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