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Review by skeason
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I enjoyed this poem very much. It does a very good job at describing what we often assume is the feeling of the Civil War.

I like the poetic form used. I was unsure of its meaning until I looked it up. *Wink*

Good job!
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Review of Darkened Life  
Review by skeason
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I really enjoyed this poem. Depression can be very hard to write about while avoiding cliched images of sadness, but you did a great job!

I have read the first two verses over and over. The imagery is awesome and knowing that it is about depression makes the aura they create...personal to me. It is great. Cunning passages and contrived corridors are perfect descriptors for a state of mind.

I also like the phrase "arboreal gloom". I love to use trees in my writing and to read poems with trees or references to trees. *Smile* And to me they are always in a state of gloom.

If I had any suggestion at all it would simply be to have a tiny bit more consistency in syllable count. It is a lesson I learned the hard way that sometimes one to two syllables can change everything.

But really...I just really enjoyed it. Great job!


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Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I was looking through your portfolio to review something as a fellow "The Challenge" challenger and whil eyou have other great stuff...I am going to review this. *Wink*

Mostly because I WISH I had seen this when I first started. This site can be overwhelming and while I may be the type of person to just immerse myself til comfortable...this is awesome for those that are not. It has great information and links...and Elle's list of ways to earn a merit badge was just added bonus to this great article.



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Review of DEPRESSION  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked this poem quite a bit. I find the acrostic form soothing to write and to look at it. It always feels so orderly.

I also enjoy the subject matter of the poem, though "enjoy" seems weird. I absolutely empathize with every line of this poem and therefore find nothing wrong or displeasing.

My favorite line is the second E. "Eliciting destruction." I can actually feel that line.

Great job!


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Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really really liked this poem! It was a really good length and the subject matter felt very personal to me. I often find myself aggressive and erosive and so the title and the way it IS the poem...Mortified and Modified....it became my favorite line.

The musicality that the poem had was very enjoyable. I immediately fell into a reading rhythm. It was nice.

Great job!


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Review of Flight of Fantasy  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed this poem. I wasn't quite sure what the "nonsense" category really was but I think this is the perfect example of what I imagined it to be! *Smile*

It was almost like grown up Dr. Suess.

I found no grammatical mistakes and while not an error, the only line that threw me upon my second reading was "And was surrounded by a crowd"... it seems logical (ha!) maybe it should be more like ...and was alone in a crowd.

BUT it makes no difference- I love it!


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for entry "Dreams - Naani Poem
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
I really liked this poem.

I didn't see any grammar or punctuation mistakes.

The line...."drift in misty energy" is great!

Good job!


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for entry "I Don't Like It Here
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
I liked reading this very much actually. Sometimes shorter pieces are hard to read and get a good grasp on both what came before and what will come. But I think you did a very good job of that. I really liked that.

I don't really have any suggestions on how to improve....I think you did a great job!

Good luck!


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Review of More Snow Melt  
Review by skeason
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I really enjoy reading your blogs! I check them quite often!
*Bigsmile*


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for entry "Chapter 3
Review by skeason
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
Ha! This chapter took a turn I was not expecting. *Wink*

Your descriptions are very pleasing. I am having no trouble picturing some of these things!


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for entry "Chapter 2
Review by skeason
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I love the fire wisps. *Wink* In the first chapter they were mentioned but they were not explained and I was left wondering if it was a vocabulary mistake! I am glad you explained them, although I would probably do this in the first chapter.

I enjoy the fantasy novel structure of short chapters focusing on different characters or aspects...allowing the reader's mind to flit back and forth subconsciously making connections.

Write on!



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for entry "Chapter 1
Review by skeason
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I enjoyed reading this very much, as it is my favorite genre to read.

I thought that the descriptions were very good. and the dialogue wasn't overly basic.

I am going to read the next chapter right now!

Write on!


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Review by skeason
In affiliation with Poetic Exploration  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
*BurstB* Hi! I am doing this review as part of The Poetic Exploration Group. *BurstB*


This was my favorite Thanksgiving Poem! I had no problem immersing myself in the lovely imagery in this poem.

Good job!



Write on! *PenB*
skeason




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Review by skeason
In affiliation with Poetic Exploration  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
*BurstB*  Hi! I am doing this review as part of The Poetic Exploration Group. *BurstB*  


I enjoyed this Diamante! I found that I enjoyed both writing and reading this form. I like your choice of the words coal and diamond.

I really like the repetition of starting letters in each line, but there is one tiny thing that kinda threw off the flow for me - the two lines in a row using B. However that is very small and wasn't a huge detriment to begin with.

Good job!



Write on! *PenB*
skeason




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for entry "Night Visions - Haiku
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
*BurstB* Hi! I am doing this review as part of The Poetic Exploration Group. *BurstB*


First impressions:

I like the title - it could mean so many different things - but no matter what it means it definitely drew me in. It has a slight....dark (no night pun intended *BigSmile* ) tone to it.


What I enjoyed/caught my attention:

I love the first line. Night does drift in sweetly.

Suggestions:

The only tiny thing I would have to suggest is that the work like feels very...casual while the rest does not.

Overall Impression:

This is one of my favorite Haiku that I have read so far.

Write on! *PenB*
skeason




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Review of September  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
*BurstB* Hi! I am doing this review as part of The Poetic Exploration Group. *BurstB*


First impressions:

I really enjoyed this acrostic. I find that I am really enjoying all of the fall themed poetry! I think you did a very good job at capturing many of the aspects of September.

What I enjoyed/caught my attention:

I love the line "evenings grow quietly elusive" and "entering our hibernation, alone" - both lines feel lonely and slightly sad. I love that.

Suggestions:

For some reason the word maybe in the M line really throws me off...but just slightly.


Overall Impression:

I really enjoyed this. It did a very good job at both capturing the beginnings of autumn and fulfilling the acrostic requirements. *BigSmile*

Write on! *PenB*
skeason




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Review of Project Zealot  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love things like this. "Official documents" created for a story. This one was very good. Even though I didn't know what much of the flight talk meant I still enjoyed it and was not struck by the thought that I didn't know what was going on at any time. I definitely wanted to keep reading to see what had happened to him or what was going to happen to him.

It would not have mattered one bit what the topic of this was....I would have read it no matter what because of the format! I loved it!!


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Review of Once upon a Crime  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed reading this. A first I kept thinking.....this is pretty good...then I got to the end when she asks for a story and you fulfill the prompt requirement and I thought ...no this is really good. That last line made the entire story worth it to me!!

In the very beginning though there is a tiny mistake....you have Gery instead of Gerty! Just small and no big deal at all.


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Review of Doors  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.0)
I am going to review this based on what is up there.....although it says Chapter 1...perhaps it was to be a summary of a first chapter?
I think it seems like a great first sentence to a book. It pulls the reader in with a question and hints at something deeper or more to come. Maybe because in your description I learned that the boy had lost his parents....but the combination definitely makes me want to rad further and find out why or how or what will happen next!


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Review of Raven  
Review by skeason
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
I didn't even need to know there was a story for this character to enjoy this. Character sketch or in depth reviews are some of my favorite things to write and read.

I had no problems picturing Raven based on your description. I also had no problem believing she would react in the ways you describe because you wrote such a believable character. I enjoy this genre and this definitely made me want to read the story!


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Review of Awake Beside Me  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I read this poem twice before reviewing it. I NEVER EVER sleep and so this poem could have been written about me. I loved it. It really did a nice job of capturing some of the feelings of insomnia without even being the one afflicted. I wish my husband understood this well. :)


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Review of Life and Death  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.0)
I like this story. I like the theme and the idea of Life playing games with Death or vice versa.

The only issue I had was some of the grammar and spelling mistakes made it hard for me to just read nonstop. Those things can sometimes stop me in my tracks.

I do that..... point of view switch..... sometimes too and it is not always easy to work that in. I do think that it could be melded together a bit more seamlessly.

Still...I really liked this. It has inspired me to work the theme of life playing with death into my writing - even if I do it symbolically. :)


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Review of EDIT HELP  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
This essay definitely did what it was supposed to do because it made me want to debate with you about Of Mice and Men. :) I think it is very well written although occasionally the sentence structure is kind of....halting..and interrupted the flow for me. Also....in the third paragraph it should say "Although" rather than "All though" but that is just a small thing! Arguing (okay okay....debating) is one of my favorite things to do so this essay making me want to debate the book is the highest praise from me. :)


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Review by skeason
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This setting was very well written. I didn't have too much problem imagining everything you were writing, and I confess, Steampunk is not a genre I know that much about, but I pictured everything in my mind perfectly. I also think the delineation between the have and have nots was very good. Lines like the one about the horse dung getting on the pavers....it was a good way to describe the disparities without being overt. All in all I enjoyed it. There is one tiny little thing I noticed.....in the second to last paragraph...it should say "an airship"....nothing major just a small little thing!
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Review of Invisible Strings  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
This was good. The scene with her nightmare is very intriguing, I want to know what that is about and also.... I want to know what is going to happen when George finds out. ;) There is a tense change in the last paragraph where it begins in present tense then goes back to past.


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