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Review of Darkened Life  
Review by skeason
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi!

I really enjoyed this poem. Depression can be very hard to write about while avoiding cliched images of sadness, but you did a great job!

I have read the first two verses over and over. The imagery is awesome and knowing that it is about depression makes the aura they create...personal to me. It is great. Cunning passages and contrived corridors are perfect descriptors for a state of mind.

I also like the phrase "arboreal gloom". I love to use trees in my writing and to read poems with trees or references to trees. *Smile* And to me they are always in a state of gloom.

If I had any suggestion at all it would simply be to have a tiny bit more consistency in syllable count. It is a lesson I learned the hard way that sometimes one to two syllables can change everything.

But really...I just really enjoyed it. Great job!


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Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really really liked this poem! It was a really good length and the subject matter felt very personal to me. I often find myself aggressive and erosive and so the title and the way it IS the poem...Mortified and Modified....it became my favorite line.

The musicality that the poem had was very enjoyable. I immediately fell into a reading rhythm. It was nice.

Great job!


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for entry "Dreams - Naani Poem
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
I really liked this poem.

I didn't see any grammar or punctuation mistakes.

The line...."drift in misty energy" is great!

Good job!


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for entry "I Don't Like It Here
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
I liked reading this very much actually. Sometimes shorter pieces are hard to read and get a good grasp on both what came before and what will come. But I think you did a very good job of that. I really liked that.

I don't really have any suggestions on how to improve....I think you did a great job!

Good luck!


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Review of More Snow Melt  
Review by skeason
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I really enjoy reading your blogs! I check them quite often!
*Bigsmile*


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Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
I liked this poem very much! I enjoy poems with rhyme and this one was very good since it did not end up with a ...juvenile feel. G is my favorite line! :)
The only tiny thing that disrupted the flow for me was at the very end...I feel like the word Happy in "Happy Thanksgiving" seems slightly out of place. But that is just me! ;) Good job!


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for entry "Night Visions - Haiku
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
*BurstB* Hi! I am doing this review as part of The Poetic Exploration Group. *BurstB*


First impressions:

I like the title - it could mean so many different things - but no matter what it means it definitely drew me in. It has a slight....dark (no night pun intended *BigSmile* ) tone to it.


What I enjoyed/caught my attention:

I love the first line. Night does drift in sweetly.

Suggestions:

The only tiny thing I would have to suggest is that the work like feels very...casual while the rest does not.

Overall Impression:

This is one of my favorite Haiku that I have read so far.

Write on! *PenB*
skeason




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Review of Project Zealot  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love things like this. "Official documents" created for a story. This one was very good. Even though I didn't know what much of the flight talk meant I still enjoyed it and was not struck by the thought that I didn't know what was going on at any time. I definitely wanted to keep reading to see what had happened to him or what was going to happen to him.

It would not have mattered one bit what the topic of this was....I would have read it no matter what because of the format! I loved it!!


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Review of Once upon a Crime  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed reading this. A first I kept thinking.....this is pretty good...then I got to the end when she asks for a story and you fulfill the prompt requirement and I thought ...no this is really good. That last line made the entire story worth it to me!!

In the very beginning though there is a tiny mistake....you have Gery instead of Gerty! Just small and no big deal at all.


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Review of Doors  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.0)
I am going to review this based on what is up there.....although it says Chapter 1...perhaps it was to be a summary of a first chapter?
I think it seems like a great first sentence to a book. It pulls the reader in with a question and hints at something deeper or more to come. Maybe because in your description I learned that the boy had lost his parents....but the combination definitely makes me want to rad further and find out why or how or what will happen next!


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Review of Awake Beside Me  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (4.0)
I read this poem twice before reviewing it. I NEVER EVER sleep and so this poem could have been written about me. I loved it. It really did a nice job of capturing some of the feelings of insomnia without even being the one afflicted. I wish my husband understood this well. :)


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Review of Life and Death  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.0)
I like this story. I like the theme and the idea of Life playing games with Death or vice versa.

The only issue I had was some of the grammar and spelling mistakes made it hard for me to just read nonstop. Those things can sometimes stop me in my tracks.

I do that..... point of view switch..... sometimes too and it is not always easy to work that in. I do think that it could be melded together a bit more seamlessly.

Still...I really liked this. It has inspired me to work the theme of life playing with death into my writing - even if I do it symbolically. :)


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Review of EDIT HELP  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
This essay definitely did what it was supposed to do because it made me want to debate with you about Of Mice and Men. :) I think it is very well written although occasionally the sentence structure is kind of....halting..and interrupted the flow for me. Also....in the third paragraph it should say "Although" rather than "All though" but that is just a small thing! Arguing (okay okay....debating) is one of my favorite things to do so this essay making me want to debate the book is the highest praise from me. :)


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Review by skeason
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This setting was very well written. I didn't have too much problem imagining everything you were writing, and I confess, Steampunk is not a genre I know that much about, but I pictured everything in my mind perfectly. I also think the delineation between the have and have nots was very good. Lines like the one about the horse dung getting on the pavers....it was a good way to describe the disparities without being overt. All in all I enjoyed it. There is one tiny little thing I noticed.....in the second to last paragraph...it should say "an airship"....nothing major just a small little thing!
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Review of Invisible Strings  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.5)
This was good. The scene with her nightmare is very intriguing, I want to know what that is about and also.... I want to know what is going to happen when George finds out. ;) There is a tense change in the last paragraph where it begins in present tense then goes back to past.


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Review of Flaming Déjà vu  
Review by skeason
Rated: E | (3.0)
I like this poem. It speaks to me and my own abuse. The only thing I noticed is that when you build something it is a "raising" when you destroy something it is a "razing". But that is minor and it certainly doesn't detract from the impact that the poem has. ;)


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Review of Every Darkness  
Review by skeason
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
I liked this poem. This is not my favorite style but I gave it a try anyway and the theme of the poem spoke to me and the way I write.
There were a couple times the rhythm was interrupted because I would notice that a line could go with the line above it or below it. Not a big deal and actually I liked that....but it did halt my flow. :)


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