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Rated: E | (3.0)
I like this a lot. It's pretty interesting so far. I do suggest you read it outload to yourself though, because I feel the grammar could be a little better. You also switched from past tense to present tense. I'd stick to one or the other. Another I found, was in first two sentences, you said ..." Growing up, Grace was not to be around people. So she was homeschooled all her life" and than you said the same thing right after - "She never knew the feeling of having friends, she always felt lonely as even in childhood she couldn't be around people".. I'd rewrite one of those sentences, so that it's not repeating itself. Other than that, I like where your story is going. The story itself is fine, it's just some technical issues that need fixing.
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