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Review by Sophia Behalova
Rated: E | (2.5)
Thank you for sharing, I quite enjoyed your poem.
This what I would do if I was you:

I would work on the piece of art, by...
... working on the rhymes.
... work on the overall melodics of the verses.
... inspect the overall flow of the poem. (reads bumpy)

This poem has quite some potential if the author works on the verse/rhyme structure.
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