This is a piece filled with great visualization and verbs that drive the work. Poetry often confuses me, but it seems you are speaking of the rapture of music or sex. Correct me if I am wrong, please. Check your twelfth paragraph for a plural mistake. Again this is great and I encourage you to keep writing and seeking advice. Only the brave writers keep striving for greatness. My best to you.
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