|Review of Why I Quit My Dream Job
What a terrible experience for such a caring person as you. And how sad for the patients that things like this happen and all too often, I gather.
I have a couple of suggestions that might be useful to you.
In the first paragraph, instead of : Finally, I landed a decent paying job in the health field. a better grabber might be “Finally, I landed the perfect job for me (or so I thought)” Or, “when I finally landed a good job, I had no idea it would turn out like it did.”. Something that gives a little hint of what is to come.
There are some places you might tighten the writing, and others where you might emphasize a little more to convey the shocking conditions. For example: I took my job seriously and made sure that I learned everything I needed to know and caught on quickly. After all, I would only take care of someone in the manner I would want to be taken care of. You might add: “But I came to realize that not all my co-workers felt the same way.” Then go on to tell about the medication cover-ups and the abuse.
Instead of spelling all this out (which is a little unclear to me) One night the assistant director and I were relieved of our shift, so we packed up our things and started to head out. We ended up stopping at Eckerd's Drug Store and realized we had left something back at the resident's houseYou might say something like: “Returning after our shift, the assistant director and I were shocked to find the co-workers dancing…” and even more shocked when we called the director…”
Thanks for sharing your experience, Lexi. Hope some of these suggestions are helpful.
And, of course, write on!
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