|I like this it's very encouraging for young people. The rhyming is there. I'm not sure if this is a typo/grammar error, but the line where you say "Accept the challenge, leap over the hurdles of race" I don't know if your talking about an actual race or someones ethnicity but if it isn't about ethnicity then the sentence should read. ", leap over the hurdles in the race." Also the sentence before that has a grammatical error as well. "Crush the difficulties, Spread smile on your face." should read, "Crush the difficulties, and spread a smile across your face, or maybe spread a smile ON your face." Otherwise it's a nice piece. Good Job!