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for entry "Going For Broke
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,

My favorite aspect of this curious little tale is the way the dismissive, corrupt nurses get theirs when they mistake the almighty for an addled psychotic patient. Perhaps they should have realized that it takes a fairly supernatural skill to wriggle out of a straitjacket. Of course, the real horror is in the last sentence, and it's one we wake up to every day. Thanks for all your contributions to SCREAMS!!!--S.
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for entry "Crack!
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,

I really like this entry for its straightforwardly surreal qualities. First the sky, and the unnatural quiet, then the bizarre auditory crack and its horrific sequelae...all of it makes for a very nice horror read. Well done!--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Angr,

Wow, thanks for this heart-pounding flash-flash tale! The intensity of the situation and imagery and the short, punchy sentences and paragraphs definitely amplify the fear factor. The split in the structure of the story mirrors the split images in the phone screen. It's clear you put some thought, effort, and skill into this offering. Hope to see more of your work at SCREAMS!!!--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, Pernell,

This story was a creative and very imaginative take on the prompt. The reader cannot but sympathize with poor Carlo's plight and tremble at the thought of what is about to happen in the unfortunate DiSanti residence, but I must say I felt a bit let down by the easy escape at the end. It somewhat let the air out of the horror balloon, as it were. Still, many thanks for all your contributions to SCREAMS!!!--S.
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for entry "The Real You
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
Excellent job with this rather abstract prompt. You've created a fable that brings to life a horror that probably crosses every lover's mind once--and only once, if we're lucky. Even if in Matt's case what is usually hidden is only what we all hide, there's always something we don't want to see or be seen.--S.
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for entry "A Man Of Habit
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Hullabaloo,
Thank you for this weirdly evocative story, which has left me wondering, as a good story does. This couple, who at least from what Em says appear to have been a rather ordinary if devoted pair, is suddenly rent by what one might call an ontological shift when Andy becomes the cosmos and his eyes the access point to empty space. This is not some big adventure for the two of them; he tries to stop her from falling into it. One could read it as a particularly dramatic example of the familiar approach-avoidance couple dynamic, or as something more transcendent. Personally, I prefer the latter.--S.
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Review of Viscous  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Tytren,
Thank you for this poetic, synesthetic, psychedelic take on the "his eyes were not his eyes" prompt. The rhythms of your sentences carry the reader along in dreamlike suspension of disbelief and critical thinking. It's as if the eyes have their own neocortex and the normal sorting function of the rational mind has gone dark. A good, bracing read, and I hope to see more of your work at SCREAMS!!!--S.
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Review of Awakening  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Beholden,
Congratulations on the win for this fantastic story! One of the things I most admire about your work is the abundance of realistic details. The reader sees, hears, and feels everything, and this lovelorn boiler is disturbingly believable. Best touch: Steve's dismaying realization that he can't make Grimley hear his call for help. I shall never look at a boiler the same way again.--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
The geometric growth of these unstoppable pests vindicates poor Emma's seeming paranoia and makes me want to run out and buy a ton of diatomaceous earth. One can only hope that if these creatures can reduce carpentry to sawdust within minutes, they'll be able to consume the residents in their sleep. But I don't see that kind of happy ending here. Well done!--S.
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Review of Eyes like Mine  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Rakkit,
Welcome to our contest! I very much enjoyed this take on the prompt and the way you worked it seamlessly into the story. The setting is enticingly menacing and the strangely seductive characters who populate this weird nightclub are just alien enough to raise a chill. A very efficient thrill. Hope to see more of your work at SCREAMS!!!--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Seuzz,

Thank you for this remarkable addition to your collection of SCREAMS!!! offerings. Of course, the tone is faithful to the great master who inspired it, and the story itself makes exceedingly creative use of classic tropes of the English ghost story. Technically, your writing is top-notch. I hope you have as much fun writing these stories as I have in reading them.--S.
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Review of The Excrescence  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Beholden,
Thanks for this invigorating entry in today's contest. Too bad there was no competition, as I would confidently predict that this sturdy and insidious little tale would have held its own. The sensory imagery is its first strength: we can definitely see, hear, touch, and smell the excrescence (and I don't blame poor Harvey for not tasting it). You also give us Harvey's understandable reactions, and like the prototypical horror protagonist, he's oblivious to the danger until it's too late. Your last sentence only makes us wonder: where does it go after that? Well done.--S.
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Review of Teenage Angst  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, Pernell,
Thanks for this entertaining little tale of revenge. The image of writing appearing all by itself promising terrible vengeance on the hated faculty selection committee is scary, and the idea of the notebook's turning warm as it does its horrible work is a really nice touch. Hope to see more of your work at SCREAMS!!!--S.
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Review of My First Victory  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello Serena,
This story uses an unusual device, concealing from the reader the protagonist's evil deed until the haunted notebook makes its shocking accusation and she is forced to admit having committed murder for an appallingly trivial reason. This tends to put the reader on the notebook's side, even though the person who is now doing the haunting also seems to be a rather unsavory type. We're left to wonder whether the protag will figure out a way to rid herself of this nasty notebook and avoid further bloodshed. It doesn't seem likely. A nice dark tale.--S.
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for entry "False Gods
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Bobturn,
Thanks for this intriguing and well written tale of a curious invention. By eliminating all that makes people unique and individual--their emotion and personality--it also eliminates their chronic unhappiness in life. And of course the dopamine receptors can't get enough. Poor Harvey bears the brunt of their dissatisfaction when the inevitable happens and the device breaks. I wonder what the hordes will turn to now that both the device and Harvey are gone. Nothing good, in all likelihood.--S.
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Review of The Notebook  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Beholden,
Congratulations on the win for this tight, well-put-together little tale of a notebook that seems to have an evil soul. Henry acquires it by the most innocuous means, his purchase of a box of odds and ends at a yard sale. One immediately suspects the former owner is a previous victim of this nasty little item. Did Henry not even fleetingly think of getting rid of the notebook when the second inscription appeared? Or was he like more protagonists in horror fiction, strangely incapable of taking the necessary action to save himself? We'll never know, but we look forward to seeing more of your work at SCREAMS!!!--S.
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for entry "Hired gun
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Bobturn,
This is an impressive exploration of the phenomenology of the bullet wound with a clever twist and snappy dialogue...another nice contribution to SCREAMS!!! Thanks for being a part of the community.--S.
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Review of Apple Pie  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello, Serena,
Welcome to our little contest! Thanks for giving us this flash-flash tale of revenge. You've nailed the prototypical horror heroine, all murderous determination and ingenuity. My favorite line: "It annoyed me when I noticed that she looked at me as if I was crazy! How dare she!" Nicely ironic. Hope to see more of your work at SCREAMS!!!--S.
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Review of Interview  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, LA Grawitch,
Congratulations on the win for this nasty little tale establishing the truth of the prompt, "Boy, did you pick the wrong one." The little touches signaling the protagonist's madness--the weirdly violent method of fixing the hair that's out of place, the discordant whistling--lead inexorably to the final malevolent voodoo doll image. For a 500-word story, there was maybe a bit too much setup for my taste, and you might have delved a little deeper into the weirdness, but all in all it delivers an effective scare.--S.
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for entry "Pot Luck
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Hullabaloo,
Thanks for this quirky take on the prompt. I really like the occult setup; it's easy to see why Fless, Wynn, and Cory are taken in by Sam's apparent authority in the realm of esoterica, as he brings out all the usual magical accoutrements and does the standard spellwork. At first I had the same reaction as Wynn, but upon reflection having three hundred fanged tribbles suddenly descend upon one would be a rather overwhelming experience. Thanks for being part of the SCREAMS!!! community.--S.
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for entry "Giving Your All
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
Almost invariably, there's an epic quality to your characters, and here Mia and Bobby are a pair worthy of Hollywood. Bobby doesn't seem to mind unduly that his smokin' hot girlfriend betrayed him; in fact, his lingering hope for a reunion adds a touchingly romantic dimension to this lawyer with his back now against the wall. It's not overly scary, but it sure is fun.
--S.
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Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, Beholden,
You have the seeds of a nice little mystery here. You've certainly made imaginative use of the prompt, turning blood into motor oil, and put the deceased into an ingenious hiding place. I like the detective story crossover; it would be fun to have a SCREAMS!!! round devoted to this genre mix sometime. You could bring Ingram back, perhaps? Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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Review of Hashing It Out  
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Beholden,
This story has the relentlessness of one of those dreams in which everything happens three times, so that even if you're not paying close attention, you get the weirdly oblique message. I love the cat as master and commander. Isn't every housecat such, after all? The only thing I would have liked to see is more depth to Artemis: why he is so fatally susceptible to the unholy urgings of this baneful cat? Thanks for this intriguing puzzle.--S.
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for entry "The Veil And The Jail
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Bobturn,
The voice and style of this flash piece drew me in immediately and, although exaggerated, your portrait of the monstrous prison wasn't altogether unbelievable. The main action, though, read like a magic trick. After several readings I think I know what happened, generally speaking, but I'm not sure how. Is Madeline gifted with supernatural powers, to enter naked and leave victorious, given the narrator hadn't lifted a finger? In any event, thanks for taking up the challenge.--S.
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for entry "Make A Wish
Review by sugarglider58
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, Hullabaloo,

What an interesting and curiously ambivalent little story this is. Like nearly all readers, I suppose, I tend to identify with the underdog character in any story. Here, that seems to be Amy, who starts out somewhat afraid of Den, who's determined to capture her for life. Without his having to say many words, we see that he's a brute and such a fate would be a tragedy for her. But Amy turns the tables on Den, leaving him to his doom. In that very act, she becomes someone different from the sympathetic, put-upon GF...someone I, for one, wouldn't fancy running across on a lonely footpath. Always a pleasure to read your work.--S.
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