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Review by TLaHomme
Rated: E | (4.0)
There is a some nice imagery in this poem. I like that you refer to the ground as Nature's floor. I would like to learn more of the background of the bagger, if you're interested in expanding this poem any. The line about "carrying my lifeless legs behind" as it creates a striking image.
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Review by TLaHomme
Rated: E | (3.0)
Interesting. This reminds me of that Old Testament poem from the Book of Ecclesiastes that was turned into a Byrds song. You might want to expand on it a bit and go into more details about the different days. But this is a great start.
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