I love the feel of this story and how you immersive the reader. That feels like something from a cool video game. You did a good job explaining to the reader the events that happen and what choices that they could explore. Continue your amazing stories and make fun twists that make the storytelling well immersive to the reader.
You did a great job starting out the story. Getting to the point and being descriptive of the story telling. I do wish that you immersed the reader a bit more into the story. But otherwise you did a great job with your story. Please continue with your stories and story telling, as well keep up the great work.
Once again, I find myself reviewing another thing you made. Just like the other interactive story, you did a well written job immersing the reader. It does feel like an episode from sliders, which brings back good memories of dimensional hopping before it became popular on TV and movies. I do hope you continue this story, because you are on a roll for making fun interactive stories. So, keep at it and enjoy writing your creative stories. But remember to take breaks, so your creative mind can continue to come up with amazing ideas and not overload it with writers block.
You did a well written job, of writing this section. At the moment I have not fully read the amazing work and effort you put into this interactive story. But so far, you fully invested me into this story you have written. Where I feel I am actually there seeing the events unfolding, the great detail of describing what we are seeing. Keep up the amazing work and keep going with immersing the reader, to the world you have created.
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