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Review by Todd Remote
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Fantastic. Clear story and would make for a great porno.
I am a personal fan of the continuous rhyme instead of just pairs. So I do like that.
But I must say, whoever this person was. They where pretty thirsty to be going to the kitchen.
I don't understand the meaning of the dash though.
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Review of Laying So Close  
Review by Todd Remote
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Deanna's and bananas could have been better. The last section made no sense to me besides kinky. Also, is the story about Smith and Yogi. Or a banana fetish. Or both?
But besides that you got the focus on sex across pretty well. And also what torpedoes?
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