|At first I found the short-story to be too "teenagery" but I still got sucked into it. Also I'm a big fan of soccer so naturally i found it appealing.
The actual story with the two old men becoming two enchanted cleats is both entertaining and new. There have been other stories with magical cleats but the addition, of the two old men who despirately try to escape cancer by transforming into his cleats, really gives the story and plot new life.
As to typos I didn't find many. I could point out that there was a exclamation mark which I found misplaced.
Meanwhile, Aaron and Barney took the cleats to their old house, which was just behind the soccer field! - Here I would remove the exclamation mark at the end and just replace with a period.
'But,e he would just walk home, wearing his socks.' - Here there is also a small typo but I only noticed that when I reread the story.
I could suggest to correct the few typos I found but it wouldn't make a big difference to me.
Instead I missed some conversation between Mason and his family when he comes home with no cleats after he has given them to the old men. I think it could give the story a little more depth.
As to my final thoughts I feel that the story itself was great. The plot worked well and the title captures your attention.
It definately shows promise and it is already close to being ready. Write on!