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Review of The Carnival  
Review by Vincanity
Rated: GC | (5.0)
This story keeps showing more and more promise as more arcs are created. Started by Josh Pumpkins, it was was bound to have an amazing introduction but the contributions from other writers have given this story a few different feels and really allow the main character to go on a number of different adventures. The very idea of the Carnival itself has made for an incredibly imaginative story line as it literally is a mind illusion taking place in the main characters head. This has allowed for the introduction of celebrities and fictional characters to be in the story whilst maintaining a level of life like quality that almost makes you wonder what it would be like if you were the main character. I could not recommend this story more, even in thought it is certainly in its earlier stages it is still a great read and is becoming better each day. I can't wait to see where Josh and his contributors take this epic story, as it is sure to be another absolute classic and is the reason I keep coming back to writing.com and renewing my membership!
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Review by Vincanity
Rated: XGC | (5.0)
Absolutely amazing concept! This story will go far, I am sure of it.

I'd love so see the story line where it becomes so bad for Tim that he has to go crawling back to Natalie begging her for forgiveness... And just thinking of all the different types of characters you could introduce excites me!

I'd love to see a character from Tim's past (like a rival or an ex that he had a REALLY bad break up with, or even a cousin who finds out about his money and uses his weakness for feet against him), I think your story has so much potential!

Great start, just keep adding regularly and this story will become a hit!
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