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Review by Open thoughts
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I must say, I liked how the Narrator talked in this story. He uses slang and his speech helps pull the reader in.The use of piercing blue eye's helps draw the reader in as well. Overall I think this is a good piece, with just a few spelling issue's or as I like to put it, a slip of the finger on the keyboard. I look forward to more of your writing.Let the mangled mess in our heads be released unto this vast white canvas. Write on .
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Review by Open thoughts
Rated: E | (5.0)
It is always nice to meet our goals. Keep up the good work, and remember "I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me" Phil 4:13. I look forward to hearing you reach your daily goals. God bless.
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Review by Open thoughts
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Thank you for your story I found it to be intriguing,and suspenseful. I enjoyed that you used a wide variety of descriptive wording to make the story what it is. As for being a horror story like I mentioned before I found this more of a suspenseful/scary story. I think with a few tweaks, and some extreme carnage this could be a true horror.
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Review of In the garden  
Review by Open thoughts
Rated: E | (3.5)
Great piece, I wish all children would take heed to authoritative people in their life.Look forward to more writings.
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Review of The Last Soldier  
Review by Open thoughts
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
First off, Thank you for your writing. Being a veteran I understand a lot of this. I'm not sure how many people will understand at first,but I think once they look up what certain words mean they will get. I liked and enjoyed this piece.I would try to find words that people would understand more,and not take away from the poetic side of it.
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Review of That's you  
Review by Open thoughts
Rated: E | (3.0)
I think this piece is a great expression on what we all are looking for.I like the way you use time taking forever,yet vanishing so fast.You are passionate on what you want , and what you will give in return. If this is about real life, that person you are describing is out there,be patient.
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Review of On my mind  
Review by Open thoughts
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a great expression of what young boys or girls do when they fall in love. I can relate to this and how it can draw you in. The first time you fall in love, the only thing on your mind is that person, and telling yourself that you will spend your life with this person, and he or she will never love another. I look forward to more from you in the future.
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