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Review of The Sock Monster  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very cleverly done. I like your style, Mary. I wrote a haiku to socks "A Thing For Socks*Laugh*
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Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so beautifully stated. Even if it wasn't an acrostic it would still be wonderful. You are very talented, Cindy *Smile*.
W.D.
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Review of Shadows  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Bailey,
A very interesting story. I like the way you presented it - my eyes couldn't stop reading. Even the typos and the long paragraphs did not dissuade from reading it to the end. That's a sign of talent. I would like to feature it in the July issue of the Horror/Scary Newsletter. If you have time, you might want to read it aloud and fix the typos. Good Job!
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Review of Trying  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
Perfectly perfect. I like the climbing poem form. I wish you had written more of this Thanbauk. It is very good.
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Review of Eagle  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This was very well done. A story of ordinary horrors. At the end, I thought the narrator was more dangerous than the eagle. You built the tension well -- the constant doubt. A great little psycological thriller. Bravo!
I will feature this in the next Horror/Scary Newsletter. That should help you get some reviews.
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Review of Each Must Decide  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very well done! You get your message through with the whimsical dragon story-line. Bravo!
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Review of Little Frogs  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a joyous romp through the pond. I loved this. It is very child-like and playful. Fun reading!
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Review of A Dream  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: E | (4.5)
You show moments of GREATNESS in this poem. Other times, you use old worn-out phrases. For example: from the madding crowd/ long lost love/ lies frozen like snow on leaves/ portals of the past

You have the GIFT, write more, write everyday!

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Review of The Other Side  
Review by W.D.Wilcox
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
This is pretty good, Pixie-Fairy. You have a wonderful imagination and clever way of tying everything together. There are some things you can do to make it stronger. For example, your very first sentence, "An object dropped quietly nearby a bed with a girl reading in it." Your opening sentence must be as strong as your final sentence. This one seems very vague. It starts really well, but than drops you. How about this: "A gold key fell out of the mirror, and slid near Alexia's bed." Now the reader is hooked, because that is a very strange opening sentence. How could a key fall out of a mirror? You've also introduced the young girls name which you really don't mention until her mother calls her to eat. In writing, less is more. Go through your story and take out the weak words. For example, 'the objest', describe the object; Try to stay away from using the word 'it', describe 'it', this makes your writing stronger.
I hope this advice helps you tighten-up this story, or makes your next one even better. Never stop writing and reading *Heart*.
W.D.Wilcox
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