This is a good play. I am liking it very much. I haven't seen any grammar or spelling mistakes but hey, I'm no English language teacher. However, I do love how you make them speak to each other. Very early in the play I am seeing some dramatic irony and lots of potential in this play. This is going very well and honestly, I don't know if it's over yet or not however I love it and I think you should continue writing it. Alongside this review I am sending 280 gift points.
I would like to hear updates on this play. It is very interesting and has great potential on stage!
I liked this prayer. I think there needs to be the capitalization of some of the objects in this poem that talk about the Lord but apart from that I find your poem a well structured prayer to God that just needs a bit more work on it to make it into a poem that truly means something philosophical and to yourself specially. This is what matters. It needs to be extra special for you...
I loved the first paragraph. Of all of the account, it was the best part. I thought of it as a metaphor that engulfed and entailed very well the mistyness of life and how life really takes us through a path that ends up in a decaying corpse. I liked some of the poetic language in the middle however I believe that there was some confusion of subjects as well as some grammar mistakes. Please double check the work for the sense of sentences. A few are quite confusing.
I think that perhaps, you should keep the first paragraph and from there on use it as a root for a more philosophical and metaphorical essay. I honestly think that your imagery was the reason why I did not drop this to a 2.5 or something like that. The constant imagery and its refining really make this account something good quality. And lastly, well, I loved the comment on the ageing body.
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