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Review of Why Did I Say No?  
Review by Wrader
Rated: E | (3.5)
You misspelled 'you're' in the second line. Good theme. Good job at not making it too cheesy. I think it could use a few more visuals. As a reader, I'm wondering: Who are you? Who is this other person? I just don't feel drawn in yet, but I want to be. It's as if the poem is just beginning, and needs an ending. I just think that if we knew more about you and the situation, it would be more powerful emotionally.
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