You have chosen a great topic to share with others.
Truth is a topic people can easily identify with. On a personal level, I not only relate to but agree with your view on learning to say no. It has taking me years to learn to say that two letter word and it's still a work in progress. It does get easier with practice.
The core of this story is superb. My only suggestion is minor punctuation corrections. Your sentences tend to run together at the beginning.
This is a common error but minor to correct.
I enjoyed your take on death. What a great subject to choose. When I first started reading it just seemed like a normal hospital scene, but you were so descriptive I forgot the title so by the time Abby looked up and noticed the dr who really wasn't a dr I was really creeped out. I had goosebumps. Then you turned it into such a positive ending showing hope and faith. I truly enjoyed your story. Keep up the great work!
Aleta
Ps How is Abby now?
You are reaching your readers through life situations they can relate to. You show us that you have an understanding of fighting what you should do with what you desire to do.
Honesty is the heart of poetry.
Keep Writing,
Aleta
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