|I gave you 3.5 stars, not because it is bad, but because I would need to read more of it to really become interested. I had a bit of a hard time reading it, as it took a bit for me to see what was going on, at least in terms of plot.
Based on the facts in the description, your story is based on a serious modern problem. I tend not to read too much of this kind of thing. I'm more interested in war, fantasy, horror, and other genres like that. But, on to editing.
For things I did like: You used detail perfectly, starting right at the beginning. As soon as you started writing, I could picture the character, and her lifestyle. You gave me the perfect picture without rambling on and on about it like some writers (including myself) do. If you had, I probably would have stopped reading, though it would have been hypocritical of me to do so.
And now I'm rambling.
I caught a few simple mistakes. For example, at one point, you wrote "Elsa said as left the room". There should be a she in there.
However, I have to say that you described high school social life almost perfectly.
Good story, but I'd need to read more of it to know just how good it is.