|Nice. Definitely engaging. I do have a few suggestions.
The last sentence of the first paragraph has some weird syntax. It looks like you have a couple words that don't belong, possibly where other words should be.
Work on grammar and punctuation throughout.
Then where the mom's story gets intense, you have "raping" paper where I'm sure you meant "rapping." A little proofreading would have fixed that.
Despite the mechanical problems, I like this. Keep it up.