Wow nice.
Well, it starts off good, keeps me reading. I like the tone of this piece, the light story-telling mode. It's kinda surprising, stuffing in all those details into such a short story.
But anyway, the description or whatsoever u might add in for the part of setting off and meeting the storm, I think u could have added a little more detail. It's good to leave space for readers to wonder, but I cant quite see through it. Wonder if it is the word limit of contest that constraints u.
Nice nice nice.
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