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Rated: E | (5.0)
this article does a good job at enlightening one of the most consequential terrorist plots of history and you do this in a way that is both informative and engaging.I knew nothing about the gunpowder plot prior to reading this, but you made me understand the importance of it. I also really liked how you described the situation in England and how it led to the Gun Powder plot. The article portrays a fascination of the gunpowder plot, and it does so with accuracy and style.

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a great chapter that piqued my curiosity and made me interested in what's ahead for Cameron. I really like how you describe the characters and the environment. I got a clear idea of the characters personalities and how the world around the was just by reading your chapter. Good job👍

There are a couple of things I believe can be improved upon. First of all when you write you could be a bit more conscious of how you start your sentences. On the first paragraph, a lot of sentences started with "I" in succession which is easily picked up by the reader. You could also try to leave out some of the details in your story, for example, are concreted numbers often looked upon as boring, as the exact age of the characters. Instead, you could either leave it out or get their age across another way. Sometimes just describing a character as wrinkly could be enough for the reader to get the right picture in their head.

Keep up the writing, I can't wait to read the continuation😊
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A frightening story that had me sitting on the edge of my seat. You managed to set the tone of the story with few words, and I quickly understood the characters' personalities. The tension accelerated for every line until the end which left the story in a gloomy tone.👍

Although there was little to criticize, something I believe you could improve on is varying the way you are telling your story. There is a lot of dialog between the characters, but you could also describe what they are thinking to a greater extent. This will make your characters more realistic and relatable.

Overall an excellent horror story, keep it up😊
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