Written, Rewritten, and Revised

Written                                        Rewritten

The words I knew                          The locutions I knew
Were endless, perhaps                  Were boundless, conceivably
Incessant in their                          Ceaseless in their
Calling to my pen.                          Employment of my fountain pen.

But now all that                              But now all that
Remains is a thesaurus                  Lingers is a thesaurus
For high school level                      For novice level
Verses, prose, and writing.              Stanzas, prose, and scribbles.

A dictionary-thesaurus                    A dictionary-thesaurus
Combination with a yellow jacket    Amalgamation with a yellow wrapper
Covering common words                Presenting habitual expressions
And not-so-common meanings.      And curious significance.

So if I were to use                          So if I were to utilize
That book of words                        That tome of terms
To rewrite this poem,                      To rewrite this verse,
How would it be?                            How would it be?

                                              Revised

                            The locutions I knew
                            Were boundless, conceivably
                            Interminable in their
                            Posting of my fountain pen.

                            But now all that
                            Loiters is a thesaurus
                            For novice level
                            Stanzas, prose, and scrawlings.

                            A dictionary-thesaurus
                            Amalgamation with a yellow wrapper
                            Proffering established idioms
                            And inquisitive implication.

                            So if I were to utilize
                            That tome of terms
                            To revise this metre,
                            How would it be?

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