by Avid Reader
Intro to Dialogue - Lesson 1
|Good example of dialogue from chaptger 8 of Huckleberry Finn by Mark Twain
The main dialog starts with this line
"It's good daylight. Le's get breakfast. Make up your camp fire good."
I think it's good dialog because you learn something about the two characters, so it's kind of showing vs. telling.
I still find some fault in this segment:
Losing track of who said what. -> 9 segments without saying who's talking (Jim or Huck). That's too many for me.
Large areas of unbroken dialogue. ->14 unbroken dialogue - again too many for me.
Using too much dialect. - except that Twain makes it work.
Poor examples of dialogue
It's my early attempt at dialog. I know it can use improvement but not sure how to do it. That's why I'm taking this course.
Only fault I can find from the lesson list:
All characters sound alike; remember everyone speaks in different ways.
I think I'm making 50 other errors so when you find those, add it to the list.