final scene of the script i am writing. please comment?
|EXT. RIVERSIDE CEMETERY- SUNSET
Archie sits on a park bench watching the sun set over the river. Danny is seated beside him.
Danny: Didn't think you were the "sunsets" kind of bloke.
Archie: I've told you before. Beneath this strikingly handsome exterior is an
extremely sensitive guy. You should know that.
Danny: Oh, I do. Extremely modest as well.
Archie: Of course.
They both laugh. Allie walks up behind the two and puts her arms around Archie.
Allie: Who were you talking to?
Archie looks at the space on the bench beside him. He sighs.
Archie: No one...
Allie walks around to the front of the bench and crouches so that she is eye-to-eye with Archie.
Allie: I don't really know how you feel right now, and I won't pretend to. But it will
get easier with time.
Archie: He told me he was going to be two hours down the road. Or...or a phone
call away. What does he call this?
Allie doesn't answer but gives him a short kiss.
Allie: We better go. it's about to start.
Archie stands up, taking a deep breath. The two walk away and we realise they are in a cemetery. A crowd of people are gathered around a coffin. Allie leads Archie to the front as the priest begins the ceremony.
Priest: We are here to celebrate the life of Daniel O'Heare...
A smiling photo of Danny is on top of the coffin. Fade to black.