This poem really touched my heart and should be put up on a plaque where our service members who have died fighting for our freedom reside. I liked it for it speaks the truth. I can not pick out any one stanza for they all have a huge impact if one studies them long enough! You are gifted in writing!
Thanks for letting me read in your port. I enjoyed my leisure time there!
This was very good and took me back in time to my grandparents place. I enjoyed the memories it invokes and the reading of it. I do have to say I was looking for rhyme in it but I'm not up to the different types and styles of poetry so maybe it wasn't supposd to ryhme. I especially love the ending of it, it packs a whollup! I have no suggestions for it as far as improvement. You are excellentat descriptive phrases and capturing memories!
It takes a special courage to venture into the area of abuse and shows a great compassion in your heart for those that have went thru it. I honestly loved the poem even though it screams out of the darkness. Leila
Hey! I read your poem and it is awesome! I'm so glad you entered it in the contest! Maybe you'll win. I do know that I enjoyed it! By the way did you submit your entry fee? This is my first contest and I haven't found your name yet but maybe you go under several diff. handles like some do here on Writing.Com. Please let me know if you do so I can credit you for the fee on your poem. Thanks for entering!
This poem has such raw emotion in it! Which is good! I reead it through and enjoyed it immensly!
There was a few grammar errors"onder in darkness" should be "wander in darkness". Then"there" should be "their"in the line"there the ones". Other than that I think its a marvelous poem!
I read this and could not believe that you and I have the same thing! I have dystonia also but it affects my extremities like the lower body and arms, fingers etc. Quite painful spasms I can relate too. I enjoyed reading this and gave you a 5 since I think its important to spread the news.
That was very good! I did enjoy reading this on what I consider a very hard subject but it pulled me right in and I think tthat is what a god author does, isn't it? It does make me want to read more. It also flowed right along.
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That was very good and projected me right in with the characters. But that is what a good writer is supposed to do, isn't it? Keep up your writing skils since really I cannot improve on this manusript. The decriptive sentences are great and no grammar errors that I could pick up on.
That poem was so awesome it made me cry! I just loved it and it had so much feeling coming through. You did an excellent kob with it and I'm sure the person you wrote it for was honored by it. keep writing and I can say you are a gifted author in their own right.
Now this poem I really thought was awesome and enjoyed reading it! It flowed nicely and I understood it from the onset! Good writing so keep up the good work! I enjoy reading our poems and thnk I will add you to my favorite authors list.
I reaally enjoyed this poem and read it through twice to get its meaning. I especially liked the last verse but wonder if you should put, " promises as a brother" instead of " promises that as brother" This is just a suggestion that you can use if you'd like.
That story reduced me to tears! It was an awesome read even though you hadto leve thru it! I creid for you and yours. Very excellent in detail and descriptions. I can think og nothing that needs changing. Write on!
That was so awesome and I loved it from the standpoint of her working at that kind of job! I never thought bill collectors had any feelings! You really should write more of this type for different jobs and the people that work at them. An excellent read!
That is so real and I loved reading it, Lidi! A little grammar could be corrected though. For instance; "you will be enlighten should have an 'ed' on the end to make it "enlightened". then where 'the canvas was untouch and dark" should be "untouched". But I see a budding writer in the future. I did enjoy it immensely!
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