That poem was so near perfect and I got caught up in! The only thing that affected my concentration was some of the punctuation, for instance theh i should be capitalized. Otherwise its an excellent read.
This poem is an awesome goodby and I really enjoyed reading it! Your word "new" should be spelled "knew" if you'd like to change that. Otherwise you are a good writer and I'm looking forward to reading other poems of yours. Keep writing!
I really liked this poem but your word"Strength" is spelled wrong and caught me off guard The last four lines are my favorite ad kind of stuck in my mind. Keep writing, we value your work!
I stopped in to visit your port and you story is awesome! I'm so glad I did! The Lord has worked miracles in your life and you give Him all the credit> That is wonderful!
You are a talented writer and should write more of what you've went through.
Good Morning! I am visiting several ports for my newsletter on abuse. I hope you don't mind. I loved this poem and can tell you are agifted writer. I am proud to know you!
This poem was very good and it made me think of losing a first love. I have no idea what caused you to write it but that is my take on it. I liked the flow and the wording is excellent. Youexplained your thoughts well. Keep writing ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
To me, I'm glad I stopped and read this peice. It relaxed me to do just that and I love this article. I wouldn't change a thing about it! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
This poem is really very good as far as explainging things and how you feel. The one thing you might think aboutis the capital letters take away from it. Its entirly up to you just a thought. I do know it would go far if you put just a small amount of extra work into it. So far it sounds good just work on the capitilization. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
This poem was different in that it put horses and hurricanes together! But I liked it and would not change a thing. Keep writing! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
That was just awesome and I can tell you did a lot of work when you wrote it. There is absolutely no changes tha I would make on this piece! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Awesome poem and the more I read it the more I liked it! You just have one typo that I did notice and needs fixing:The one I call back sunshine. Instead of the word"black" you spelled it"back" See not much but it catches the eye of a reader! keep writing, you do a good job! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
This is very good and I really was interested in reading it. But the hopping back and forth kind of confused me and I lost my train of thought. Maybe if you just put the paragraphs in a little more order instaed of interspersing them through out the entire story? I think the subject is awesome and it has a lot of merit. Please keep on writing! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
This is a well piece of work and I especially liked these last four lines:Where pain is so well concealed
Your voice
Speaking to me always
In my world
You bring New Silence
It speaks from the heart I think and makes one think. The only thing I think you need to do is explain about it being a lovesick poem in a little more detail. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
This is an awesonme wellwrittian piece except for spelling and grammar. I see a very gifted writer in the making soplease write on. My intake is my own on this and you have the right to reject it. But I think you will make a fine author. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
{image:1450605] I enjoyed your poem immensely but to me I wonder if it should be longer? Thats entirely up to you, but it was well writtian and I can see youhave a flair when putting words together. So at my conclusion I did enjoy reading it!
This story was so good and does speak reality in loud words! You are an awesome writer and I would love reading more! I would make it a little longer though because to tell you the truth I really got into it. I could visulize evrything that was going on and you are good in using using descriptive sentences. Plase write on! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
This after reading it through for the third time started to make sense. Its not your fault it was because I had problems with pronouncing some of the strange words like:Kahaikhanah, or Rihsjnap. Maybe it would be helpful to add the pronunciation for us simple folk? Its entirely up to you but it might have made it a little easier for me.
You did an awesome job of explaining things except I would like to know what injustices the Nuthsup residents endured at the hands of the Skijats and the Skebzus. A little more detail in certain spots would be beneficial.
All in all I liked it immensely and yes it did cause me to really think about what led up to 9/11. I had no idea before that there was so many things that came into play before that day. Now I am more aware of things that do cause a snowball effect. Thank you for allowing me to read your work.
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Tina, You are a gifted writer Icansee. I really enjoyed this poem but encourage you to write more. Thats how we learn is to write, write and write some more!
That poem was so awesome and I felt the pain of her leave-taking and the pain of the family left behind. I hope you do so well in my contest! May you have the best of luck in winning it! Leila
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