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Review of The marvelous box  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Well. some opinion there and i quite agree with it.

Suggestions:

Please review your work. There is some mistake regarding the usage of tense.

Example-
The invention of the television is eminently one of the greatest inventions [at] of all times.

[However, as time went on, television has gradually become omnipresent]
Instead of above line, you can use 'Once a rare device, it has gradually become omnipresent.'

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Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Well, liked the idea, the way you have expressed..

the alienation, the disgust, anger, sadness shining through.

Suggestion:

I just wish you could have avoided making each word of each line capitalized. That distracted me a lot.

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Christina

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Review of Our Beginning  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow...

Loved it. The chemistry created my appropriate words woven with magic. :)

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Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Talks of pain and vaccum within..

Liked the content and the distinct style.

I wondered at the lack of punctuation, though.

'A relationship blossoms and fades' helped to associate the poem with the context.

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Christina

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Review of She Walks  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Ooh! Spooky!

Made for an interesting read.

LIked the style of the poem as well as the content.

The 1800's bit brings to mind vivid imagery of ancient bungalow.

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Christina

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Review of The Waiting Game  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Well, nicely put.

Liked the concept and the way you have woven the poem.

Makes for an interesting read.

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Christina

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Review of who i am  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
well written 'me' poetry.

it defines you, describes you and lays you bare.. the person you are..

Suggestions:
nothing was [every] good enough

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Cheers!
Christina

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Review of In the end  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
well, nicely put poem.

liked the novel thought.

i wonder why in line 2, stanza 2, 'time' is capitalized? it distracted me.

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Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
well, a quite different one there..

liked the flow and the rhyme..

but why no capitalizing..takes my mind off the material of the poem. also the punctuations are missing.

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Christina

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Review of Friends  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
nice one about friends and what they are for..

simple and sweet.

suggestion: the last lien didn't really work for me.. it broke the flow of the poem.

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Christina

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
full of emotions- anger, desperation, guilt...

liked the way you expressed your emotions.

suggestion: please review your work, there are some typing/ grammatical errors.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Dawn  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A lovely poem about dawn and the thoughts that accompany it.

nice one!

way to go!

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Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
well, short, sweet and with a lesson too.

thats a great combo!

Way to go!

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Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow!!

Simply amazing!!! i loved the comparison..it also reminded me a little of one of my poem 'dewdrops' and hence i believe i could connect to it really well..

suggestions:

Something so strange that attracts our love...but how?

wud u want to delete ' our love' frm d above line?


I reach into your mind and erase all [of] your fears,
'of' is nt required.

Way to go!


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Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
well written, described...liked d imagery..

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Unknown Caller  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
well, nice.. fearful, heart racing..

a few suggestions:

A stranger [being ]with a blocked number is being rather persistent in calling...

I ignore it and go [sit] back [down] and sit.

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Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Don't Cry My Love  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Liked the theme..

emotions are expressed nicely..

suggestion:
He is there for me [with] in my plight,


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Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Liked the concept, the way you expressed it..

the last line didn't really flow well. though.

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Christina

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Well, a nice, simple, romantic story. I liked the concept.

Suggestions:
please review your work. There are a lot of typing mistakes in there, which take off the attention from your story.
A lot of places lack punctuation marks.
Try if you could use 'she' a little less..it's repeated way too often.

If you edit this piece, send me a mail and i will re review.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.5)
wow!! What a splendid thought, what creativity!! never could have thought of it.

i loved the way your poem is so simple yet so meaningful. it has a lovely flow which keeps the reader moving on and on till the very end and is satisfied with the ending.

A great beginning, middle and end!
Way to go!

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
very touching, heart -warming..

such intense emotions ...

i was surprised when i read about the prompt and went back to see how i could have missed the lack of punctuations.. but very surprisingly, i did, because it just felt so right. the breaks as indicated by line change were the only thing needed. the flow was marvelous!

loved it!

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
deep, reflecting feelings...powerful, intense...and yet described in such a simple yet alluring way...

a charmer indeed!

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Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Louise...  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
painful, touching, talking of feelings in depth...real deep feelings. the reality could be felt with your words, each revealing the intense pain and the longing, the desire yet only the emptiness that engulfs.

full of emotions...written so well., that i could almost feel what you felt.

Write on!

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Ambition  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
well...mysterious, enticing, tells a lot about the poet but i wonder why it is in career n not personal..is it mere fiction.

i liked some of your sentences very much:

I want to look upon the world
and know every cell intimately
Be the seas, the continents, the sky

I want every second to be worthwhile
To be experience, not fleetingly have it


a few suggestions:

"sieze life by his guts and have them for my own"
r u sure u want to refer to life as ''his" and not "its".. wud u rather use "myself" insetad of "my own"?


Be the seas, the continents, the sky
exhale wisdom even as I sleep

by any chance, did u mean "inhale" wisdom?

could you do something about the last sentence. it breaks the lovely flow of the poem and brings back my mind so abruptly to the real world..that it is almost a painful experience, coming back so suddenly from your lovely poem.

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Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Letters To Daddy  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
very expressive, touching and simple..

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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