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Review of Lady in white  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Well, i think this is really deep...it's hard to understand its complete meaning..

i liked the way you started and especially the imagery your words created..but somehow its too deep for me to enter, to understand..but i liked most of what i understood.

suggestion:
As I reached the church (the light was no longer there), no other thought could [could] come out of my lazy mind. What was she [was] asking?

Write on!
Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
thought- provoking, touching and so very true.

i liked the concept, the way you have woven words..

Written well.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Slow Down  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
well, a very powerful social message while perhaps at the same time, also a self- realizatopn, perhaps.. liked the subtle, simple and straight way you have used to get teh message across.

it has a powerful impact and leaves me thinking...pondering..

i was wondering if there was some typing mistake in here "Kids want to grow up fat too facts"

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Lavender Blue  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
wow!! i can never think fo writing a poem on lavender blue..but u have done it..and done it realy wel indeed.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Olivia  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
well, i m sorry to say i dont really remember 'the twelfth night'..its been quite some time since i read it last..but i thought this was very different and unique..writing in this way..i m sure it helped you a lot in getting into the skin of the character. i liked the way you reacted as Olivia.

few suggestions:

He really does love me and [his] has asked me to marry him.

People undoubtedly call me headstrong, proud, and murmur about how girls without fathers are [want] to go astray....something's wrong about this word

write on!



Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.5)
pain, dread, fear and hurt reflected very well through mere words..

very impressive.. but sad at the same time..

i m sure God has made love for you..only perhaps he is testing your patience..

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Mist  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
deep and touching..

talks of weather but reflects the pain..

i liked your style..

write on!


Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
well...i liked your different style of writing...but perhaps i m not too smart to know how the orange bit was connected...hope you would let me know..

i especially liked the vivid imagery you created.

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
vivid imagery, felt words...reveal the surge of emotions within..

last line 'control'.

Cheers!
Christina

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of One Last Rose  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Deep, touching, painful and full of emotions...

liked the way you woven the words, the words you have used and your style of writing.

in third last line, typing mistake "last".

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of WE'RE ALMOST HOME  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
your poem made me feel reminiscent. however, i wonder why i can't see the picture which made you write this.

touching, deep and filled with emotions.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Colors  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
well, i liked your perspective and thought that goes into the poem. however i feel you have typed it in great hurry coz there are lot of typing mistakes and that take the fun out of reading a great poem. Please try and see if you can do something about it.

Suggestions:

What if all clothEs were the same
Every thing the color blue

SOMETHING'S WRONG WITH FOLLOWING LINE.i cant understand IT:

I'd go insanE were not the same

Cause if we dress the same, you ARE never truly you

Every thing's unique

The use of punctuations will help the poem to flow and removing the asterisk will take off the distraction.

write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of LIFE  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
well, ur poem says a lot about lots of things that happen in life..so it struck me as true and real
and also some advice you give strikes true.

however, few suggestions:
i think rhyming the words restricted your creativity and also the flow of the poem, for me.
i would have loved it more perhaps had you written without caring for rhyme. however, that is my personal view.

other suggestions:

Words unsaid make me wanna say goodbye,
Actions undone on which I never took a stand,

Life is not easy I need not see,
Friends that come bring me glee,
Afraid of loosing which is a part of me,

Questions that have always bothered me,

for Answers I have waited my whole life,

Time is not on my side,

use of different tenses in pairs of two in the following staza is a bit confusing..see if you can do something about it:

Then one morning I woke up,
Drank coffee in a cup,
I see myself as time goes by,
I cried cause they all said goodbye.


Believe and to see that I'm in grief,

A love that will hit you like a blow.

Forgiveness I must have asked,
from God and friends I have locked,

Because it caused me a lot

write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Open Wound  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
emotions and feelings reflected simple and straight.

words lend a vivid imagery and painful character.

suggestion:
I am dieing [dying] under the pain.

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Woah!!! it is such a brave attempt at soul searching and reflecting and telling...

you really are strong and beautiful!!

Christina

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
left me speechless....its simple, straight and almost in your face..

but then it is very sensitive, touching, crying of pain and loss and also of not being understood by one's own.

a suggestion

but the words seem[s] trapped

very well expressed...and the words reflect your pain..


Take care.

Christina

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Review of Adolescent misery  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Well kudos to you for the bravely in real life and in writing too. written well.

few suggestions:

seemed to feel it was his [his] calling in life to make my existence as unbearable as possible with taunts about my weight and regular beatings at any moment he or his cronies felt like it.

'Oh, did you think I'd be suspended? Ha, even the teachers think you [are] a waste of space!'

please reread your work and see if you can try and use more punctuation marks to put in gaps between long sentences. also, at some places verb use has some mistakes.

rest all is well. well tried.

Way to go!

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Review of eternal light  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
well, i liked the concept but i think it isn't too well formed and expressed.

Also the lack of punctuations and capitalizing and a few grammatical errors add to the woe of the reader. Your writing goes deep and is like a metaphor. A clue would help the reader to associate more with your writing. A little less use of the word 'light' would also be great.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
nice imagery.

emotional, deep...

feelings described nicely.

could identify with it at this point of time in my life.

write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Simply A Life  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow! What a beautiful story!
a Great concept, dealt with equally beautifully!

Made me ponder whether i am still looking for the bluebird..

Thank you for sharing!
Well written!

Write on!

cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
well, simple and sweet.

A great way to start off.

a few suggestions:
to let my friends in with a smile they
{sat down} {KEPT/ GAVE} my gifts and ran to my room

write on!


Cheers!
Christina

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Review of If only I hadn't  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Well, it's a little silly. But i think i like it silly. its the way its meant to be and thats really commendable.

Why a sad attempt at poetry?? i think it's a great start!

Way to go!
Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Fireworks  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow!
This is a very cute and sweet love story.

Never mind a few punctuation errors here and there. try and use some comma's to break up the long sentences, is the only advice i would like to give you.

Else! Nice concept! Liked the humor in it.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Woah!! This is so very touching. I had tears in my eyes.

I am sure your wife would have felt the same. This is so sensitive and loving. Putting into words your life's story and that too in rhyme is no easy task but you managed to do it exceptionally well.

Thank you for letting me read it. I feel obliged.

Cheers!
Christina


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Review of Dry Those Tears  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
very sensitive, touching, real and deep.

affected me deep within. heart-warming. liked the way you have compared nature and the life of Sara and the poet.

very well written.

Cheers!
Christina


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