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Review of To Have One  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Romantic, feelings and dreams straight from the heart. Loved the fantasy and the vivid imagery.

What may be improved:
Why not write it down in a poetry form? that would look better, i guess.

try to ease down on a bit of "arm and leg placement". thats confusing and demands a lot of reader's attention about the spatial arrangement which takes off the attention from the mood of the poem.


Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of A Glance  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely... also a bit hillarious to me, being a lady.

Closely watching and observing, and then penning this down...seems a lot of effort.

However its worth it all, you know.

Beautiful rhyme and flow.

So true words and nice too

very well written, must say.

no suggestion for the perfect poem

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Gold  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
very innovative

Content
innovative way of dealing with the concept too

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Nice

What i liked,
the concept, your original way of writing.

what did not work for me:
The repetition of lines

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (3.0)
Concept:
Loved it! So real and true! Great imagination!

Content:
Some problems with spellings and tenses.

I was wondering if english is your first language? Just like that.

What I liked the most:
The concept, very very nice.

What may be improved:
The way of presenting the concept.
the spelling mistakes, the problems with tenses. for example, the first paragraph:

It was raining on a cold winter day and there seemed no end in sight. I looked out of the window and it was so quiet out there. It felt so nice to look at the rain, but I wondered 'would it ever end?'


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Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
REal

Content:
Felt

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Average

What I liked the most:
first stanza.. the feelings depicted with depth

What did not work for me:
The title, couldnt understand the context.

Your [YOU'RE] a beautiful girl in this horrible world

confusing! you, I and him!!! you-the girl, I-her lover, him-the kid????
Too personal a poem to be understood.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of To Be Left Alone  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
Original and real

Content:
Painful, deep and reflective

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Average

What I liked the most:
The comparisons of feelings with various things, very imaginative.

What may be improved:
The break in lines, the flow and the last line. Something about the last line seems to break the poem mid way. It doesnt seem to end there.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Perfect Moment  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
Real and original

Content:
Felt, romantic

form:
Free verse

Flow:
Nice

What I liked the most:
The concept, the simple way it is dealt in and the fourth stanza.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
Real and felt

Content:
Romantic and loving

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Average

What I liked the most:
the concept

What may be improved:
the flow.
the excessive usage of the word ;you'.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of EVERLONG...  
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Concept:
Real, original.

Content:
Touching, lovely.

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Nice

What I liked the most:
The concept, the use of song, and the following lines...so deep and soulful

"I roll over and into you
like slipping into the deep
and calm waters of the ocean.
The blue green light in your room
like the waters closing over me,
pulling me down.."

What I did not like:
A bit of lacking in flow...but its not too much.. its ok.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of The Answers  
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
Real, felt and touching.

Content:
Thoughtful

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Average

What I liked the most:
The vivid description, the link with nature and sane advices.

What may be improved:
The flow.
I wonder why "you" lands up in the last line, so aloof. Is there a reason for it?

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
Innovative and original. Thoughtful

Content:
Painful yet peaceful.

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Obstructed.

What I liked the most:
The concept, the title, what you wanted to convey.

What did not work for me:
The flow of the poem. REad it aloud and see if it works for you.
The order of what you say. Somehow feels disconnected.


Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Two souls  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
Innovative and original

Content:
Felt, Deep, touching and heart-warming.

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Average

What I liked the most:
The lovely concept, the depth of your words, the hidden, the reflected...

What did not work for me:
Something wrong with the verbs, especially in the second stanza.

Few unnecessary words. example: use of word 'me' in the fifth stanza.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Dear God  
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Concept:
Real.

Content:
Praying, struggling.

Form:
Free verse.

Flow:
Average.

What I liked the most:
The concept, searching for lost faith and hope.

What did not appeal to me:
The not-so-great flow. Non- capitalization of start of a sentence(word).

Suggestions:
Read aloud your work and see if you can improve the flow at various places you find it obstructed.

receiving of my prayer? "oF" not required

in a world so filled with dark,
"so" not required

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Concept:
Creative.

Content:
Straight from the heart, simple and felt.

What I liked the most:
The concept, the way you dealt with it, the differentiation you gave.

What did not enthuse me:
Much emphasis on differentiation rather than something more that the mind would like to tell the soul.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Pigeon Parade  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Ha! Ha! I loved the ending. Too good!

I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
Real, original.

Content:
Descriptive, vivid

Form:
Free verse. A little different. Almost seemed like an article to me, rather than a poem.

What i liked the most:
The ending. Hillarious!!

What did not really enthuse me:
The unique way of writing a 'poem'. It seemed like an article to me. Something crucial was missing in it to be called a poem but that's my personal opinion. Please do not be offended.


Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Concept:
Original, thought-provoking.

Content:
Very relevant and makes one ponder on it.

Form:
Flawless rhyme of AABB.

Flow:
Great :)

What I liked the most:
The sensitive and relevant concept and the way you dealt with it, giving the message across.

What may be improved as per my opinion:
The second last stanza almost completed the poem for me. There was an end to it. however, when I read the last one, that seemed good too. Is there some way in which you can get rid of the halt after the second last stanza?

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of your eyes  
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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you consider best.

Concept:
Real and felt.

Content:
Not put into poetry format. Typing mistakes. Words not capitalized.

What I liked:
Your concept of this poem.

What did not work for me:
You did not write it in a poetry format and all things I mentioned in 'content'.


Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Silent Scream  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Concept:
Felt, deep and painful.

Content:
deep and meaningful.

Form:
ABAB rhyme pattern.

Flow:
Almost perfect.

What I liked the most:
The title and tag line pulled me here. I could identify with what they refered to. The poem did not disappoint at all. Its deep, meaningful and flows well.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Broken Dreams  
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Rated: E | (3.5)

I am mentioning what would work better for me, personally. However, the final decision is yours. Do what you deem best.

Concept:
Innovative and unique

Content:
Nice comparisons. Imaginative.

Form:
Free verse

Flow:
Obstructed.

What I liked the most:
Your innovative and imaginative idea of this poem. Loved your concept and your imagination.

What did not work for me:
The flow which is almost absent. It sounds more like an article than a poem. Something that you wish to say but it hasn't realy been formed so that it flows. The line breaks are inapprorpiate, as I feel it.
The ending is very inappropriate. Perhaps you fell short of thoughts..but that seems very sudden.

Suggestion:
Read it out aloud to yourself and do what you deem necessary.


Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of Hush  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Concept:
Innovative.

Content:
Mesmerizing, overpowering.

Form:
Free verse.

Flow:
Almost perfect.
The second last stanza brought the poem to a halt, for me, personally. I thought that was the end until I scrolled down. Perhaps you can change something about the way you have styled it along with some other changes you may deem necessary.

What I liked most:
I loved the magical words, you used. Very appropriate and creates such powerful imagery.
Especially love the last stanza..very beautiful!

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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In affiliation with Showering Acts of Joy Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Concept:
Innovative

Content:
Sounds like a song.

Form:
Free flow

Flow:
sounds fine. obstructed at few places.

Suggestions:
Read the poem aloud to yourself and try and change at places where it doesnt flow well.

What I likeD:
The concept and the way you dealt with it.



Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Concept:
Original, real

Content:
Romantic, depicting longing.

Form:
Free flow

Flow:
Obstructed due to varying length of lines.

Suggestions:
Try to make the lines of same length.
REad the poem out aloud to yourself to see if it sounds right while flowing well and you'll know what's missing.

What I liked:
The concept, the vivid imagery of nature, and the last line. :)

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Review of The Reason  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Concept:
Very real..original.

Content:
Mesmerizing.

Form:
ABCB pattern. flawless.

Flow:
Perfect

What I liked:
Everything from the concept to the form and the lovely flow. Beautiful!

What can be improved:
I am not very taken in by the title. The poem is lovely but I am not sure how many people would get to its meaning by that title and thereby miss the pleasure of reading a lovely poem.



Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Concept:
Personal, original, real.

Content:
Deep, painful.

Form:
Free flow.

Flow:
Obstructed by varying length of sentences.

My Personal Opinion:

What I liked:
Loved the theme. very emotional and touching. I loved the way you use your words. very charming. Your imagination and visualization is amazing.

What may be improved:
A couple of typing mistakes in there:

Wasted youth and promises left empty on the ground of DESPAIR, the pieces far TOO shattered to rebuild.

Falling out of love is never as good AS falling into it


I think the poem would improve a great deal if sentences were shortened or divided into two or more.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Concept:
Original, real.

Content:
Private, deep, full of feelings.

Form:
Free flow.

Flow:
Obstructed at a few places, especially the last line.

What I liked most:
The title and the first line (very visual).

Suggestions:
Read it out loud to yourself and see if you can do something about the places where the flow is obstructed.

Write on!

Cheers!
Christina

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