Format: Contest entry last modified-- November 26th, 2013 at 12:27pm Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: The characters were a little unclear; this might be cleared up by stating that the first turkey is Marv (right?). The plot is clear and timely.
Technical errors: The comma after the quote in line two is not necessary as the dialog is already punctuated with a question mark.
Overall: Cute story.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--August 22nd, 2013 at 5:03p Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Simple scene of a boy who doesn't live up to his father's expectations. Interesting thought thrown in, that he literally talks to animals.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Good job.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--10:34pm on 01-25-2013 Word count--Unfortunately, your entry has only 54 words and so cannot be considered for a prize. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Simple and amusing plot. I hope his friend is wiser with his loan this time--or has the funds not to mind!
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Good effort.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--11:25pm on 08-30-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: I liked your premise and your word choices, but found the vague description of the prey resulted in some disturbing imagery: was it another insect? a toddler? a DACHSHUND?
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Good parts, but dissatisfying whole.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--3:04pm on 08-23-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Simple plot, phrasing that conveys the character's embarassment. Who hasn't worried about this kind of thing when buying something personal?
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall:Nice job.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--6:16pm on 08-25-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: The plot is simple, clear, and you imply the events to come. The characters are familiar, and using their names and this dialogue structure orients the reader to what is going on.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Interesting story; written well
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Format: Contest entry last modified--1:06pm on 07-12-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Concise plot, fun juxtapositions of words & images. Ambiguity of referent in subsequent sentences was amusing, if unintentional (did the scientists or the rats write poetry, etc?).
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Interesting!
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Format: Contest entry last modified--8:42pm on 05-19-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: It sets the stage for an interesting encounter, but seems incomplete; we don't have any idea about who they are, or what comes before/after this scene.
Technical errors: Review punctuation (question mark should go after may I sit down, for example.)
Overall: Nice effort.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--10:56am on 05-15-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Obviously one scene from a larger story, but your careful word choices and the images you include give a clear context so that this scene stands alone to tell the whole story. Good use of familiar elements to explain a futuristic situation.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Nice job!
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Format: Contest entry last modified--7:44pm on 04-22-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Good plot, good word choices and descriptions for this genre. I did wonder if the first line was supposed to be a written instruction received by the narrator; it is presented as a verbal instruction, but no one seems to be speaking.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Very suspenseful!
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Format: Contest entry last modified--4:55am on 04-22-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: The characters are clear, but plot is absent. The piece seems to only present the role reversal with its having little known effect.
Technical errors: Not sure the "reading of rights" was in effect at the time of Holmes & Watson, unless these are modern characters of the same name. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Nice reversal.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--1:34pm on 03-24-2012 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Great story, lots of action, and wonderfully unique perspective. Usually, the layout doesn't matter, but it complemented this particular story well.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Excellent!
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Format: Contest entry last modified--5:25pm on 12-25-2011 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Clear, concise, if a little predictable. Some good imagery. Would have preferred a different phrase structure instead of repeated "He looked" in sentences 3 & 4.
Technical errors: Comma needed in "half man, half human." Also--"man" or "human" seems to be a wrong word. Half man, half lion?
Overall: Interesting sci-fi entry.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--1:55am on 12-12-2011 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Almost has a plot, but falls apart with the use of "alas" and the disconnect with his son's desire to sled. Some of the rhyming seems quite forced, especially in the last three lines.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Fun idea, but awkwardly executed in spots.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--3:22pm on 11-29-2011 Word count--Unfortunately, your entry contains only 54 words and so cannot be considered for a prize. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Good sensory words. Sparse plot. Wording of the second sentence struck me as odd--the moon would only have a shadow during an eclipse...more likely its light would be a guide.
Technical errors: Last sentence should also be in past tense; preterit of "plead" is "pleaded."
Overall: Lovely imagery.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--3:22pm on 11-29-2011 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Good sensory words. Sparse plot. Wording of the second sentence struck me as odd--the moon would only have a shadow during an eclipse...more likely its light would be a guide.
Technical errors: Last sentence should also be in past tense; preterit of "plead" is "pleaded."
Overall: Lovely imagery.
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Format: Contest entry last modified-- 2:49pm on 11-13-2011 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Plot is focused on a sort of microevent, but is so vividly described that it seems as if a monumental event of nature is unfolding. I liked the imagery and the unusual perspective.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Good job!
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