Format: Contest entry last modified--9:57am on 03-18-2010 Word count--Unfortunately, your story contains 56 words and so cannot be considered for a prize. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: I liked how you conveyed the excitement of a game and the battle between opposing teams.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Good effort--watch word count restrictions!
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Format: Contest entry last modified--4:43am on 02-06-2010 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: You've used an unusual point of view and picked words that convey lots of image and emotion--naked, thirsty, stripped, prison, etc. Plot was simple and effective.
Technical errors: I think the word 'drug' should be 'dragged.'
Overall: Creative!
Congratulations on winning second place in Round 135 of "Invalid Item" !
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Format: Contest entry last modified--5:21pm on 11-30-2009 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: This vignette of a man lashing out has good action, but no context--is this self-defense? Revenge? Sparring practice? Swatting a mosquito? The narrator point-of-view shifts in the last line. (If your intention was to express Joe's thought, it should be italicized.) Three uses of the word "time" in one line wasted an opportunity. When you only have 55 words, make them count!
Technical errors: Add a comma between "body" and "spurred."
Overall: Good emotion, but lacked plot.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--6:24pm on 10-28-2009 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Nice plot, nicely written.
Technical errors: Remove semicolon from I launched a snowball; smacking his forehead. Add 'had' in final sentence to use correct verb tense: I had finally confronted our bully.
Overall: Good job.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--7:36pm on 09-18-2009 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: I found myself with several questions--how did the anteater get into a cave, for one. I also would have expected the python to coil itself around the victim rather than bite.
Technical errors: The dialogue should probably be italicized, not in quotes, unless the snake is actually speaking the dialogue out loud. In your item description, I think the word you are looking for is "predatory," not "predatorous."
Overall: The circle of life continues in a dark cave.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--3:59am on 09-01-2009 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Clear plot, complete story. Some nice word choices. I think some phrases, such as "Smile lit my face..." and "Bouncing off hood," show the strain of the word countlimit.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Good job.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--3:37pm on 07-12-2009 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: I would probably change "Sight is impaired to lily pads of light" to "sight is limited to..." You have good descriptions and set a mood, but some of the phrasing is almost haiku-like in its sparseness, which seems to show the strain of limited word-count.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Good descriptions.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--5:28pm on 07-14-2009 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Good distillation of their life together. I would probably change "obsessed by" to "obsessed with." The question of whether she deserted/died willingly (or if her decision led to her death) did detract from the emotional impact a little for me.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Good job.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--3:13pm on 05-30-2009 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: The scenario is easily imagined and though not much is known about Wally, his "type" is familiar. Good word choices--itching, popping up, humming, etc. I did wonder what would happen next, and if he's successful in his hunt.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Nice job.
Congratulations on winning second place in Round 97 of "Invalid Item" !
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Format: Contest entry last modified--3:23pm on 04-04-2009 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Kids learn a valuable safety lesson in this classroom scene. The plot seemed focused on providing context for the punchline, rather than building up to it naturally.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Definitely a cautionary tale!
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Format: Contest entry last modified--6:51pm on 03-04-2009 Word count--Unfortunately, your entry contains 56 words and so cannot be considered for a prize. ("doo-wop"=2) Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Great images and word choices, good sense of time and context.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Nicely done...except for word count!
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Format: Contest entry last modified--4:55pm on 12-20-2008 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Conveys strong emotion and depicts and internal struggle, but does not meet the contest criteria for beginning, middle, and end of a plot.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Nice personal story.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--11:44am on 12-19-2008 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Plot is incomplete with regards to who this character is, how he/she got there, time, etc. Intriguing struggle to keep exhaustion from giving in to death. Repetition of "sing" derails the flow a little.
Technical errors: None noted. Thanks for your careful attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar!
Overall: Some good images.
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Format: Contest entry last modified--10:05pm on 12-17-2008 Word count--Exactly 55 words. Content rating--Appropriate.
Plot and content: Larger plot is unclear in this brief scene. Without the item description ("on the eve of battle"), it's not even clear why the father is leaving. Why does he only nod to his wife--surely a more tender gesture of goodbye would be in order if he's really not coming back?
Technical errors: Last sentence should read "doubted they knew" instead of "doubt" to keep verb tenses consistent.
Overall: Good effort, but needs polishing.
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