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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Conorwriting, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Love's Dancing Petals "  by Conorwriting

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A declaration of loyalty to a lifetime partner. Well written with a unique rhyming pattern that gives a steady flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A beautiful picture of times landscape is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can see in the grammar spelling or mechanics.

Conorwtiting, Thank you for sharing this delightful poem, is a joy to read. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Jay, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"My Future Children"  by Jay

Clarity:A good title for this work.

Writing style:Letter to my future children.


Overall impressions: Wouldn't it be nice to be able to reach into the future to advise our loved ones.
A unique idea for this short story. The emotion can be felt from this strong work.

Jay, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider line spacing to make it easier for the reader and more appealing to a browser.
A proofread and edit never hurts. Shorten any long rambling sentences.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Myles Abroad, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"An Overactive Imagination"  by Myles Abroad.

Clarity:A nice title for this story.

Writing style:Suspense drama.


Overall impressions:A well written and structured story given it a realistic tone.

Good characters sharing realistic dialog.

Great job with the descriptions, they paint the stories images well for this reader.

Myles Abroad, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

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Review of Buffy  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Tracker, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Buffy"  by tracker

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Tracker this is a beautifully written work of art. Emotions jump out of this poem and grab the reader. Well chosen words and a unique rhyming scheme give this poem an unforgettable flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: Your artistic voice shows as you bring Buffy the orange haired cat back to life with this classic poem. Well done.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems with the spelling, grammar or mechanics.

Tracker, thank you for sharing this awesome work. It has been a joy to read and has inspired me.
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Big Bad Wolf, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"True Grit Book-Movie-Remake"  by Big Bad Wolf is hopping

Clarity:A good title for this entertaining comparison story.

Writing style: Reviewing and comparing works to one another.

My favorite line:--- At first, the trio doesn't get along, but after a while, they warm up to each other.---

Overall impressions:A great comparison of the two movies to the original book.

A great job describing the movies, it has been a while since I've seen them but you brought them back to life for me.

Big Bad Wolf, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi AmyJo, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Home for a Holiday"  by AmyJo-only 2 steps behind

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful holiday poem. Well-worded with a nice structure to create a nice flow for this poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:---Dreaming of a white Christmas and being with the family-- those two lines say it all in a few words.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems with the spelling grammar or mechanics that I see.

AmyJo thanks for sharing this poem, it has taking me back to the holidays.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (3.5)

My impressions of: "The Project 2435 words"  by amateur40

Does the title describe the story? The title does not describe this story.

What is the style? Action/adventure drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Other: By listing 3 genres your story will be able to be found and read by more viewers looking for that time genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening lines could be better grab this readers attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?Better line-spacing would make this story easier to read for a reader especially those with weak eyes.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Amateur40, thanks for sharing this adventure tale. It is an interesting story.

Well written adventure story full of action. Very detailed descriptions.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider line-spacing and a blank line between paragraphs to make it easier for the reader. A good proofread and edit to catch any typos or mistakes. A title better describing the contents of this story.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

Joseph

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Review of I am jobless  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi Ashok Banerjee, Welcome to the disability writers group and WDC.
I feel sure you will like it here as I do.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "I am jobless "  by Ashok Banerjee

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nicely worded poem that most readers will probably relate to. A nice twist with the humorous ending.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This poem paints a picture of going for a job interview. Most everyone has had this experience before, that's why they will relate to this original poem.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problem at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics .

Ashok Banerjee, thank you for sharing this unique poem I have enjoyed reading it.
Write On!

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Review of 17. Blindsided  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

My impressions of: "17. Blindsided"  by aracrae

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this work.

What is the style? Biographical drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Thriller/Suspense, LGBTQ+

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening line, however it could be stronger to grab the readers attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?Nicely structured, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Well written story with a good structure.

Well described with a lot of detail. This helps the reader to picture the scene's.

Good characters sharing well-written dialog.

The story ends with a lot of action keeping the reader drowned in, and wanting to know more with a little mystery at the end.

If I had to make a suggestion: A good proofread and edit never hurts consider a stronger opening line to draw the reader in faster.

Aracrae, Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

Joseph

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi J.R. Pete I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Masterly - Express it in Eight - 4-1-24"  by J.R.Pete

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A great job for this acrostic poem. This short poem is deep and says a lot in only a few words.


Artistic Voice and Imagery:A masterpiece, sometimes we get so caught up with worldly matters that we become overwhelmed. That's when its best to step back and reboot.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:All looks good for me.

J.R.Pete this eight line poem has said a lot to me, thanks for sharing your work.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Monster V, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"The Crocodile and The Plover"  by Monster V

Clarity:A great title that describes this story well.

Writing style: Childrens, animal drama.

My favorite lines:--The crocodile seemed content with her answer and turned around to slide back down into the river, shouting a good-bye as he swam off. The plover herself shouted back and quickly took off, her belly full and ready to feed her hatchlings.--

Overall impressions:Monster V this is a delightful and entertaining tale, thanks for sharing it.

Well written words that make this story relaxing and joyful.

Nicely structured giving the story a delightful flow and making it easy for the reader.

Reads like a classic fairy-tale.

thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Kevin, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The Stuttering Hedgehog of WW Two."  by Kevin F Dunn

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:WOW! What an epic work. A nice touch by using stuttering in a positive way. A unique rhyming pattern that works great for this poem and enhances the overall tone.
Formatted well with a catchy structure that is easy for the reader.

With the short attention span of today's reader, I wonder if this classic poem may actually be to long for children, or young children.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:You are blessed with an artistic voice . For me this poem paints a nice cartoon like image of WW2.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see nothing at all wrong with the grammar, spelling or mechanics.

Kevin F Dunn, thank you for sharing this strong ballad this reader has thoroughly enjoyed it.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review of A World of My Own  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi LeJenD' I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "A World of My Own"  by LeJenD' Looking Up

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A deep and emotional work worded well and written nicely in an easy to read structure. A unique rhyming scheme with the end results being a nice flow for this poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The words of this poem carry a unique rhythm or tone. Very catchy.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Except for the capitalization of IS in the fourth line I see no problems with the grammar, spelling or mechanics of this work.


LeJenD', thank you for sharing this strong and unique poem, it is a joy to read.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Grass, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "My beautiful survivor"  by Grass

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Grass, this is a nicely written strong and emotional love poem.
Well worded work with a very nice structure that makes it easy for the Reader .

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This unique poem carries a nice realistic sounding flow

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

Hi Joy I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Love Among the Ruins"  by Joy

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Paradelle seems to be a unique
and somewhat difficult style. Well written poem, especially considering paradelle style.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This poem shows that obviously you have a very
artistic voice to be experimenting in this way.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems with the mechanics or grammar.

Joy, thank you for sharing this unique style work, I am thinking about trying it myself.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "The Amazing Low-Cost Laser Box Cutter"  by Graywriter

Does the title describe the story? A great title for this entertaining story.

What is the style? sci-fi marketing drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Sci-fi, Crime/Gangster, Thriller/Suspense

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening line for this work.

Is the structure good for the reader? very well structured story. A bit more lines spacing would help this reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Greywriter, this is a great story I hope you won the writers cramp contest. Thank you for sharing this work it was a joy to read, very entertaining .

Very well written. Are you a marketing expert? It looks like you had input from one. It sure reads like very accurate marketing information on products like we read every day on Amazon and such.

A good touch with the National Enquirer and the other news agencies. They all read very realistic like everyday news.

Well done this is a great article. It goes with the times because these days it probably could be true because you can buy anything online cheap.


If I had to make a suggestion: Well structured, consider experimenting with a bit more linespacing to help the Readers with week eyes.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

Joseph

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Gervic, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Touch Me Once More"  by Gervic

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A unique rhyming scheme with the 1st 2 stanzas and none for the last one. This works well for this poem and gives it a nice flow.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A love poem in dream form.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Structure looks good I can see no problem with the grammar or mechanics .

Gevic, thanks for sharing this delightful love poem, it is a good read. I sure did enjoy it.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "1. Phone Calls in the Dark"  by aracrae

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Suspense drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Thriller/Suspense, LGBTQ+

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does get my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?Well structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:aracrae, thanks for sharing this entertaining adventure it has been a joy to read.

A original style for this well-written realistic tale. This gives the story a good flow that slowly draws the reader in.

Good characters that come to life through descriptions that keep them real. This helps the reader to relate with the story-line.

Nicely written dialog that help the characters seem believable. Most readers will be able to relate because the characters seem like everyday people, could be your neighbors. This helps keep the Readers attention throughout the story.

A good touch with an unexpected twist at the end that leave the reader wanting to know more.



If I had to make a suggestion:A good proof read and edit never hurts.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

Joseph

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Review of Heaven And Hell  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi dogpack:saving 4 premium:DWG! After reading "Heaven And Hell" , I offer you these comments:


My impressions of: "Heaven And Hell"  by dogpack:saving 4 premium:DWG


Clarity, does the title describe this story?:A good title for this inspirational story .

Style: personal spiritual view.

Genres, are 3 listed? Inspirational, Educational, Personal

My two cents: dogpack, thank you for sharing this well written and informative testament. I have enjoyed reading it and in agreement with pretty much everything you said.

My favorite line:---God does not want puppets therefore we have bee given the gift of free will.---

A strong inspirational work. Well chosen words that give this work a powerful flow.




Structured easy for the reader? a well constructed article however a little more line spacing would help us readers with weak eyes.


Any suggestions?Consider a stronger opening to better ground the readers attention . Perhaps double spacing with the extra line between some of the longer paragraphs would make it easier to read and less intimidating for a potential reader or browser.

Write on!
Joseph

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Review of Greed  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Drake, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Greed"  by Drake

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A short unique poem with a lot of emotion shouting out. A good ryming scheme.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:Love and lost love is often found in poetry.

Drake, thank you for sharing this short yet deep poem. It has taken my mind in a different direction.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Ravi ! After reading "The curse became a blessing" , I offer you these comments:


My impressions of: "The curse became a blessing"  by Ravi Ranjan Goswami


Clarity, does the title describe this story?:A good title for this tale.

Style: Mythological fantasy drama.

Genres, are 3 listed?Drama, Folklore, Cultural

My impressions:: Well written tale with good characters and descriptions. A curse backfires and makes the prince young forever.

Ravi thanks for sharing this entertaining folktale it is a good read.


Structured easy for the reader? More line-spacing and a blank between paragraphs would make it easier to read for us older weak eyed ones.


Write on!
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "LOST SPIRIT OR ANTIE'S BEDTIME TALES III"  by CBH

Does the title describe the story? A good title however does not really describe this chapter.

What is the style? History, folklore.

Are there 3 genre listings? Folklore, Supernatural, History

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening. Could be stronger to grab the readers attention.

Is the structure good for the reader? A nicely laid out story. It would be easier and less intimidating for the reader if it had line spacing.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:CBH thank you for sharing this informative story. I have enjoyed hearing some history from a different country therefore all new for me.

A well written story, very informative on some Moroccan history.

In school most of us learn mostly history from our country and know little about the rest of the world's history, therefore this is all new to me and I really enjoyed it.

Well-worded story, I especially like the way that you did the ending.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider line spacing or even double spacing to make it easier on us older readers, who's eyes are getting weaker. Perhaps break the long paragraphs down into shorter ones this looks less intimidating to a browser or potential reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

Joseph

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)


Hi Carly! After reading "Freedom on Route 23" , I offer you these comments:

My impressions of: "Freedom on Route 23"  by Carly


Clarity, does the title describe this story?:A good title for this story.

Style: Personal travel drama.

Genres, are 3 listed? Travel, Contest, Other

Plot: An adventure for a young couple on route 23 from upper Michigan to Florida.

This entertainment story reads as a true story, I just wonder if it is since it was also a contest entry.

Well written and very good use of the prompt words.
I hope you won the contest.

Characters:Rye and Carly.

Structured easy for the reader? A good structured story that is easy for the reader.


Any suggestions?None.

Write on!
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "The Toilet Paper- Paper"  by Bunny Sox

Does the title describe the story? Great title for this informative article.

What is the style? Informative article.

Are there 3 genre listings? Cultural, Folklore, Technology

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however it could be stronger to better grab the reader's attention.

Is the structure good for the reader? Nicely constructed article.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Bunny Sox, thank you for sharing this informative article that I ran across while random reviewing. It is a good read.

Today most people do not realize that toilet paper itself has not been around that long at all.

This article is well written and very informative.

A good idea for this article most people enjoy knowing the history of a product.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a stronger opponent to grab the readers attention quick. Although the structure is good a bit more line spacing would not hurt to make it easier and less intimidating for the reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

Joseph

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "QUINTANILLA \PEREZSELENA/UNA"  by Captbike

Does the title describe the story? A good title that somewhat describes the contents of the story.

What is the style? biographical true story.

Are there 3 genre listings? Other, Biographical, Activity

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however could be stronger to grab the reader's attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?A good structure. More linespacing would make it a bit easier for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Nicely written and very informative article.

I have heard of the death that ended her career. This is the first account of the aerobics story that I have heard.

Captbike, thank you for this informative article. I enjoyed this knowledge.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening to better grab the readers attention. A bit of line-spacing would make it easier and more appealing to a reader.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

WRITE ON! GOD BLESS YOU. Keep writing!

Joseph

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