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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My impressions of the poem: "Cry of the Banshee"  by elizjohn

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well worded with a unique rhyming pattern that gives this poem a nice original flow.

Elizjohn, thank you for sharing this unique work I have enjoyed reading it. I had just read your poem "of pirates and villains, mothers and sons" it was so good that I had to read another. Thank you.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:This poem works the words together making a great tone for this work.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:A nicely structured poem.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My impressions of the poem: "Of Pirates & Villains, Mothers & Sons"  by elizjohn

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:elizjohn, this is a beautiful poem with a great rhyming scheme.
Thank you for sharing this unique and original work of art. This reader has enjoyed reading it. Thank you.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:Jack the Knife is a strong character. An excellent job, writing a poem this size that makes since with the words flowing together so well. I know it is no easy task. You have an artistic voice.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Nice layout and structure for this unique work of art .

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
My impressions of the poem: "Easter/Spring Sonnet"  by D.B.


Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:D. B. Thank you for Sharon this artistic work I have enjoyed reading it, thank you.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A unique rhyming scheme for this beautiful poem. Well-worded and well-written giving a unique flow to this poem.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Nicely structured and easy for the reader.

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review of Manna  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My impressions of the poem:"Manna"  by Dave.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Dave, Thank you for sharing this strong poem, I have enjoyed reading it. It has given me some idea's.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:Nice job for this sapphic verse poem. The poem reminds me of spring .

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: A beautifully structured work with a unique flow

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My impresions of the poem:"Sunshine On The Vernal Equinox"  by Prosperous Snow Valentine.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A nice form with the mirror that lets a few words say a lot. Short and to the point just the way today's readers like things .

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The equinoxes are signs of the changing seasons usually coming when we are ready for change .

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: A nicely structured poem that really has a good flow, well done .

Prosperous Snow Valentine, thank you so much for sharing this unique and strong poem, I enjoyed reading it, thank you

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
My impressions of the poem: "wearing green for St Patrick's Day"  by JCosmos

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well worded St Patricks Day green poem. I agree with your poem and I to have some Irish in me and wear green on St Patrick's Day.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:This strong poem makes me see green. :)

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:JCosmos, thank you for sharing this green poem it is a joy to read .

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of:"Let’s Pretend We Won The Lottery "  by Wrexgor

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? Fantasy how to drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Satire, Entertainment: By listing 3 genres your work will be found by mare readers looking for that genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening that does grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader? A good structure for this article.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Wrexgor, thank you for sharing this unique work it was a joy to read. If you win the lottery let's split it. :)

well written with all good ideas. Well done.

If I had to make a suggestion: Nice structure, consider experimenting with a bit more spacing and larger font.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review of Tiny Dancers  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:"Tiny Dancers"  by HuntersMoon

Artistic Voice and Imagery:A great title for this green poem about nature.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:Well written. Well worded with a ryming scheme that has a artistic flow. Simple is what makes this poem beautiful.

HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing this inspirational poem. It has inspired me to want to write. WellDone!

Thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
My impressions of the poem: "Sea in which we intertwine"  by St. Francis II

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A nice rhyming pattern that flows well.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:My favorite line is ---" No end to the secrets the sea does keep.---"

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Nice structure and well worded.

St. Francis II, thank you for sharing this strong poem, this reader has enjoyed it.


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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Some parents need to grow up."  by Kathleen Cochran

Does the title describe the story? A great title for this article.

What is the style? Parenting advise.

Are there 3 genre listings? Parenting, Children's, Family

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does get my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?A good structure that makes it easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one Kathleen, thank you for sharing this educational article. I agree with you 100% and have enjoyed reading this article, thank you.

We were raised the same way if you get in trouble at school you get it again at home. Things are so much different now than then. Kids seem way different to.

Well written article with a good structure that is easy for the reader.

I think the title says it best.

If I had to make a suggestion:None.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Random Spontaneous Donation"  by ~MisticMoon~aka SilverMoon

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Biographical.

Are there 3 genre listings? Other: By listing 3 genres your story can be found by more readers who are looking for that style genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:MisticMoon, thanks for sharing this original story. I have thoroughly enjoyed reading it. It does me good to know that there are good people like you in the world.

Well written and told story.

Good dialogue. Well described helping the reader to visualize the scene.

I agree that we should not judge anyone unless we have walked in their shoes.

If I had to make a suggestion: A good proofread and edit never hurts.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "The Tale of Peter Piglet"  by Dave Ryan

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? Fantasy childrens story.

Are there 3 genre listings? Contest Entry, Children's, Nonsense

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Well structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Dave Ryan, thank you for sharing this entertaining tale. This reader has enjoyed it.

A unique structure for this tale.

Well written and narrated with good, likable characters.

Good descriptions that help the reader to get into the story.


If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Sophomoric Juveniles"  by WinchesterJones

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Personal drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Other: By listing at least three genres your work will be able to be found by more readers.

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does grab this Readers attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?A nicely structured work. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Your friend Doug sounds a lot like some old friends I used to have.

A well written and well described story that held this reader's attention well.
That horn blowing lady I've seen before too.
Winchester thank you for sharing this entertaining Tale this reader has enjoyed.


If I had to make a suggestion:None

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Seamus’ Leprechaun"  by Words Whirling 'Round

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? Fantasy folklore drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Folklore, Young Adult, Comedy

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening however it could be stronger to grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nice structure, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Words Whirling 'Round, thanks for sharing this entertaining story, this reader has enjoyed it.

Well written story with a strong character. I like Seamus.

Good dialog with an Irish accent.

Good descriptions that help the reader visualize the story.

A nice folklore style narrative.

If I had to make a suggestion:Consider a stronger opening.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Sam Adams and the leprechauns"  by JCosmos

Does the title describe the story? A great title for this story.

What is the style? Fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Action/Adventure, Travel, Contest Entry

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening. It could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nice structure, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:JCosmos, thank you for sharing this entrtaining short story, I have enjoyed reading it.

Well written short story with a bit of humer.

Nice twist for the ending. Well done.

If I had to make a suggestion:A stronger opening line.

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Review of McCarthy Forever!  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

My impressions of: "McCarthy Forever!"  by Kare Enga in Udon Thani

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Family personal drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Family, Dark, Death

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening, however it could grab my attention better.

Is the structure good for the Reader? Structured nicely making it easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:
well written and entertaining story.

A nice job using the footnotes.

What a day to be Irish.

Kare Enga in Udon Thani ,Thank you for sharing this unique story it is a good read.

If I had to make a suggestion:.

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Review of Room 314  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

My impressions of: "Room 314"  by Tori Purchase

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Mystery horror drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening, however it could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured, easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Tori, Thank you for sharing this mystery story, it is a good read.

Well written and structured story.

Good descriptions making the story a bit emotional for the reader.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a bit more action and maybe just a little dialogue.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

My impressions of: "Chapter 005: Heal Thy Own Wounds"  by Troyizen

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? Mythological fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure: By listing all 3 genres your story will be available and read by more people.

Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening does grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?A good structure, looks professional and easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Troyizen, thanks for sharing this entertaining tale. It is a joy to read.

Great descriptions, helping the reader visualize the setting and characters.

Strong characters with good dialog. This helps the reader keep up and stay into the story.

A good flow, this helps readers get into the story-line.

A good writing style that I think most readers will relate to.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a little mystery at the ending to make the reader want to read the next chapter.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Chapter 008: The Crow Learns to Count"  by Troyizen

Does the title describe the story? A good title for this story.

What is the style? mythological fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure: By listing 3 genres your work will be found by more browsers that are looking for stories in that genre.

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that draws my attention fair.

Is the structure good for the Reader? Nicely structured making it very easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Troyizen hi, I came across this interesting tale while random reviewing. Thank you for sharing it it is a good read .

A bird taken a census count seems like a good idea .

Well written and well told making this a entertaining story .

Strong likable characters with good dialogue . This helps the reader to relate to the story .

Good narrative and well described helping the Reader to picture the scene .

A good ending, it could haven't been more a cliffhanger to make the reader want to turn the page.

If I had to make a suggestion: Consider a stronger opening and ending with a bit of a cliffhanger.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

My impressions of: "Chapter 012: Teachings of Thresh"  by Troyizen

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story fairly.

What is the style? fantasy friendship drama

Are there 3 genre listings? Fantasy, Action/Adventure

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening that does grab my attention .

Is the structure good for the Reader?A great structure for this story very easy to read for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Troyizen, I came across this story while random reviewing . Thank you for sharing it. This is very entertaining and well written .

Strong characters with the great dialogue . This helps the reader to get into this story .

A nice professional structure that makes it very easy to read . This story maintains a consistent good flow.

Very good descriptions that help the reader to visualize the setting.

Well done, this is an awesome story.

If I had to make a suggestion:None.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review of 15th March  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

My impressions of: "15th March"  by Ameliorating

Does the title describe the story? Good title, more of a diary title.

What is the style? Diary entry style.

Are there 3 genre listings? Experience, Adult, Other

Does the opening line grab my attention? A good opening however it could better draw my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader? For my read the structure seems a bit out of whack.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Ameliorating A, thank you for sharing this unique work. I came across this while random reviewing. I have enjoyed it.

Well worded and told, does read more like a diary entry but that's OK.

I agree with you sometimes it is hard to figure out what is right.

If I had to make a suggestion: Perhaps double spacing format would help, the structure format is showing up wrong on my computer. The punctuation for periods seems to be in the wrong places not at the end of the sentence like usual.

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review of FIRE & LIGHT  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "FIRE & LIGHT"  by Mayon57

Does the title describe the story? A nice title for this story.

What is the style? Sci-fi adventure drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Sci-fi, Horror/Scary, Other

Does the opening line grab my attention?A good opening that does catch my attention.

Is the structure good for the reader?A good structure that makes it easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion:Hey Mayo57, I came across this story while random reviewing. An Awesome story. I bet this took a while. I like the reference to Star Trek.

Well-written and told, holding the readers attention fair.

Great descriptions that make it easy to picture the scene. This holds the readers attention good.

This story maintains a realistic tone. This helps readers relate to the story.

Good dialog with plenty of action. A lot of sci-fi science for this reader to keep up with.

Mayon57 thank you for sharing this entertaining sci-fi adventure. This reader has enjoyed it.
Awesome Work!


If I had to make a suggestion:Consider breaking down into chapters, A good job with the dialog, some could be edited to flow better.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

My impressions of: "Little Girls in Parks"  by Winchester Jones

Does the title describe the story? The title describes the story well.

What is the style? A realistic drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Contest Entry, Other: By listing all three genres your work will be found by more readers.

Does the opening line grab my attention? The opening could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Nicely structured. Easy for the reader.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Hey Winchester, I like this story, well done. Especially considering it was done in 24 hours.

Well-written story with good characters and descriptions. Good dialog with a nice flow.

I like the twist at the end.

Thank you for sharing this entertaining story.

If I had to make a suggestion:None

Thank you for sharing your work; that is a major step in writing.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

My impressions of the poem:"I Never liked Wednesdays"  by p.b.sandwixh

Clarity: A good title for this emotional poem.
Style: Romance/Love, Nature, Other

My 2 cents is only one opinion: p.b.sandwixh, I came across this lovely work while random reviewing. A well worded strong and emotional poem. Thank you for sharing it this Reader has enjoyed reading it.

It reads sort of like 2 separate poems the second one being "that baby is what you do for me. "

Well written giving it a nice flow all the way through.
Thank you.


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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)

My impressions of: "Are We Ever Getting Out Of Here"  By Phoenix

Does the title describe the story? A nice title for this story.

What is the style? Teen fantasy drama.

Are there 3 genre listings? Adult, Entertainment, Environment

Does the opening line grab my attention?The opening could better grab my attention.

Is the structure good for the Reader?Needs formatting and breaks. It is intimidating for a possible reader when there is no space between the lines and appears like a long paragraph.

My two cents worth is only one opinion: Phoenix, thanks for sharing this entertaining story I have enjoyed it.

Well-written story-line with good descriptions and good characters.

A unique idea for this story, I can see there is a lot of potential.



If I had to make a suggestion: Consider breaking down the structure into short paragraphs, and double spacing. This will make it more appealing to a reader plus easier to read.. A good proofread and edit to catch any mistakes, typo's and sentences that are too long and rambling.

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