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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of Girl in the Mirror

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Stepping through the years using a mirror. Two people from different eras meet.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Brenda Mitchell is from the sixties and is a sixteen year old high school student.The other is from 2006

FINAL THOUGHTS:


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Review of He Who Fills All  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of He Who Fills All

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poem portraying the power of God as he was involved in the act of creation.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

It speaks of the different elements of creation and God having His hand in each element.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of You And I  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of You and I

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A comparison of you and I. Over and over again the writer looks at the similarities and differences.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

It only looks at this comparison.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more. I always enjoy your work.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of We'll Make It Work

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction story about a young man who does not seem to be able to promote himself. He tries many different occupations until he works on small engine repair at which he has a talent.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Stan tried many things until he tried repairing engines.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of SELF SATISFACTION  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Self-Satisfaction

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Challenging article to promote self-satisfaction.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Shorter words, sentences and phrases make reading slower.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font. This is difficult to read. Shorter sentences would also be helpful (see sentence two).

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Deer Fish  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Deer Fish

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Can you imagine a salmon with antlers? Obviously this is impossible.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A simple element with no definite results.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of mGur on Spirit  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of mGur on Spirit

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A Tibetan form of poetry relying on set number of syllables.
Interesting about expressing the freedom like a bird has in its ability to fly.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I have no suggestions for improvement.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of A tribute to President George H.W. Bush 1924 - 2018


First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A tribute to the 41st President of the United States, George W Bush.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A synopsis of the life the president.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

More detail.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of The magic  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of XXXXXXXXXXXXXX

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An older man tells a story of a magical time to his grandaugther. The story is full of dragons and wonder. We find in the end he was sharing about the wooodstock music festival.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The grandfather weaves a tale of spiritual magic and wonder. The grandaughter listens to it all with wonder.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Expanse  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Expanse

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction story about a family exploring space.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The Hutchins are two experienced astronauts who are in a spacecraft with their unnamed baby girl who is destined to continue to explore space.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

More children? Mpre detail please. Use a larger font and break into paragraphs.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Peace as my mind's chatter becomes numb

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The poem is about making butter from cream.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Twelve verses. The first is four lines long and the remainder three lines. The first verse has no rhyming scheme but all the rest each line in the verse rhymes.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I liked the poem.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Before I Die  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Before I Die

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A person thinking ahead to his/her death and making some bold statements about what they want to make sure and say.

POETRY INFORMATION:

free verse with no rhyming pattern.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I am (a) loner.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of The Farmer's Pig  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of The Farmer's Pig

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction story about a farm which seems to have an outstanding pig that goes beyond the norm to assist the farmer in the running of the farm. the pig even protects the farm from a pair of thieves

PLOT AND CHARACTER INFORMATION:

The pig is called Moo Shoo and is the protector for this farm. The pig is also too much to believe. This is almost a fairy tale.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

The play on the name for the pig to Moo Shoo Pork for the adage at the end is almost beyond reason.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)



Review of NON project defining I AM

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A listing of bible verses that show that the term I AM Jesus used to state he was also God.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Of course God and Jesus are in essence the same. Great list of references.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Perhaps more detail of the verses.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of A Best Selling Book

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good little flash fiction story. However it does need some editing.
There are a few spelling errors.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I think a larger font will also make the story easier to read.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Lost  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Lost

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good piece of flash fiction as well as good interaction between characters.

CHARACTER INFORMATION:

A smart little girl who is confronted be a leprechaun and she outwits him into providing his gold.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Similiar stories would be appreciated.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Facing His Fears  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)



Review of Facing His Fears

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The different visual images that the writer must deal with as he develops the acrostic of be aware of his own fear. Fear in so many ways. so many aspects that each of us must deal with.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Just one character. Self Just one emotion. Fear.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Blue bells  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Blue Bells

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short poem based on the blue bell flower.

POETRY INFORMATION:

It is written in free verse and freely describes the wonderful little flower which are the delight of many gardens.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more, there is many images to share.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Working Late  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Working Late

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

About to send that email that allows for your wrath to be deposited on the rightfully guilty person. However it never gets sent because the writer realizes the futility. In this case however the end rather than the delete key is pressed. Makes a very different story.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

One character with his anger. He is steaming and does the thing that makes the story.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Continue the story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I enjoyed how you increased the pent up emotion. Thanks for sharing this item!


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Praying for a Sign

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A love poem where the woman is praying for God's intervention and direction in finding and reconnecting with her lover one.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Four verses each with four lines with a rhyming scheme of A A B B.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

it is a good poem and shows deep feeling.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Holding onto Hope  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of HOLDING ON TO HOPE

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Growing up in the inner city i,s difficult because most of the pressure is very negative. When the majority of your friends are going a different way it is hard to stay focused on a more difficult path, This short piece is directed at doing just that.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A mother is standing up to try to make her daughter see this as the better way.
She is concentrating on her church to aid in that effort.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Some more detail would be great.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of MISSING  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of M I S S I N G

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poster for a missing elephant. Like most poster for lost animals if gives the name and a good description.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I hope they find the missing elephant. The description seems precise.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

The picture helps.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)



Review of Rota, the first draft Chapter One

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. I was directed to this piece using the read and review option.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I was not prepared for talking horses. once the initial shock passed I woundered about making this the first chapter without preparing the reader with some additional informatiion.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A fire has caused this family to lose its home and they must decide what to do.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I saw no errors in spelling or grammar.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Thirty Years of Marriage

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good poem that depicts the thirty years of the poet's marriage. The poem is very positive and was enjoyable to read.

POETRY INFORMATION:

17 four line verses and one six line verse as a conclusion.
The rhyming scheme was A B A B for the four line verses and A B A B A B for that final verse.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I have enjoyed the poem.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Megan's Charm  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Megan's Charm

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A brief overview of the procedure for the birthing of new lambs on a farm with sheep. While I do not raise sheep i found the information interesting.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Megan cares for the rejected lamb that is named Charm.
The care is well documented and interesting.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I saw no errors or omissions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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