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Review of Choices  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)



Review of Choices

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A flash fiction sci-fi story about a young having to work in some mines at school in order to afford things. He dies and even with out saying the wife blames the husband.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Jack and Maggie are the parents of Billy. Flash fiction gives little time for character development.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Good story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of First Date  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of First Date

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A humerous quip about a father seeing his daughter out with a boy on her first date.
Good interaction with short concise bit of dialogue.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

What should a dad say as a girl leaves on first date.
The dialogue defines these characters.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

This could be longer.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of The Valley of Dried Bones

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

While his mother was right that the dried bones were nothing to fear i can understand the young man not wanting ti cross the dried out battle field.
My pressing question is why leave the bones exposed. Should they have not been buried?

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A young man not wanting to cross a dried out valley where the dead were left to rot.
Character development is fine.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Explain why the bodies not buried.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (5.0)




Review of An outline for the Novel, A Son for Prince Koltar

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This item selected using read and review.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A detailed outline for the twenty chapter novel.
there is a breakdown by chapter as well as a general synopsis of the entire novel.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Prose sketch of the Main Characters:

Volusia
Rindar
Moogy
Tupa
Chief Rathome
Lord Marcutti
Prince Koltar

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Great preparation

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Relationship  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Relationship

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A straightforward truth about relationship. It takes time to mature it.
Too often we try to hurry it.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A truth that should be self evident.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

You could expand on this.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of LIGHT  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (3.5)



Review of Light

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Confused is how I would describe this story. There seems to lack of direction for most of the story. A personal tragedy with a motorcycle having hit Jacob who is the main character. All he seems to remember is the light. He has nightmares about it.



PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Jacob seems to be infatuated with another boy but he is unnamed.
When he pays attention to Jacob, Jacob almost runs away.
Then he sees this other person riding a motorcycle with that light that is in his dreams.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Make relationship clearer. Work on personal contacts with other students.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Mystery Weekend  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Mystery Weekend

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A boring weekend changed by a simple jig saw puzzle. This change to Robin hood is very dramatic and an interesting twist. The question arises will he turn back to his old self.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Boredom leads to a simple exploration which ultimately to a very great change in situation. Going from a solver of mysteries to being thrust into one this leads for a good weekend.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

What happens next.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of A New Friendship

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

a lovely little story of a friendship which is made over the need for food.
Many good relationships do actually begin that way.
it interesting that the man fills the bird feeder with seed but it provides for the family of squirrels, A special relationship develops with the smallest squirrel.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The kind man who brings out seed for the birds and the squirrels as well.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more of these backyard nature stories.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)



Review of November 26, 1985

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A presentation to moot court of a hospital's responsibility in the security and risks involved in counselling past violent offenders in an area where others are not advised of the possibility of danger. (I am almost quessing that this is the final arguement that is presented here).

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

This is a great example of legal jargon and official terminology dealing with what seems to be a unwarrented and unsuspected violent crime.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A few side bars to give the unaware people as to what is truely going on here.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thanks for sharing this item (I think)


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Review of Tea for Three.  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Tea for Three

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Interesting poem. i understand the picnic aspect with the two girls but am confused at the four legged, a dog or horse.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Twelve lines of free verse.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I enjoyed it but did not completely understand it.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Our Soulful Union  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Our Soulful Union

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A romantic poem stating the depth of love between the two people. The poem states that this love is all consuming and eternal.

POETRY INFORMATION:

This poem is written in free form.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Paint and Painters

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Everybody eventually gets down and decides to change the colour of their dwelling.
That means getting out the equipment and paint the walls.

POETRY INFORMATION:

there are five four line verses which are each comprised of
two rhyming couplets.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Great inclusion of all aspects of the painting process.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Misguided Methods  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of Misguided Methods

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Man learns how to bring in-aminate objects to life. He does this with mannequins. When he tries to take thier life back, they revolt and attack him.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Jon is the man who brings things to life. Lena is the first mannequin who later rebels, Jon has to destroy her with a hatchet but the others come after him. Like zombies but made of wood.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Journey to Jukai  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)



Review of Journey to Jukai

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft This novel was selected using the read and review option.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A very impressive piece of work. I admit I only skimmed the story bt enjoyed the character development and the ending.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Josh and Emily are prime characters and are developed thru the thirty-six chapters.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Someone I Admire

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Twenty-seven lines of admiration for mother. Simple and straight forward praise.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Random rhyming scheme fits well with the theme.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Dream Wolves

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Interesting story. Perhaps it is all a dream. Wolves do not usually use chains to restrict their prey. Yellowknife is a fairly large community and the area around it also reasonably populated. It seems the large tract of land described in the story would have to be a fair distance from a town.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Ayla Lilly Fang has moved to Yellowknife from Vicksburg. there will be a large difference in so many things. weather, sunlight and distances between things just to name a few. The extremely large grey wolf seems to have human attributes.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Who is Rick? There is too much I statements in the story. Describe what where who and why without always expressing what your only character is doing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of The Letter Home  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)



Review of The Letter Home

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This is not a story that I came easily read. I had written my own letter when I served. But being a peacekeeper was not at dangerous as being in combat. the story was well written and brought a sheen to my eyes.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A good story and it was well and delicately told.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more with this passion.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Sticky Notes  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Sticky Notes

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short something using sticky notes. Many people use the little pieces of paper to remind themselves to do things. This articles seems to have a list of things not to do.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

everything seems to depend on Pia. the notes tell us what to do and what not to do.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

More detail would be helpful.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Writing the Synopsis

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good overview of what is required to produce a valid synopsis to send to an editor for selection of your material. Along with the examples this material should be useful to any writer.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Good detail on how to prepare a synopsis including the size of material to be shared.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Well written and a valuable tool.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Jelly  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Jelly

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

a couple of guys in discussion of jelly and how it was used when they were kids. One had sisters and the other did not.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Russ and Sam grew up much differently. there are some questions about the proper way to serve and consume jelly.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Caitlin's Synopsis for Bruises Fade

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A story about a woman who unfortunately jumped out of the frying pan and into the fire. Caitlin marries a man who is abusive. She goes to a group to find a way out.
Her husband finds out and beats her. Her friend helps her escape only to enslave her himself.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Carl is the abusive husband and Patrick the man who is just as bad as Carl.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

fill in more of the details. woman need to be protected from this type of man.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Review of My Little Corner of the House



First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Having your own space can be important. Here we have a vivid description of the space that the writer has selected for him/herself. I found the description of the couch to be very memorable. Great detail.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The characters are inaminate objects which fill the space.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more. This is good!

FINAL THOUGHTS:


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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

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PLOT & CHARACTERS:

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SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
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FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Silly Little Moon  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Silly Little Moon

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poem about the sun speaking to the moon.

POETIC INFORMATION:

Nine four line verses with a rhyming scheme of A B C B.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

i enjoyed the banter of the sun as of course the moon is just the reflection of the sun.

FINAL THOUGHTS:


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Review of he wasnt worth it  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of He Wasn't Worth It

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

well haven't we all been in that situation. Where we have met someone and they just fill us with good thoughts and feelings. Then later we realize that this other person is not what we think they are.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I particularly liked the comparison of the star and the comet.
Having to deal with all that dust when you were looking for a star.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I feel you could extend this piece.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Daffodil Laughter  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Daffodil Laughter

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A pleasant poem with an emphasis towards the flowers of spring.we are still a few weeks away from that but I am looking expectantly towards it.

POETRY INFORMATION:

A Quatrin is a 4-stanza poem with each stanza consisting of 4 8-syllable lines.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Good expression of colour. I always like to see that.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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