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Review of Uncaged Grace  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Uncaged Grace

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A simple four line poem which has a mellow tone which is relaxing.

POETRY INFORMATION:

The first two lines rhyme.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thanks for sharing this item!

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of A Letter to Jack and Jill

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A very cute way of touching on two nursery rhymes.

GENERAL INFORMATION:

The letter is sent to jack and Jill from all the King's horses and men as detailed in the two rhymes. Perhaps a little more detail of the how they got the news of the fall would enhance the letter.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

This brought a smile to my face.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thanks for sharing this delightful item!

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Review of Mary's Lucky Day  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)



Review of Mary's Lucky Day

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good tale for Saint Patrick's Day. A woman is down on her luck and she and her son are living on charity. She is hoping she will find a job when she gets visited by a leprechaun. The leprechaun magically changes her luck.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Three characters Mary, the mother, Liam her son and J Patrick O'Malley the leprechaun.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I don't see any errors or omissions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Going Fishing  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Going Fishing

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Success. A good catch on a day of fishing. This poem catches the emotions when a nice size fish is caught. It is a pleasant story with good detail.

POETRY INFORMATION:

This is free form poetry. It paints a vivid picture of
the event.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

It could be longer but it seems to be complete.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)



Review of The New Yorkshire Times

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

the author states that in past years the news was passed by town criers who made up poems to facilitate getting the news out to the common man. The man reading the newspaper decides he will give his wife the news in that fashion.

POETRY INFORMATION:

There seemed no end of little poetic four liners that this poet has been able to tie into news items that could be drawn from the local newspaper.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Create more of these gems from the headlines of today.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I enjoyed reading this.Thanks for sharing this item!

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Review of Freak  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Review of Freak

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A carnival side show exhibit is Raheesha who has suffered flesh eating disease and as such her face is horribly disfigured. She lives in horrible conditions.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

It seems that the lions are out of their cages and approaching Raheesha wagon.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I know the word count is limited but the story moves too abruptly without explanation.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of On Teaching Freshmen Composition

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A teacher can get frustrated and so it seems in this poem.
Freshmen classes are of course the hardest to get any great break thrus.
I suppose composition is difficult for those who have never studied it.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Forty-two lines of free verse poetry.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Prayer for Sadness

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The poem deals with sadness and the aspects that the Lord had to deal with sadness in His life. It is a very good poem and prayer.

POETRY INFORMATION:

The first verse does not have any rhyming pattern. The second, third and verses have the rhyming pattern of A B A B. The poem ends with a rhyming couplet.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Intercessory prayer when we prayer for others. It is an important aspect of prayer.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Dearest Nearest  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)



Review of Dearest Nearest

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

In effect this is a mature love letter. This couple has grown past the need for constant attention and have come to where they are comfortable with each other.
realizing that they will now be apart the woman in this story is thinking about what she will miss.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

No names just the relationship tags of husband and wife.
A comfortable couple. They are going to be apart and the wife is already missing things about the husband.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write the other side of the relationship.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Marissa and her friend Bridget

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions. This piece was selected for me to review by the "Read & Review" system.


OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Being dropped into the middle of a story is sometimes difficult.
This story seems to be about two friends who I think live in San Francisco.
The story has deep connections with fashion and in fact seems to be a venue for the author to describe things she finds fashionable.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

There seems to be a special relationship between the two woman and while it is not romantic I think it could lead that way. Bridgette is giving expensive and fashionable gifts to Marissa. Michael and the ties that he is given do not match the level of gifts for Marissa.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Give more detail of the people and not just the clothes.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

This is like watching a commercial for a high line woman's clothing store.
Thanks for sharing this item!


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Review of sample -1/14  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of Sample 1/14

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Taking metaphors and describing them without using certain phases.
An interesting exercise.

POETRY INFORMATION:

There are four verses of four lines with rhyming pattern of A B C B.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Find some more metaphors.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of This Heart of Mine

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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:



A short poem about ultimate and perhaps final separation of lovers. Mostly projected as random thoughts and feelings. It seems the poet feels there is no hope of compromise or getting things patched up.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Free form poetry.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

introduce some semblance of hope is this despairing tale.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)



Review of The Legend of Moffat County

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A horror story written in two halves with the real horror just left unwritten going on between.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Walter Jackson a stranded business man becomes the victim of what could be a vampire.
By being a victim then he himself a vampire and leads to the second part of the story.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

A little more detail especially the gruesome ones.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (5.0)



Review of I'm Sorry I Didn't Take Action

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A confession by a youth leader for not standing up and being vocal in a meeting of persons dealing with the needs of children. This woman feels she let the children down by not defending the report.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A meeting is held by agencies who help children to discuss a deport entitled "Young People, The Way Forward". Ruth the only named character thinks the report has some merit but when other seem opposed to it, she remains silent. The letter is an apology to the youth she works with.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I don't see any problems with spelling or grammar.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Wither  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Wither

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A short poem that gives some advice to the next generation. It is not done forcilby but with a hope for the future.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Nine lines of free verse poetry.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

You could extend this and share more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thanks for writing this item!

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)



Review of End of the Line

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Wow. I am not sure what is happening but it is happening extremely fast and the momentous collision is going to be deadly. Why is this happening. I don't have the answer I only see speeding train and man on the tracks.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Other than the man on the tracks, we have Tessa who it seems loves him but it also is responsible for the problems he now has.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Flash fiction is great but I would like to see this story line expanded.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

A good piece of work. Thanks for sharing this item!


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)



Review of Idea That Started It All

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

this article is written in the format of a cover letter stating that attached is an idea which is 4,648 words long and of the best idea since God created everything.
the letter never states what the idea is but does spend some time stating the qualities of the writer.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

This tremendous idea seems to be some great thing but there is no divulging as to what it is.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Joyous Spirits  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Joyous Spirits

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A great Christmas poem. it includes the winter theme, the religious aspect and the celebration of family.

POETRY INFORMATION:

The poet has included the information on this type of poetry.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more poems like this.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of Special Delivery  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of Special Delivery

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good story with lots of descriptive passages. I could visualize this remains of a great tree firmly lodged in the sand as it weathered form becomes a bench for people passing by and a trap to ensnare elements brought ashore by the tide.

The second half of the story involves the message in a bottle. A tale that excites one with wonder and mystery.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The man share his thoughts while resting on this convenient bench provided by nature.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I would read other reflections from this half sunken tree.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)



Review of To Freedom for All

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

To me it is extremely important that when we talk about the hero like aspects of service personnel we must always include the family as well. That should also include the extended family. To be willing to serve may seem sometimes trivial but there is always the portend of something dreadful.

POETRY INFORMATION:

eighteen lines of free verse.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
. Mr. Magoo's Voyage Goes Astray {/b}

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A three verse poem about a a sea trip that shares some wonderful images. good desctiptions.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Each verse has the rhyming scheme of A B A B. There is a final rhyming couplet.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)



Review of Wicked Witch was Framed

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A very different take of the story of the Wizard of Oz. In fact it places Dorthy as the evil person and the two witches as the victims of this serial witch killer.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The plot is that Dorthy has intentionally dropped her house of the first witch and then stole her ruby slippers. Dorthy then plots with the Wizard of Oz o kill the other witch and steal her broom

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write of your detail about Dorthy's partners in crime.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)



Review of Human Physical Traits

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The poet has chosen to deal with the common physical traits of mankind.
Hair colour, eye colour, skin colour and body size: tall or short; skinny or fat. Stating that sometimes we are too infatuated with the differences.
I agree the world would be better if we ignored the differences. However I do not think this will ever happen.

POETRY INFORMATION:

Six verses with each verse being a quatrain (quatrains with lines 1 and 3, 2 and 4 end-rhymed, 10 syllables per line)

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep writing poetry.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of My Grouse Country  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of My Grouse Country

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poem about Australia the land of his country. He seems very proud.


POETRY INFORMATION:

Four verses of three lines each. Each verse with a A A B rhyming scheme. Short lines give the poem a reflective cadence like walking.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Its a big country, write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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Review of A New Year  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)



Review of A New Year

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Twenty lines of free form poetry based on the new calendar replacing the old as the year changes.

POETRY INFORMATION:

free verse.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I enjoyed the references where photos of playful cats are replaced with frolicking rowdy puppies..

FINAL THOUGHTS:

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