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Hello I am Brit-Girl But call me Em I spotted your piece and enjoyed reading it so much that I simply had to review it! Please take my comments and suggestions as they are offered, with humble grace in an effort to let you know my opinion. Thanks for understanding! And now without further jabber I give to you…*drum roll* Your review!
This is review 4 of 15 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
This has a rather morbid residue around it. The content is dark and interesting. Your thoughts at this time in your life were obviously not happy ones but I believe that you successfully brought your angst to the page well.
Suggestions for Improvement:
This is another repeating poem. The lines all say the same thing and the meaning of the story is lost in the 5 times you say burning! Change it up a little bit... say "ignite" or "blazing" or something new.
Also the wayward formation of the lines makes for a disruption in the flow of your piece. I would suggest condensing some thoughts and extending others.
Overall Thoughts:
A dark poem this one I do like it! And I think with a little sprucing up this could be great! Keep writing
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This is review 10 of 10 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
A very emotional and heart-wrenching poem. The content is so real and the whole terrible story is carried off in such a way that the reader really connects with the child.This is a great example of strong emotional poetry! It is really very well written!
Suggestions for Improvement:
I spotted no errors and the poem itself makes up for any minor flaws in the flow! This is a really well written poem and I am so glad that I leave your port (for now)on a high note
Overall Thoughts:
I have really enjoyed reading my way through your port and am so glad that I had this chance! Thank you for your generosity to the site and your writing is exceptional! Very well written and a joy to read thanks again! (((Hugs)))
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This is review 9 of 10 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
I like the rhyme scheme on this one! The lines flow wonderfully and the content is, as ever, very well expressed I love the aspect of a new beginning at the end and the entire poem is riveting!
Suggestions for Improvement:
None this time this is such a great read!
Overall Thoughts:
A wonderful poem about leaving the ghosts of the past in the past and It is so well written that the reader is glued to the page through it's entirity! Great write!
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This is review 8 of 10 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
This is rather a personal poem and I love the feelings that mingle in it! I love night too! It is so mysterious and yet comforting at times The descriptions in this are amazing you really drew me into the story you wove! And I really experienced the night just reading your words.
Suggestions for Improvement:
none this is a perfect account of a well written experience and I really enjoyed reading it!
Overall Thoughts:
What can I say? I love your personal style! You put a twist on all these poems and that makes them so original! It is really great to rufflt through all of these wonderful writings!
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This is review 7 of 10 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
Ooh I love this sigs! They really add to the exsisting atmosphere of this ethereal piece! I really enjoyed reading this poem and it is very touching The fairys who swirl around the poem are beautiful and the poem in itself is really quite enjoyable
Suggestions for Improvement:
I did think that some of the lines could use some adjusting to make the poem flow better:
"to a new world where only peace is known,
and where there is no war or hatred."
both of these lines sounded a little off to me and they disrupted the great read I was throughly enjoying...just a tad though I would suggest:
"to a new world with only peace.
where there is no war or hatred"
or something to that effect That is just my opinion And other than that I really enjoyed the poem!
Overall Thoughts:
A fluffy pink poem in bright pink type I really ejoyed reading this poem and except for the flow issue I loved it!
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This is review 6 of 10 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
Another great spiritual poem! This captures the essence of the Father and though it doesn't rhyme that isn't nesessary in such a heartfelt poem! Bravo and wonderful work!
Suggestions for Improvement:
None this truly comes from the heart and is very endearing.
Overall Thoughts:
As I trudge deeper and deeper into your port I find such wonderful poems! This is like a scavenger hunt and I am finding all the gems!
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This is review 5 of 10 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
this is a lovely acrostic poem! It is spiritual and from the heart and the emotions are very evident! I love acrostics and this is a fine example of one! Great work
Suggestions for Improvement:
none! You followed the form to the button and it is very well written!
Overall Thoughts:
A heartfrlt poem that is really a joy to read You write such beautiful poetry I am so glad to have this opportunity to read you writing!
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This is review 4 of 10 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
The title is very interesting and grabs the reader from the start! You srote this wonderfully and it flow well! I love the wayit took me through the story and it never felt forced or awkward.
Suggestions for Improvement:
great! I wouldn't change a thing it was a joy to read
Overall Thoughts:
Yet another beautiful poem from you..what else could I expect Off to the next!...
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Positive Points:
Aye the tunnel...well thought out and a great job puetting these thoughts onto the page! I love the meaning of this and the expressions are teriffic!
Suggestions for Improvement:
Punctuation is nonexsistant but that was planned..correct?
Overall Thoughts:
Gorgeous words that flow like magic! A great poem and very well written! I am having so much fun in here! *scampers to the next poem...Ooh pretty*
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This is review 2 of 10 that you won at "Invalid Item"
Positive Points:
Another very well writte poem! I love how you take each word and give it meaning! I also like the flow and the wording was just right I really like this one
Suggestions for Improvement:
None! I am rather speechless this is a great poem and It holds such great meaning!
Overall Thoughts:
Beautiful writing and well done! I thoroughly enjoyed this one and am now off to your next
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Positive Points:
This is a very emotional poem! And in a folder entitled "Emotional Poetry" this is very fitting I really enjoyed this poem because it not only shows the reader of the characters suffering but it also hints at a favourable end to it! I really loved the emotions in this and you let the reader really feel them!
Suggestions for Improvement:
Only two lines felt a little off: "born into a life of sin" might sound better as "born to a life of sin". And "Escape impossible." I think that this would be a wee bit better if it sounded "escape is impossible" but that is purely my opinion
Overall Thoughts:
A lovely poem stemming from very potent emotions and very well expressed on the page! Great writing
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Hello there
I am so glad that I spotted your port!!
This piece is really great!
I love how you take every word and give it meaning.
Your entire port is filled with wonderful items like this and the only thing I have left to say is..
You are a great writer!
Never stop, and keep on sharing it with others
I really enjoyed reading this
Thanks for sharing it with us here at WDC
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Hello I am Brit-Girl But call me Em I spotted your piece and either thought it had a lot of potential or I enjoyed reading it so much that I simply had to review it! Please take my comments and suggestions as they are offered, with humble grace in an effort to let you know my opinion. Thanks for understanding. And now without further jabber and whatnot I give to you…*drum roll* Your review
Positive Points:
An interesting concept and the format is odd... Suggestions for Improvement:
I apreciate that this is a free form but this doesn't flow as well as it could I generally thinkthat a line of poetry should be more thatn one word and that holds true for this one.
Overall Thoughts:
Well I have thoroughl ebjoyed my spur through your port! I shall be back from time to time, but until then...Keep Writing!
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Positive Points:
A good story and a warning of sorts
Suggestions for Improvement:
The rhymes are a wee bit weak in places and I think if you used some synonyms this piece would be much better!
Overall Thoughts:
Another good poem from you! All great reads and very well written!
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Positive Points:
I really liked the twist at the end! The beginning is thrilling and easy to read, it really brings the reader into the story! I loved the end and thought it was very well planned out! You set up the plot in a perfect way and you used none of the "Forbidden words" Great job with the prompt you saw a spark and created a fire! Wonderful job!
Suggestions for Improvement:
Some of the dialogue didn't quite work for me. When Nora is tlaking to Joseph some of her lines seem a bit forced. but other than that I have nothing to suggest
Overall Thoughts:
A wonderful entry! Very well thought out, and with great use of prompt! Thanks for entering and I really enjoyed reading it Good luck in the contest!
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Hello I am Brit-Girl But call me Em I spotted your piece and either thought it had a lot of potential or I enjoyed reading it so much that I simply had to review it! Please take my comments and suggestions as they are offered, with humble grace in an effort to let you know my opinion. Thanks for understanding. And now without further jabber and whatnot I give to you…*drum roll* Your review
Positive Points:
I think this is a good start! It has a good meaning and the feeling of it is great
Suggestions for Improvement:
I think this could be a little more indepth less generall and more specific. I think it is a good poem as it is but it could certainly get better
Overall Thoughts:
WELCOME to WDC!! I am so glad that you signed up You will have a wonderuful time here and there is so much to d if you have any questions or anything, just send out an eMail to one of us, we are all here to write and help each other WELCOME again and have a great day!
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Hello I’m Em*waves hand* and I am reviewing your piece today! Please take my comments in the spirit they are offered; to help and encourage. Also keep in mind that I would not be giving you this review if I had not liked it! So without further babble I give you…*drum roll* my review!
This is review 10 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction! This is your last poetry review I had such god fun rummaging through your poems! I hope you found my reviews to be helpful and encouraging And I truly did enjoy all of your beautiful poetry Never fear, I shall be back from time to time, but until then...my last review:
What I like!:
Wow, You are a pofessional with this form! The content is intriging and I LOVE the form! It is really nagging at me, I think I will have to write one soon for fear of my muse giving me a headache about it Lovely meaning and very well written! Great poems all around!
What I didn’t like so much!:
Another Xmas
What I think could be better!:
nothing I like the stanzas and the formation, and everything!
What I think Overall!:
Well the last one, I am sad to go but glad that I came in here! You have inspired and motivated me, and I am enthralled by your poetic prowess!!
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This is review 9 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
Ooh another cool form! I just love all of these interesting forms in your poetry This one is similar to the first in that it is the alphabet, but this one is the entire alphabet! Wow, I am sure you had fun writing this..it looks fun
What I didn’t like so much!:
Xmas is a little iffy...but what else could you say really
What I think could be better!:
Zilch
What I think Overall!:
Great job with a very challenging form! I love this one and will have to try it out myself!!
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Hello I’m Em*waves hand* and I am reviewing your piece today! Please take my comments in the spirit they are offered; to help and encourage. Also keep in mind that I would not be giving you this review if I had not liked it! So without further babble I give you…*drum roll* my review!
This is review 8 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
A wonderful poem about your father. It is so sad in some ways and yet wonderful in others. I love the mix of emotions and the content is obviously dear to your heart Good job with the emotions!
What I didn’t like so much!:
Some of the lines are a little off, but overal this doesn't affect the poem at all!
What I think could be better!:
Maybe trim down a few of the end lines...maybe
What I think Overall!:
Another truly beautiful poem by you! I am thoroughly enjoying my time here at you port! And I am so glad that i had this opportunity
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Hello I’m Em*waves hand* and I am reviewing your piece today! Please take my comments in the spirit they are offered; to help and encourage. Also keep in mind that I would not be giving you this review if I had not liked it! So without further babble I give you…*drum roll* my review!
This is review 7 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
Ooh what a coincidence! I am learing this form in a poetry class i am taking right now Well anyway, it is a really well written poem and the form is exemplary! I love the very last line it really packs a punch!
What I think Overall!:
I am learing so much from your port! I love the interesting forms you use and the variation of content in here is amazing! Thank you so much for sharing it!!
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This is review 5 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
This is beautiful, a real gem of a poem and I am honoured to have this oppourtunity to read it! The picture at the end of the poem really adds some depth and visual to the poem but it is also beautiful on its own. As I said before, a real gem!
What I think Overall!:
Such gorgeous words and such a meaningful story, very well written! Thanks for sharing it
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This is review 6 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
Katherine! She is such a wonderful person, and apparently very inspiring (I wrote a poem for her to) SHe has touched so many people and continues to do so ardently. So to katherine76 WE LOVE YOU
What I didn’t like so much!:
Nothing! What could possibly be wrong with a poem about Katherine!
What I think Overall!:
A beautifully written piece about one of the most beautiful women. She is perfect as is this poem
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This is review 4 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
The story like atmosphere that you present the poem with! It is compelling and fun to read. I was left guessing until the end
What I didn’t like so much!:
Some of the rhymes were a little weak but the story shone through well.
What I think could be better!:
Some humble suggestions
"hung out with pals" hung out with a pal
Some of the rhymes were a little off:
Snort and Nut don't rhyme
Neither do road and told...Silly though
What I think Overall!:
Other than some minor bumps this poem is really a fun read
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Hello I’m Em*waves hand* and I am reviewing your piece today! Please take my comments in the spirit they are offered; to help and encourage. Also keep in mind that I would not be giving you this review if I had not liked it! So without further babble I give you…*drum roll* my review!
This is review 3 of 10 that you won at the BCD Auction!
What I like!:
The content! I have been studying MLK Jr in school recently (and actually wrote an essay that is in my port abouthim) and so was highly intrigued by the content! You have done a great job with the form and with the prompt...Very Original!
What I didn’t like so much!:
Umm...yeah about this section of my reviews...maybe I should erase it for yours
What I think Overall!:
A wonderful poem in honour of justice and the struggle for it! Lovely
Em
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I spotted your piece and enjoyed reading it so much that I simply had to review it! Please take my comments and suggestions as they are offered, with humble grace in an effort to let you know my opinion. Thanks for understanding!
but I believe that you successfully brought your angst to the page well.
too!” 
)on a high note
if you have any questions or anything, just send out an eMail to one of us, we are all here to write and help each other
I had such god fun rummaging through your poems! I hope you found my reviews to be helpful and encouraging