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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Tiffy<3 ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Happy Mother's Day!" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem flows extremely well! All of your line breaks are appropriately placed. Although the rhythm is slightly off because some of the lines are a bit longer than others, it doesn't detract from your poem at all. I like the aabb cccc rhyme scheme but I think your first two lines are more of an "eye rhyme" than an actual rhyme. Again, it doesn't detract from the lovely tribute to your mom. *Heart* *Star*

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Your word choice is good. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
My only suggestion would be to capitalize "happy" in your last line.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was such a sweet tribute to your mom. I can tell how much you love her and how thankful you are for her. I'm sure she loved this poem you wrote for her. This was a very enjoyable read!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Unspoken Desires  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Craig Flannery ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Unspoken Desires" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a great title that gets the reader thinking before they've even started to read your poem! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great word choice in this poem! I see no spelling errors. Although there is only minimal use of punctuation, I don't feel that it detracts from the poem in any way.

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None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The Death of Hope  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Craig Flannery ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "The Death of Hope" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a good title that is quite suitable to the content within your poem.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Line-to-line transition is good. All of your breaks are appropriately placed. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
It's not necessarily a tip for improvement but I do have a suggestion on the content rating. I'll list it below under "overall impression".

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a good read. I could absolutely feel your anger, despair and angst. Yet, through it all, you still love this person deeply. My favorite lines are the following:

"I hope when your eyes visit the moon
You realize the distance back to your heart
And remember how far I loved you."

Now that is some amazing writing! Well done! *Star*

I have one additional thing I'd like to note. I think this poem would actually be considered a GC rating, rather than 18+. The 18+ rating states, "one instance of the completed (or phonetically spelled) F-word, and/or combination thereof". Your poem has 2 so I think it should probably have a GC rating. For more info, please see "Content Rating System (CRS)" 

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Love  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Craig Flannery ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Love" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A wonderful title that says so much with just a single word. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow is a off in a few places because of the varying lengths of your lines and stanzas but it does not detract from your lovely poem. There are also one or two places where I think you need additional line breaks. One example is the following:

"If you wonder what Love feels like,
Place your body against mine and feel my heart beat in rhythm with yours."

It's a beautiful sentiment but what if you were to change it to the following?

"If you wonder what Love feels like,
Place your hand on my heart to feel its rhythm match yours."

That's just a suggestion and I certainly mean no offense by it. I just think some slight modifications like that would help the flow and rhythm of your poem.

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Your word choice is good, quite descriptive and so colorfully accurate of the beauty of love. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Just what I've noted above.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This poem is so full of emotion and it's a delightful tribute to the magic of love. *Star* My favorte lines are the following:

"For it is beauty that captures our attention,
But personality that captures the heart."

That is so very true! *Heart*

I see that you're a "newbie" to WDC. I encourage you to look into some of the wonderful "newbie" groups! *BigSmile*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Daizy May ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your short story, "Angels Took Me Home" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a great title! It gives me chills, in a good way. *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A short short done well. You've told an excellent story in only 55 words. Great use of vocabulary! I see no errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a great read! The heroism and spirituality really tugged at my heartstrings. This story truly moved me.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Why?  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi DevilDog2005 ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Why?" .

First and foremost, I'd like to thank you for your service to our country. I hope you'll be returning from Afghanistan very soon!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a good title for this lovely poem written for your wife. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem flows well and all of your line breaks are appropriately placed. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. The only things I saw that need correcting are the 2 instances where you used "earth", it should be "Earth" (capitalized). Also, in the second line of your 6th stanza, "It's" should be "Its" (no apostrophe).

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Just what I've noted above.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was an incredibly beautiful poem for your wife. I'm sure she loved it! If I had to pick a favorite part (which was hard to do because I liked the whole thing), I think it would have to be the last stanza.

"For no one else on earth,
Could ever compare to her.
I just hope that I'm the king,
That this princess deserves."

Aww, that is just adorable! It speaks to just how much you love her and how much she means to you. *Heart* Well done!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sum1 ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "It Feels So Good, So Take A Chance On Me" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A cool title for an extremely cool poem. *Cool*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it, which is no surprise since you used song titles. *Wink**Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great word (or should I say title?) choice! I see no errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I LOVE THIS! *Heart* What an awesomely creative idea to use song titles to write this! *BigSmile* Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of "Crystal Tear"  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Unanimousawareness ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, ""Crystal Tear"" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a good title that is very fitting to what you've written about in your poem. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem flows well. All of your line breaks are appropriately placed also. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. I like rhyme scheme you've used throughout the poem. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Excellent and very descriptive word choice used. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a great poem and I do like your ending. My only suggestion would be to add an additional two lines to your final stanza so that it's consistent with the rest of the poem. Again, that's only a suggestion. Creative writing is just that, creative. *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a very enjoyable read. I could feel the emotion as I was reading it. I get the impression that this was a very personal, emotional piece for you to write. My favorite part is the following:

"I walk through my empty doors,
walking slowly over barren floors,
in the mirror I see what lies,
deep within my empty eyes."

It vividly portrays the feelings within. Great job! *Star*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of MISSING YOU, MOM.  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi SHERRI GIBSON ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "MISSING YOU, MOM." .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title is what first drew me to your poem. I've been doing some "reflecting" the last few days. I've lost both my parents. Not a day goes by that I don't think about them, love them and miss them terribly. *Cry* It's almost 10 years since I've lost my dad and it was 6 years ago yesterday that I lost my mom.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Forget all the mechanics. That's not what this review is about. Your poem is breathtakingly beautiful and there's not a thing wrong with it. The whole poem is wonderful but, to me, your second stanza really hit home.

"You're sleeping with the Angels, and I know you're at peace.
I can't help in wondering though, if this pain will ever cease.
Mom, I feel so selfish because I know you're in God's embrace,
and know you're in the arms of Angels, and a much better place."

That is EXACTLY how I feel. My heart *Heart* goes out to you. I really hope that writing about it has helped.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sharkdaddy ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your short story, "How I became Sharkdaddy" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I like titles that make the reader think. This title definitely had me thinking, "Hmmmm, I wonder what he did?" *BigSmile* *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. Good job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a very cute story explaining how you became "Sharkdaddy". I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of It's My Toy  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Liam ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "It's My Toy" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I like your title. I think it's a lot of fun! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. You've done the Rhyme Royal well. Iambic pentameter is my favorite! You've done an excellent job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great choice of words. I sent absolutely no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, it's great just the way it is!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a masterfully written piece. My favorite part would have to be your first line, "There are no sweet dreams still to dream today". It opens your poem well and opens the imagination of the reader for the great read they have ahead of them. *Delight* Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

I see that you're a "newbie". I encourage you to look into some of the newbie groups that are offered. They're awesome!

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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Happy Spring ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your short story, "Amanda's Magnificent Obsession" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
An interesting title for a unique flash fiction story.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good, especially since you weren't able to have any repeats for this prompt. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I would suggest making this longer so the storyline is more clear. As it is, it leaves the reader a bit confused.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of FRED AND COCO  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi ~WhoMe???~ ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "FRED AND COCO" . Aren't dogs the greatest? Sometimes I prefer them to people! *Laugh* *BigSmile*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Awesome title! I *Heart* your dogs names!!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great flow and your line-to-line transition is done well. Good rhythm too. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Wonderful choice of words. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I adore this poem! Great job on the double (or mirrored) acrostic. That is difficult to do. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The Betrayal  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi E E Coder ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your short story, "The Betrayal" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
After reading the story, the title definitely fits.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is very good. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a great story but, I have to tell you, it made me cry. I am a huge dog lover...and I have a Black Lab! The part that really got me was your ending:

"Buddy was a large black Labrador and fought the losing battle valiantly until he managed to crawl into the safety of the thicket. As he lay there with his life draining into the mud, he wondered if he had been a bad dog." *Cry*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of A Writer's Home  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi winklett in the woods ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "A Writer's Home" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title fits your poem well. This site is, after all, a writer's home "away" from home. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This poem flows well and the line breaks are appropriately placed. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great use of vocabulary! I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None at all!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem is a lovely tribute to this wonderful site! Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Maryann ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "The Magnitude of Stars" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
What a wonderful title! Astronomy fascinates me so your title is what lead me to open this and read it. I'm so glad I did! *Star*

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The flow of your poem is magnificent! Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. I love your a-a-a-a b-b-b-b rhyme scheme also. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is excellent! I see absolutely no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None whatsoever. *BigSmile*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I could picture the stars in the Heavens as I was reading this. I love the whole poem but, if I had to pick a favorite part, it would be the following:

"The magnitude of stars is majestic, they say,
In the incredibly enchanting Milky Way."

That's amazing! Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Mr. Prendergast  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Jakrebs ,
I'm reviewing your short story, "Mr. Prendergast" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great title! It doesn't give any hint to the content within your story so it keeps the reader guessinng...and quite intrigued. *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I really like how you used your words in this short story. You made it sound like a homeless person. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, I love it just the way it is!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
You have a wonderful imagination! Wow, I am speechless after reading that. While I was reading your story I had a feeling I knew who (or what) Mr. Prendergast was and how the story would end but I did not see the part about the youngest son coming! You're an amazing writer with exceptional talent. I can't wait to read more of your work!!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Love poem  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi ewai ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Love poem" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I think your title is more of a description. Is there another title that would better fit your poem and show the depth of the emotion and just how far someone would go?

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. The only spelling error I see is in your first line, "aline" should be "align".

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
My only suggestion would be to keep the number of lines per stanza the same. Your first stanza has 5 lines, the next 2 have 4 lines and your last stanza has 6 lines. I don't think it detracts from your poem but I think it would help the reader follow your thoughts and feelings a little better.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I like this free verse poem you've written. I think you did a good job with it.

I see that you're a "newbie" here at WDC. Welcome aboard! I encourage you to look into some of the newbie groups that are offered.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Day Dreaming Mind  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi TM Crane ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Day Dreaming Mind" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A good title for the one you're meant to be with...someday. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow is good but I think it could be just a little bit better. I think the third line should end after the word "face". Then your fourth line would be "with just the thought of him". The fifth line might read better as "He puts a tear in my eye when I miss him". The rest of your line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. I don't see any spelling errors. Good job! The only recommendation for punctuation are what I have listed above.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I really enjoyed this free verse poem of the one you'll meet some day. I like how you ended this poem with a question. Is it a dream or will it be reality someday? That was excellent! This was a thoroughly enjoyable read.

I see that you're a "newbie" to WDC (as of today). Welcome aboard! I encourage you to look into some of the newbie groups that are offered.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of THE LAST TREE  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi markymark ,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "THE LAST TREE" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A great title that gets the reader "thinking" even before they've started reading the poem. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow of your poem is quite good. Line-to-line transition and breaks are excellent. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great choice of words that are both thought-provoking and powerful. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, I think it's great!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This poem captivated me from the beginning. My favorite part, and also the most powerful, is the following:

"Don't they know that in life
there are no guarantees?
We still could be left
in a world without trees."

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi spidey ,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "in the shade of the cherry tree" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title fits your poem well.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Good word choice. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I love cherry trees! *Heart* Every spring I look forward to seeing them come into bloom. Their blossoms are amazing and your poem captures it so well. My favorite part is the following:

"I close my eyes, spread my arms,
Taking in the peaceful feeling;
I feel the blossoms dance
in the shade of the cherry tree."

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi typingrhyme ,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "A WALK IN THE PARK" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great title! Who doesn't love a walk in the park? *Wink*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great word choice. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I adore how you ended this poem. It is, by far, my favorite part:

"Have a little picnic.
Invite a friend or two.
Just relax in the sun.
The park is there for you."

I felt as though I was having a perfect picnic in the park with my friends! This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The River  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi CHarris ,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "The River" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title is short, sweet and to the point. It suits your poem well. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow and rhythm of your poem are quite good. You have an excellent rhyme scheme too. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your vocabulary is great. It creates a picture of your lovely river within the mind of the reader. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Absolutely none! I think it's perfect. *Delight*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a beautiful poem. I can tell that this is a very special place to you. It comes across in your words. My favorite part is the following:

"And if I shut my eyes, and then listen close
to the birds, cicadas, and the summer breeze,
ruffling green oak leaves, I can hear the ghosts
of those who came to share what the river sees."

If I close my eyes, I can see it too! This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The Finger Lakes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi T.L.Finch ,

I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "The Finger Lakes" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm and an excellent rhyme scheme. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is quite good, offering the reader a "peek" into the area. Your spelling and grammar are flawless. Great job! One minor thing that I do see is at the bottom, under your picture. You have a "}" in your by-line.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a well-written piece reflecting on the beauty and wonder that Mother Nature has granted the Finger Lakes area. My husband and I have been thinking of a long weekend to the area to check out the wineries and local scenery. Your poem started that conversation again. *Wink*

The addition of the picture at the bottom of the poem is a nice touch. It's a beautiful picture and helps the reader envision the lovely area you're describing. My favorite part is the following:

"A brighter day has come about,
the outlook is brand new.
The green of spring is peeking out
and here for all to view."

This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Well done! Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of The Evergreen  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi bkcompton,

I’m Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I’m reviewing your poem, "The Evergreen" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a good title that fits your poem well. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is quite good. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, I like it the way it is.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. I also enjoyed how all of your formatting, from the changes in text color and centering, make your words into the shape of an evergreen. That's very creative and quite pleasing to the eyes! *Wink* Well done. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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