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Review of Haunted  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi London Rush ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Haunted" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is an excellent title. It's a chillingly accurate description of the plaguing memories that possess our thoughts and dreams of love lost. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
You have a knack for creating free verse poems that flow easily. That's not an easy task to achieve. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is great. I could feel your pain as you recounted each memory that haunts you. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Absolutely none!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
You sure have a talent for free verse poems! As I mentioned, that's not an easy thing to do. Many of us write free verse but they tend to be "choppy". I know that my free verse poems are nowhere near as rhythmic as those you've written. *BigSmile*

There were a number of things I could related to in your poem. I think what stands out most in my mind is the following:

"we talk so much and say
so little,
masks of joy and
the mirage
of moving on
keep me treading water
a little longer,"

That is great writing and I commend you for it! *Star*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Book Ends  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi London Rush ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your monologue, "Book Ends" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is an intriguing title that has the reader thinking about the possibilities of all that could be contained within. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is awesome. I found myself nodding my head in agreement when you were describing Hollywood's version of the romantic comedy. It's so true...but I still love them! *Laugh*

I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
While I was reading this, I felt as though I were reading a bio (of sorts) of my own life quite a few years ago. I hope everything has worked out for you.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Summer Nights  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi London Rush ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Summer Nights" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Great title! Summer is my favorite time of year. It always reminds me of warm, romantic evenings at the beach (or by the bay, as in your poem *BigSmile*). *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your free verse poem flows well and has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is fantastic! It's a lovely re-telling of an enchanted meeting. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a very enjoyable read. I liked the way you told this story of a chance meeting. I'm a hopeless romantic so it left me feeling nostalgic as I recalled memories of my own summer evenings. My favorite lines are the following:

"with closed eyes
you are all I see,
all I need
all I want"

Aw, that's adorable! Every girl wants to be adored this way.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of If.....  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Paradoxical ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "If....." .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a very intriguing title. It leaves the reader wanting to know more because the title doesn't give the slightest hint to the content within. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem flows well and has a nice rhythm to it. All of your line breaks are appropriately placed. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. It's fun and imaginative. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The only thing I would suggest is possibly adding some WritingML to make it really...POP.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a great read. It was a lot fun reading through these musings. My favorite lines are the following:

"If love will make us all a poet,
then every man alive should know it."

That made me laugh! *Laugh*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Lingering Dreams  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi 🌕 HuntersMoon ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Lingering Dreams" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
A lovely title for a lovely poem. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem flows and rhymes well. *Cool* All of your line breaks are appropriately placed giving it a nice, easy rhythm. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is wonderful. It's imaginative, descriptive and thought-provoking. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, it's perfect! *Smile*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
How could I give anything less than *Star**Star**Star**Star**Star* for this beautifully-written poem by one of my favorite poets here at WDC! My favorite lines are the following:

"In a touch of perfume or the faint lilt of voices
I feel your presence and my heart rejoices,
warmed by the thought of you being near."

Such sweet, heartfelt sentiments for the one you love. *Heart*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Marsha Musselman ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your short story, "People, people who need people" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a very interesting title. I'm guessing it was the prompt for the contest?

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. I like how this is like a dialogue. I felt as though you and I were sitting in a coffee shop chatting. *BigSmile*

Just a few errors to note:
*NoteV* In the 3rd line of your first paragraph, there's an extra space between "are" and "usually".
*NoteV* In the 1st line of your second paragraph, "persons" should be "person's" (with an apostrophe).
*NoteV* In the 1st line of your sixth paragraph, "Wallmart" should be "Walmart" (only one "l").

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Just what I've noted above.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was an enjoyable read. I've never worked in retail but I worked in the food industry in high school and college. I know just how mean and crazy people can be when they want something. It certainly makes doing your job difficult!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Legerdemain ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your short story, "The Dragon Skin Coat" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
An interesting title for an interesting story. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is great. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I wasn't quite sure what to expect when I started reading this. I have to say that I was so pleasantly surprised! *BigSmile* This was a great story! You have such talent and a wonderfully creative mind. I will say that I was sad at the end, though, but that was definitely the way it needed to end. I'm not sure if that makes sense but it adds impact to your story. I could feel the loss even though it hadn't happened...yet.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Thaddeus Buxton Winthrop ,
I'm reviewing your letter from home, "Honor + Service = Sacrifice" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This "equation" makes a wonderful title! It's so absolutely true also. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your wood choice is good. It's descriptive and will show the soldier that receives this letter how truly thankful you are for his/her service. I see no spelling errors. I noticed a grammar issue. It's the following:

"But with every heartache and heartbreak you experience at times. That the Good Lord will provide you with some peace of mind."

I think it should read as:

"With every heartache and heartbreak you experience, the Good Lord will provide you with some peace of mind."

Take a look at some of the paragraph spacing in that section as well. It looks like you may have wanted to break some of those thoughts into separate paragraphs.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Just what I've noted above.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a wonderful letter from home! I hope you do post it to the contest forum (if you haven't already). It's such an emotional letter and the soldier that receives it will feel honored that you are aware of his/her sacrifices. I love that you included the post script about your son's recent re-deployment to Afghanistan. That's a great personal touch that I'm sure they'll appreciate.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Jeff ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your short story, "The Ex-Girlfriends Club" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a great title! I just had to find out what kind of "club" it was! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. The dialogue made me feel as though I were a part of your conversation. That's always so enticing to me as a reader! I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Great job! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, it's great!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Ummm, have we ever dated? No, seriously, have we? *Laugh* *BigSmile*

This came up under my "random reads" and I'm SO glad it did! *Delight* I was laughing hysterically because I can totally relate. My friends and family have nicknamed me "Grace" (or "Gracie") because I am, by far, the least graceful person you could ever possibly meet. I've also been referred to as "an accident waiting to happen" because I'm so accident prone. *Laugh* After reading your story I am now wondering if I have an "Ex-Boyfriends Club"! *BigSmile*

This was an absolutely hilarious read that gave me a much needed laugh. Thank you for that! It certainly deserves the 2 awardicons it has received.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Oh What a Life  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Katness ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Oh What a Life" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I think this is a good title for your poem. It fits your subject well...and made me think of a great song! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem flows well. The line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. I'm thinking this is a free verse poem with no particular rhyme scheme because the rhyming stops in the middle but then picks up again at the end. That doesn't detract from the poem at all. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. I don't see any spelling or punctuation errors. Great job!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was an enjoyable read that sends a really nice message to the reader. We all should stop and smell the roses everyday! Life is entirely too short to not take the time to experience the simple, beautiful things that are all around us.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Irish Limericks  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Irish Limericks" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a good title. It "tells it like it is". The reader knows what your poem will be about...and looks forward to reading it! *Shamrock*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
The flow of your rhyming, lyrical limericks is EXCELLENT! Your line-to-line transition is great and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is fantastic! I loved each and every one of them. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None, it's perfect as it is!

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I can't even begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this! I'm Irish and was brought up on Irish folklore. This reminded me of my childhood and I adored it so much! *Shamrock*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Mike~Dolphins Fan 4 Life ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing, "A Nation Moves Forth" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a great reflection on that horrible day that none of us will ever forget. I'm glad you wrote about it and shared it with us. By reflecting and remembering those we lost we as a nation can rebuild and become stronger to fight this war on terror. It's something we should all do.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Alone  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Just an Ordinary Boo! ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Alone" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This is a great title that sets the tone for the reader before they even begin reading your poem. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. The words you chose leave the reader feeling solemn and alone. It takes the reader back to a time when they felt completely alone. I see no misspellings or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a good read that, although sad, has a good message at the end. The reader can feel whole, too, knowing that you were able to reach out to someone and move on.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Dare to Spray  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Hyperiongate ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Dare to Spray" .

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Title *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your title is what drew me to this piece in the first place! It gives no clue as to the subject of your poem. I thought to myself, what on Earth could this poem be about? I had to find out more! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Flow/Rhythm *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your poem flows extremely well. All of your line breaks are appropriately placed and your line-to-line transition is great. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it and I think that's due to the short 2-line stanzas. It makes for a cleaner, clearer read. *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Word Choice/Spelling/Punctuation *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
Your word choice is good. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Helpful Tips for Improvement *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
None

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
This was a thoroughly enjoyable, interesting and educational read. I had never heard of this Hungarian Easter tradition before reading your poem. This was a great write that was very well penned. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of True or False  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Sophy ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "True or False" .

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This is a great title! It's what drew me to read your poem in the first place. I had to find out what it was about! *Star*

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Your word choice is excellent! I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Great job! *Star*

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I love how each line of your poem speaks of something completely different from the lines above and below it. It held my interest to see where your thoughts were going next. I love each and every line so there's no way I could possibly pick a favorite. Although, I have to say that your last line made me laugh out loud! *Laugh*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi acecorona,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing, "My life in the year 2000" .

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Wow, you have certainly come a long way! Kudos to you for turning things around, going back to school and writing! This was a very interesting read about your life the year that WDC was born.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi NickiD89 ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your "WDC Survivor Challenge -- 2011"  entry, "Shameful Actions Come Around, Go Around" .

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A great title for a great story! *Star*

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Your word choice is excellent! Your dialogue tells the story well and keeps the reader's interest. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Great job! *Star*

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I can't even begin to imagine how hard this challenge was! You did a wonderful job with this "dialogue only" story. I wish you luck with the rest of the challenges. You're doing great so far! *BigSmile*

This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Hi Harry ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Who Were the Savages?" .

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This is a wonderful title. I like that it's asking a question. It gets the reader thinking before reading what your poem is about. Great job! *Star*

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Your word choice is excellent. It's thoroughly descriptive but not overdone. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

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None, it's perfect!

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I am part Native American (2 tribes), although you'd never know it to look at me. *Wink* It's something I take great pride in. Your poem truly touched me. The whole poem pulled at my heartstrings but your last stanza broke my heart. As your note at the bottom states, this is quite a shameful chapter in American history.

Thank you for writing this and sharing with us. WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of Restless  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi mcarde ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Restless" .

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A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

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This poem flows really well despite the differing line lengths. That doesn't detract from it at all. All of your line breaks are appropriately placed. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

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The word choice is great. I see no spelling or punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

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This was a thoroughly enjoyable read that was very well penned. If I had to pick a favorite, I'd have to say your last stanza would be it.

"Restlessness is
a tiger in captivity
pacing back and forth."

It's creates a clear picture within the reader's mind and it also closes your poem well. Good job!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Dan Moores ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your short story, "The Life of John Doe" .

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This is a good title that gives the reader just a little hint at the content within your story, without giving anything away so it keeps the reader's intrigued. Good job! *Star*

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Your word choice is good. I see a sentence that has a few errors. You have the following:

"It belong to the Major of the city."

I think you meant "belonged" and "Mayor".

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Just what I have noted above.

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This was an interesting story that I really enjoyed reading. Good luck in the contest!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Dan Moores ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Feelings Are Where The Mind Is" .

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This is a very interesting title. It gets the reader thinking, how does the mind interpret feelings? *Star*

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The length of your lines and stanzas vary so it sets the flow and rhythm off a bit but that does not detract from the poem itself.

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Your word choice is excellent. It's very descriptive and emotional. I see no spelling errors. I think adding some punctuation to your poem would help the reader determine breaks in thought and would add emphasis where it's needed.

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Just what I've noted above.

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This was a great read. I could tell how strongly you felt (or still feel?) for this girl, even though she has somehow hurt you deeply. My favorite part is the following:

"I wake up in the middle of the night
My skin burning as if from a fight
Tears rolling along my skin
Knowing all of my sin"

Your imagery is fantastic! Well done! *Star*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Bernijean ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "To Our Mother Who is in Heaven" .

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A great title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.

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Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

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Your word is quite good. I see no spelling or punctuation errors.

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I lost my mom 6 years ago and, although I think of her every day, Mother's Day always brings the memories to the forefront. It gets me thinking about her life and death. This poem describes all of the emotions I've felt so well. I'm so very sorry for your loss. I hope writing about it has helped to ease your pain some.

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Hyperiongate ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "Monumental Failure" .

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An excellent title that very accurately describes the epic failure of some government leaders. *Star*

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Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. Great rhyme scheme throughout also. *Star*

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Your word choice is great. I particularly like how you use specific quotes in your rhetoric. That's a nice touch. I don't see any punctuation errors. The only spelling error is in this stanza:

"Now Obama’s the man, his success is a must,
Making American great is his goal that I trust."

It should be "America".

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Just what I've noted above.

*FlowerP* *ButterflyV* Overall Impression *ButterflyV* *FlowerP*
I absolutely loved this "rant" of yours! I am a registered Democrat but, more often than not, I find myself voting for whomever I feel is the lesser of two evils. It is so very sad that it comes down to that. My favorite part (because it made me laugh out loud) is the following:

"“Tax breaks for rich will create lots of jobs,”
Means money for fundraisers, suits filled with fat blobs."

It's sad but true...and quite a comical way to put it! *Laugh*

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Liam ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "A Geometric Hymnal" .

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This is a FANTASTIC title for a FANTASTIC poem! *Star*

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Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. Your rhyme scheme is excellent also! *Star*

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Your word choice is awesome! The only misspelling I see is in your description, it should be "universal". You're missing the "s". I see no punctuation errors! Well done! *Star*

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None - this is phenomenal!

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I can't stress enough how much I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Incorporating math into your writing (two of my greatest loves) is brilliant! If I had to pick a favorite stanza (which is tough because I love the whole poem) it would be the second stanza:

"When we measure our existence from this point of view
We understand there is no one, for one is always two.
The space between these opposites is something we define
Simply by expressing that the point becomes a line."

That's quite inventive! *Star*

I see that you're a "newbie" to WDC. I encourage you to look into some of the "newbie" groups here. They're amazing!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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Review of I Miss You  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Keaton Foster: Know My Hell! ,
I'm Julie D - PUBLISHED! and I'm reviewing your poem, "I Miss You" .

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This is a wonderful title that encompasses all of your feelings into 3 little words. *Star*

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Flow is good; line-to-line transition and breaks are done well. Your poem has a very nice rhythm to it. *Star*

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Your word choice is excellent. I could honestly feel your pain. I see no misspellings and no punctuation errors. Well done! *Star*

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I have none. This poem is great as it is.

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As someone who has experienced death way too much (considering how young I am), I'd like to thank you for putting a voice to the emotions I've felt with those losses. Every heartfelt word you've written rings true. My favorite lines are the following:

"Much regret fills my heart
Like a heavy stone
I must bear the weight
Of all the chances missed and
All the decisions I failed to make"

Wow! That is amazing writing. That is so absolutely true of the pain, emptiness and regret that is felt when you lose someone you love. Bravo! I'm quite surprised that your beautiful poem has not received an awardicon. I'll be sending on shortly.

Thanks so much for sharing. I hope that writing about this terrible loss has helped you.

Keep up the good work! WRITE ON!! *Star*

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