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Ridiculously we don't think you are here for your own writing as well
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What an amazing gift you gave your daughter for her high school graduation. I'm sure this brought tears to her eyes. She's so lucky to have a wonderful, loving mother like you!
Just remember to take time for yourself every now and again to
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What a wonderfully sweet poem about watching the sunset with the one you love. Thanks so much for sharing!
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What a beautiful tribute to your beloved father on his birthday. Thank you so much for sharing!
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Hi psychrevolt,
How very philosophical of you! This is a great poem. I enjoyed it quite a bit. My favorite line is, "We are the universe we have sought to explore."
I found no grammatical errors since you are compulsive about that. When I read that in your port, I laughed and wondered if you and I were separated at birth.
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This is an awesome poem about the ocean. I'm quite the "summer baby" myself and I'm fortunate enough to live near the beach. I love spending time there and your sentiments in this poem certainly ring true.
My favorite part"
"The ocean is forever,
in an infinite change
like time."
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Thank you for putting in to words how so many of us feel about writing. This was a fantastic poem!
Just remember to take time for yourself every now and again to
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Thank you so much for sharing this moving poem about your mom's final moments.
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Hi Adam,
This is a great poem about unrequited love. Thank you for sharing it with the rest of the pioneers. It's something we can all relate to, that's for sure.
My favorite part:
"But a friend I have been, and shall remain,
‘Tis better than nothing at all,
Providing her shelter during the rain,
Arms open to catch her when she falls."
Thanks again for sharing and keep up the good work!
Hi meg,
This lovely poem that tells the tale of your precious family heirloom is so beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing it with all the other pioneers.
My favorite part:
"Six hand spans wide and she's made of wood,
She'd tell wondrous stories, if only she could."
Thank you again for sharing. Keep up the good work!
Hi Violet,
This is such a beautiful poem that truly speaks of what love is or perhaps, maybe, what it should be. Thank you so much for sharing this with the rest of our fellow pioneers.
My favorite part:
"Love my sarcasm, because I love yours.
Love open windows, love not closed doors."
Hi A. H. Shriver,
I really enjoyed this poem. Your inspiration for the poem and the poem itself is so very true. I don't see any grammatical errors. The poem has a nice flow to it.
My favorite part:
"Many speak of time
as if it costs a dime,
and patience is a crime
as they follow a fast internal rhyme
where not a moment is sublime."
Thanks so much for sharing. Keep up the good work!
Hi WordMaestro,
This is a great poem that truly defines that moment you realize you've found your soul mate. Punctuation and capitalization are based on each poet's preference so I will not comment on that. I did, however, find a spelling error. Your line, "this geogrpahy of you", I believe you meant "geography".
My favorite part:
"I will press my ear to your chest
and hear the pulsing lifesong
that serenaded my solitude
in traces of distant echoes"
Thanks so much for sharing. Keep up the good work!
Hi Chuck,
This is a cute poem. I just think it needs a few tweaks. In the first line, you have "were" and I think you meant "we're". In the third line, you have "there" and it should be "their". In the fourth line, "a" should be "an". In the seventh line, I'm not sure if "any thing" should be "anything". I guess it just depends on how you mean it.
My favorite part:
"If any thing shatters
our faces are on platters"
This is a good poem with a strong message. There are a few grammatical errors I noticed. You have commas after every line, which means this poem is one, long run-on sentence. Try adding some periods and maybe a colon or semi-colon in a few places.
Also, in the second stanza, I noticed a few things. In the third line, I believe "its" should be "it's". Then in the last line of that stanza, you have the word "fell" but I think you meant "feel". In the third line of the third stanza, you need to capitalize "I".
My favorite part:
"You'll get nowhere by testing me,
Please just believe my love is true,
Though I doubt i will ever say it,
I want no one except you,"
Hi SWPoet,
This is a beautiful tribute to your son. It's something he will always have. I don't see any grammatical errors. The poem has a very nice flow.
My favorite part:
"For I will dwell in him someday
to guide him when he’s grown
Don’t you worry mother fears,
he’ll never be alone."
Thank you for sharing such a beautiful piece...and a part of yourself. Keep up the good work!
Awww, aren't dogs the best? This is such a sweet, touching tribute to your good, old girl. I can definitely relate to this. My dog will be 14 years old this summer. I've had her since she was 6 weeks old. She doesn't seem to realize her age or limitations though - she still runs around like a puppy! Here's a picture of my good, old girl "Invalid Item" .
Thanks so much for sharing such an adorable poem. Keep up the good work!
This is a beautiful poem that truly reflects the emotions of a love felt in this lifetime and beyond. I do not see any grammatical errors and it has a wonderful flow to it.
My favorite part: "Together their love conquers all
the stumbling blocks of life.
She has the strength he gives to her,
He has his loving wife."
Thank you so much for sharing. Keep up the good work!
I agree with you that being in love can certainly illuminate your aura. This is a great poem! The reader can almost feel what you're writing and relate it to their own personal experience(s) in love.
Grammatically, I don't see any errors. Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work!
How do we know if this is love? :) This is a cute poem asking the questions we have all asked ourselves at some point in our lives.
Just a few grammatical things. In your last line, "joyfull" is not spelled correctly. It should be "joyful". Also, since these are questions you are asking, should have question marks??
This is a very good poem. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work!
This is an extremely powerful poem about the last moments before a loved on dies. I was there when my father passed away so I could relate to this poem.
There's only one grammatical error that I noticed. In the last line of your second stanza, I think instead of "hold", it should either be "holds" or "is held". Other than that, this is great.
What a beautiful tribute to your beloved siblings. How awful it must have been for you to not only lose them, but lose them both in the same month. My heart goes out to you.
Thank you so much for sharing such a deeply emotional poem. Keep up the good work!
Life is definitely a gamble and made up of the many choices that bring us to today. I really enjoyed this poem because I could relate to it in so many ways.
There's only one grammatical error (or it might be by choice). In the next to the last line, I think there should be a comma after "Alas".
Wow, whoever she was did a number on you, didn't she? I like the way you used the ocean, waves and sand castle as metaphors to describe your turbulent relationship and new beginnings.
I don't see any grammatical errors. Your poem flows nicely.
I hope you realize that they are plenty of fish in the sea (pun intended) and that not all women are like this.
Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work!
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