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Review of Stiletto  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi leon ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Stiletto" .

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I thought this was great...and a very popular topic (unreturned/unrequited love)! My favorite part is the following:

"You sit all forlorn, broken hearted and sad"

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My only suggestions are that, in your last stanza, "your" should be "you're". Also, I think adding some punctuation might help the flow a little.

I see that you're a "newbie" (as of today) to WDC so welcome aboard! I encourage you to check out some of the great newbie groups here.

Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Jake Halbrooks ,
I'm reviewing your two poems, "A Lovely Addiction" .

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I can't believe that these are your first attempts at poetry! These are so short, sweet and poetic! I hope you do name them and separate them into two different items here at WDC.

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Again, I would separate them and name them. Other than that, I think they're great! *Star*

I see you're a "newbie" (as of today) here at WDC. I encourage you to look into some of the fabulous "newbie" groups that are offered.

Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!!!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Francille_em81 ,
I'm reviewing your poem, .

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I think we all have our gripes about the office so it's nice to have a friend/co-worker to "vent" to. I could certainly relate to some of this. My favorite part is your ending:

"You’re one of the few friends
who see the real me
Who I can be with
Without pretense, just glee."

It depicts what friendship is all about!

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I wouldn't change anything!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!!

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Review of So Easy To...  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi {suser: franksimon},
I'm reviewing your poem, "So Easy To..." .

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Where do I begin? I am such a hopeless romantic so this poem really struck a cord with me. It's absolutely adorable and very telling of the love you feel. My favorite part is the following:

"Your smile melts my icy heart, leaving me a puddle
Wanting to get a kiss, and have a little cuddle..."

Awwwww! That is just too cute!!

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Don't change a thing! It's perfect!!

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Review of Young Last Words  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi CaesarRupus.... ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Young Last Words" .

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What a beautiful poem about the tragic end of a young life. My favorite part is the following:

"I know what lies ahead –
An end and a beginning."

That is so lovely and the perfect way to describe what lies ahead for all of us when we pass on.

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I don't see any errors. There's nothing I would change.

Thank you so much for sharing such an emotional piece. Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!

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Review of Icy blue eyes  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Karma ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Icy blue eyes" , after seeing it on "Please Review" .

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This is a poem that I can relate to. It's very expressive, clearly outlining your angst against someone you once cared for deeply. My favorite part was the following:

"Honestly in this entire world

I'm probably the only girl

Who hates those blue eyes."


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I don't see any errors. You did very well!

Thanks so much for sharing and keep up the great work. WRITE ON!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Thaddeus Buxton Winthrop ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Sunsets and Storms" .

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I thought this poem was incredibly beautiful. It has such vivid imagery, I could almost "see" what the poem described. My favorite part is the following:

"Romantic at times, yet always held in awe.
Sunsets so grand, we wouldn't find any flaw."

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I do not see any errors. This is very well written. Good job! *Star*

Thanks so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!

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Review of You Don't Love Me  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi The Original T-Bakes ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "You Don't Love Me" .

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This is a powerful poem that allows the reader to feel the emotions. My favorite part is the following:

"But I live in my life now,
Not worlds apart,
I swear ne’er to take a vow
Trapping my free heart."

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I didn't see any misspellings or grammatical errors. Good job!

Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work! WRITE ON!!!
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Review of My Eyes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi JoJi ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "My Eyes" .

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A true depiction that the eyes are the passage to the soul. Very insightful!

My favorite part is the following:

"Look into my eyes,
What do you see?
Untold stories
Untold secrets."

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My only suggestion would be to add some more punctuation. It might help the flow, especially in your second stanza. Other than that, I think it's a great poem!

I see that you're also a "newbie". I encourage you to look into joining some of the "newbie" groups out there. I'm also sending along 1,000 gift points with this review to help you get started here at WDC!

Thanks for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!
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Review of Infinite Love  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi CanIBorrowAPen? ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Infinite Love" . I see that you're a "newbie" to WDC also. Welcome!

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This is a lovely tribute to lost love. It beautifully describes the depth of emotion and how love lives on even after our beloved has passed on.

My favorite part is the following:

"I know that you might be far away now, physically.
But in my heart you will always stay, irrevocably and inevitably."

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My only suggestion would be to maybe add some punctuation. It may help the flow of the poem a little more. Again, this is just a suggestion. I'm certainly no expert!

I'm sending 1,000 gift points along with my review to use as you please. There are several "newbie" groups that I encourage you to look into.

Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work. WRITE ON!!!
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Review of Angel like Me  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi jimnomorris ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Angel like Me" , after seeing it on "The Shameless "Plug" Page" .

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Awwwwwww!! This is such a sweet poem! You convey your affection for your beloved with so few words. You are a romantic soul like myself.

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I don't see any errors - great job! *Star*

Thank you so much for a great read and for sharing a little bit of yourself. Keep up the great work and WRITE ON!!

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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Review of I Remember  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi strlcuckoo ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "I Remember" , after seeing it on the Shameless Plug page. This is an adorable poem about childhood memories. The only thing I would change would be this line, "The fishing trips, the outdoors fun". I think "outdoors" should be "outdoor". That's the only thing I would change.

Thanks so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!!!
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Review of Hope  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jamminbales ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Hope" . I really enjoyed this Shakespearean sonnet! I thought it was put together well and the rhyming does not seem forced at all. My favorite part is the following:

"The pain caused tonight will last for a long time
As we each seek to take our pound of flesh"

Thanks so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!!!
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Review of Watercolor Dreams  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Nightshift ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Watercolor Dreams" , after seeing it in this week's poetry newsletter. Your vivid imagery describes the true beauty of spring. I really enjoyed reading it. My favorite part is the following:

"With ardent strokes her brush paints the ‘scape,
Mother Nature’s artwork begins to take shape."

Mother Nature's artwork is truly beautiful! Thank you so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!!
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Review of Loss  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Yellow Rose ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Loss" . Loss is such a poweful emotion and it's something we all experience sooner or later. Your poem describes it perfectly with so few lines.

Thanks so much for sharing a little piece of yourself. Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!!!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi COUNTRYMOM-JUST REMEMBER ME ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "THE HEALING TOUCH OF GOD'S HAND" , after seeing it in the Spiritual Newsletter. This is a wonderful poem and a lovely reminder that "He hears us and will always be there". That's so very true!

Thank you so much for sharing! Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!!
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Review of Relief  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Joy ,
I'm reviewing your poem, "Relief" , after seeing it in the Spiritual Newsletter. This is a FABULOUS poem and it has truly inspired me. I've never written a poem in Ae Freslighe verse form and now I'm itching to try!

Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful piece! Keep up the great work and WRITE ON!!!!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi easyeverett ,
I'm writing this review for your poem "Soft And Silken Hair" . I enjoyed this poem quite a bit. I could feel the depth of your emotion throughout. One thing I noticed is that this line, "My soul confront a dark and centered core.", I think it should actually be "confronts". I wouldn't change anything else.

Thanks so much for sharing. Keep up the good work and WRITE ON!
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Mrs. Populatery ,
OK, let me start by saying that I think this is a good storyline but it needs some work. There are a lot of grammatical errors (misspellings, missing or incorrect punctuation, etc.). There are several places where the story gets a little...choppy, I think is probably the best way to explain it. It sort of jumps around or is inconsistent. I hope this isn't coming across as mean. It's really just constructive criticism. Again, you've got a good story here, there's just some things that need to be cleaned up a little. I'd be happy to help in any way I can, if you'd like, and even re-review it once the corrections have been made.

Let me know if you have any questions or need any help. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of Complex Numbers  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Awesome blog! I've only read a few entries so far but I will definitely be reading more. I have to say "Doomsday"  cracked me up! By the way, I'm a chick and I totally agree with you about VD. It's total BS. Flowers/gifts/whatever mean a lot more when they're given on a random day instead of being given on a bogus holiday.

You've got yourself a new blog follower! Keep up the great work and write on!!!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a great tribute to your 2 best friends! I love my friends dearly and have written poems for them as well. Just one correction to this line, "of a heart the pumps such depth." It should be "that" instead of "the". Other than that, I wouldn't change a thing. Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work! Write on!!
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Review of Awakenings  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great poem! You really captured the rebirth of nature with the coming of Spring. Your vivid imagery and the use of the picture really take the reader to a beautiful Spring day. My favorite part was the following:

"The sycamores, the oaks, the beech,
reach heavenward as they beseech
the soft embrace of gentle rain;
a harmony of silent speech."

I wish you all the best in the contest! I'm sending 1,000 gift points with my review because I really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work! Write on!
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Review of Tomorrow?  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, you had me from the very first word. What an amazing twist at the end of this wonderful short story. I have to admit, I did not see that ending coming and it totally gave me chills! I wouldn't change a thing about this.

I enjoyed this so much that I'm sending 1,000 gift points along with my review. Enjoy! Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work! Write on!!
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a great read!! I thoroughly enjoyed this very endearing Valentine's tale! I do wish that it was just a little bit longer. In my mind, Andrew proceeded to profess is undying love and propose but, of course, that's probably just the hopeless romantic in me.

Again, I really enjoyed this piece. I wouldn't change a thing! Keep up the great work and write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a great read! Thanks so much for sharing. Your imagery is awesome - I could picture what you were saying quite clearly. I wouldn't change a thing about it. Keep up the good work and write on!
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