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Review of Just Desserts  
Review by GroovyStella
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi there, brin } I am GroovyStella and it is my honor to be reviewing "Just Desserts"  today.

I warn you that you are being reviewed by a Newbie *Bottle* just like you. *Bigsmile*
I am not a professional and these are just my humble opinions. I hope you take them as I have intended. It is not my goal to criticize or hinder you in anyway, but to grow and learn with you. So without further adieu....here goes. *Bigsmile*


Positive: This is so cute and funny and light hearted. It was a fun read and I enjoyed every word of it



Suggestions: In the last line....is that supposed to be got or get?


Overall: Brin, we meet again. I always enjoy your writing. I think you've done such a good job here. I really enjoyed it. Good job


Thank you for sharing your work with me. I would be honored to read/review more of your work. Good luck and God bless!!

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Review of Eternal Vow  
Review by GroovyStella
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi there stanjonesjournal }! It is an honor to be reviewing
 Eternal Vow  (E)
A short poem
#1965993 by stanjonesjournal



Welcome to WDC. I hope you love it here like I do. There's plenty to do so dive right in. I warn you that you are being reviewed by a Newbie. *Cool* I am not a professional so please take my opinions in the manner in which I give them. My goal is to grow along with you and be encouraging as possible. Always remember that my opinion is just one of many. Good luck and God bless!



*BulletB*Suggestions:
I don't have any real suggestions. This poem was too short to have too many problems :)


*BulletB*Positive: I think it is well written.



*Bullet*Overall: I get very impressed when I read short work packed with emotion. Well done. I would be honored to review your other work. Keep writing



*BigSmile* Thank you for sharing your work with me.



GroovyStella
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Review of Fly Away  
Review by GroovyStella
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there Nellafantasia }! It is an honor to be reviewing
 Fly Away  (E)
This is a song I wrote about my dad.
#1966021 by Nellafantasia



Welcome to WDC. I hope you love it here like I do. There's plenty to do so dive right in. I warn you that you are being reviewed by a Newbie. *Cool* I am not a professional so please take my opinions in the manner in which I give them. My goal is to grow along with you and be encouraging as possible. Always remember that my opinion is just one of many. Good luck and God bless!



*BulletB*Suggestions:
I don't have a lot of suggestions here. Only fault I found was the word taring. I don't know if that was meant to be spelled that way.


*BulletB*Impression:
This song impressed sadness upon me. Most of the time I don't get hidden messages but I can feel the pain coming from these words.


*Bullet*Overall: I think this is very well written and I think you have something to be proud of here. You've done a beautiful job on this song. I'm sorry for the place that it comes from. I would be honored to review your other work. Keep writing



*BigSmile* Thank you for sharing your work with me.



GroovyStella
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Review of Determination  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there Nitin }! It is an honor to be reviewing
 Determination  (E)
Determined to be with Him
#1965760 by Nitin



I warn you that you are being reviewed by a Newbie. *Cool* I am not a professional so please take my opinions in the manner in which I give them. My goal is to grow along with you and be encouraging as possible. Always remember that my opinion is just one of many. Good luck and God bless!



*BulletB*Suggestions: Okay, I see the same pattern with this one. Most of the lines were in rhyme but then it didn't rhyme then it went back to rhyme.



*BulletB*Positive: Again I saw the same positive pattern. Beautifully written and coming from that place in the heart that is meant just for Him. I love what it says and the feeling I get when I read it. If the few lines in the middle rhymed like the rest I would have given you a much higher rate. Maybe even a 5 star.



*Bullet*Overall: I really live this poem and I like your style. I have enjoyed reviewing your work and I know others will too. I would be honored to review more of your portfolio. Keep writing



*BigSmile* Thank you for sharing your work with me.



GroovyStella

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Review of Life After Life  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there Nitin }! It is an honor to be reviewing
 Life After Life  (E)
Thanksgiving to God
#1965757 by Nitin



I warn you that you are being reviewed by a Newbie. *Cool* I am not a professional so please take my opinions in the manner in which I give them. My goal is to grow along with you and be encouraging as possible. Always remember that my opinion is just one of many. Good luck and God bless!



*BulletB*Negative: I always like to start with the negative first. Some lines didn't flow well. They were a little cluttered



*BulletB*Positive: Regardless of how the lines flow it is a beautiful written piece. I didn't see any grammar mistakes and the words were beautiful



*Bullet*Overall: I think you have a way with words and a real talent. I could see that the words are coming from a real place in your heart. I love the Lord too and am always encouraged to see other life Him up. I would be honored to review your other work. Keep writing



*BigSmile* Thank you for sharing your work with me.



GroovyStella

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Review of Bare  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi ! After reading "Invalid Item" , I offer you these comments:
First let me welcome you to the WDC family. I hope you love it here as much as I do. There's plenty to do here so just dive right in. I will be reviewing your piece as an Angel Army member. There is a group call The Newbies Academy Group. They will teach you about the site and guide you.
I am not a professional so please take my opinions that you find helpful and throw away the rest. Good luck and God bless!

(Story Strengths)I thought this poem was deeply personal. It really spoke the truth about you I think.



Negative Feedback Stanza 4 was a little big. The lines were longer and sort of threw off the speed a little



(Suggestions) Find a way to shorten stanza 4 still keeping the message



Grammar.I found no grammar mistakes

Overall: I think you did a great job with this. You should be very proud. If stanza 4 read better I would have rated you a 5 star



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Review of Writing.Com 101  
for entry "The Review Tool" 
Review by GroovyStella
Rated: E | (1.0)
Hi ! After reading "Invalid Item" , I offer you these comments:

(Story Strengths),



Negative Feedback



(Suggestions),



Grammar.



Story Strenghts:



Suggestions:




Punctuation/Spelling/Grammar:



*Star* Thank you for sharing your work!


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Review of The Blood  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Let me welcome you to the WDC. I think you'll love it here. Plenty to do so dive right in. I am not a professional so view my opinions as such.

The poem was nicely done. I feel in this one that some of the lines are to long. I would consider breaking them into two lines instead of one.

Having said that, I think it's a good piece and you have a knack for writing.

Good luck and God bless!
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Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
First let me welcome you to the WDC family. I hope you love it here as much as I do. There's plenty to do here so just dive right in. I will be reviewing your piece as an Angel Army member. There is a group call The Newbies Academy Group. They will teach you about the site and guide you.
I am not a professional so please take my opinions that you find helpful and throw away the rest. Good luck and God bless!

Let's start with the negative:::some of the lines didn't flow very well. You have several that are much too long. They might flow better if you broke them down into 2 lines instead of one. It takes a little bit away from the words because they make you stop for a second to try and read them in a way that make them flow.

Okay now the positive::: when I read those long lines like they were two it made it flow nicely. Sounds like there is a deep meaning behind those words.

Overall:::: you did very well. Keep up the good work
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Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
First let me welcome you to the WDC family. I hope you love it here as much as I do. There's plenty to do here so just dive right in. I will be reviewing your piece as an Angel Army member. There is a group call The Newbies Academy Group. They will teach you about the site and guide you.
I am not a professional so please take my opinions that you find helpful and throw away the rest.

I really liked this poem. Hard to find anything negative to say about it. Other than it is extremely sad. It spoke to me on a personal level. It sounds like it was written for me. If fits what I am going through in my life right now. I hope you didn't write this from a personal experience.

On a technical level...you really have a gift for words and I think you should tap into that all that you can. I found that your grammar is right on. The words flow nicely.

Overall..You did a good job. Of course no writing is perfect but I see nothing immediate that you would need to do to fix this. Kudos to you my friend.

On another note, if you're like me this kind of stuff comes from the heart. If that's so and you need something there's help: hotlines for one. You can reach out to someone. It's a little fearful when you see this kind of writing. I have a few of poems like this myself and I know where I was emotionally when I wrote them. So please if you need someone to talk to shoot me a quick email. It comes straight to my phone and I will answer ASAP. Good luck to you and God bless you!


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Review of Satan's Whore  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
First let me welcome you to the WDC family. I hope you love it here as much as I do. There's plenty to do here so just dive right in. I will be reviewing your piece as an Angel Army member. There is a group call The Newbies Academy Group. They will teach you about the site and guide you.
I am not a professional so please take my opinions that you find helpful and throw away the rest. Good luck and God bless!

I normally like only poetry that rhymes but I have to say I rather enjoyed this one. It spoke to me on a personal level. Sometimes we interpret things in a way they were not intended. So, I see this as someone who loses a love that was maybe one sided. Maybe he/she realizes that all the plans they pinned on this love turned out to be futile. Maybe he/she loves someone more than they receive from the other person. Anyway, that's how I interpret. Am I right or am I making it fit emotionally for me?
Except for one thing....I'm not satan's whore. I'm his enemy lol. You've done a very good job on this. It's a little abstract but most poetry is. Thank you for sharing this story and it's been my pleasure to review it.

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Review of She Dances  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I will be reviewing your poem for WDC Angel Army. I am not a professional so please view my comments as my own personal opinion. Keep what you agree with and throw out the rest.

I really liked it. One could view this as seeing a woman for less than what she is. Just as a conquest. However, after reading what you wrote about writing it for a friend, I don't think that is your view point is.

I think you did a good job on wording it so she doesn't look like a piece of meat. Your grammar is good, the sentences flow well, and overall it's a great poem. Hopefully it won't be so long before you write another. You're good at it.
Thank you for sharing your story with me. It has been an honor to read it and a pleasure to review it. Good luck and God bless!
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Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First let me welcome you to our WDC family. I hope you love it here as much as I do. Secondly I'm not a professional so take what I say as only my opinion. Keep what you like pitch what you don't. I will be reviewing this story for the WDC Angle Army.

at first i thought what a negative review this would garnish because it didn't make sense. I couldn't figure it out then I made it in a few lines and was hooked.
my mind started right away thinking of things she had done. ..first he cheated.....then she had an abortion....then i didn't know....then she killed him....then came the twist and I LOVED IT!!!! I really enjoy this. if this were a normal piece that didn't have that twist at the end to be honest i wouldn't have like it. but it had that twist so i did.
you hooked me with the first couple of lines and kept my interest throughout. if i hadn't have had all of these thoughts i would have given up but it kept changing for me and that just kept me wanting to know what she did. you didn't disappoint.

good luck to you and God bless!


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Review of Greed  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
First let me welcome you to the WDC family. I believe you will love it here. I do. There are lots of things to do so dive right in. I welcome you to stop by and read something from my portfolio.
I am in no way a professional so take my opinions as a personal opinion. Keep what you agree with and toss what you don't.

The Negative: #I... didn't feel this had anything to do with greed. I can see your play on words but I honestly forgot the story was called greed until I got to the last sentence. However, there is nothing wrong with that. I would just incorporate greed into the beginning and middle. Make your character say or think something like......the money isn't worth this.....i wish i didn't care about money so much.....when you first go into the scary basement ......start wishing you didn't want the money this badly.
#2...I wish it would have been longer. Take the action further. This story didn't have to end there. Make it about the creature, or some mystery. I would eliminate the greed concept.

The Positive: I like to save the best for last. I think this story is well written. Your sentence and paragraph structure is right on target. There were no mistakes that jumped out at me. Your grammar is great. The plot is clever and imaginative. I think you have something great to build on. I was hooked within the first 2 or 3 sentences and it kept my interest all the way to the end.


Overall: I think you did very well on this. I would love to see a part 2. Good job and God bless!


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Review by GroovyStella
Rated: E | (3.5)
very nice. i enjoyed it very much. this won't be a long review because it was done well and all I have to say is good job...good luck and God bless!
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Review of Upside Down  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
First of all let me welcome you to the WDC family. I think you'll love it here. I know I do. It's an honor to review your story and I thank you for sharing it with us.
I am in no way a professional so take what makes sense and pitch the rest.

completely unease about it all (should it be uneasy?)
Everything had changed by taking a turn for the worst; ( i think this should be worse)

I say all the time that I like what I've read and this time is no different. Most of the time I don't get into fantasy work but I truly enjoyed this story. I think you have the makings of a great series of short stories about these characters or a short novel. I would read it in a heartbeat! I found virtually no mistakes. Your grammar was okay. Sentence and paragraph structure was right on. You held my attention from start to finish. I was hooked within the first 2 or 3 sentences. I say job well done. Keep on writing....Good luck with your writings you mentioned in your bio block, and God bless!


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Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First of all let me welcome you to the WDC family. I think you'll love it here. I know I do.
I am in no way a professional so take anything I say that you agree with and disregard everything else.

This poem spoke to me in a very touchy way. One of my favorite people in this world is my granny. I love her with all my heart. She's been gone now for several years. There was nothing in the world like her smile. So job well done. Keep on writing...Good luck and God bless!

Stop by my portfolio and let me know what you think of my work.
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Review of Deputy Smith  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
By no means am I a professional so please disregard anything I say you disagree with.

mind more clear." he thought, before taking (when following a full stop the next word should be capped. clear." He thought,

also thoughts look better italicized

I really enjoyed this piece. Quite entertaining. That deputy isn't too smart. I hope he was meant to look that way hahaha. You could actually make a pretty good story, short story or long story, with this prompt. You did a fine job.
Keep on writing. Good luck and God bless!
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Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
First let me welcome you to the WDC family. I think you'll like it here. I'm in no way a professional so disregard any comments that you disagree with.

From above I heard the creek of my parents' bed (i think the word you're looking for is creak)

I really enjoyed this. At first I thought it was a child in a war torn country lol. However, I prefer the scared little dog on the fourth. Thanks for sharing. Keep on writing. Good luck and God bless!
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Review of The Plague  
Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
First of all let me welcome you to WDC. This is an awesome place and I think you will love it.

I am not a real professional so please take my suggestions and apply those you like and kick out those you don't.

“What’s going on?” our frazzled teacher a “Call the nurse!” was all
I think these two places could use caps....Our and Was. When a dialogue sentence comes to a full stop the next letter should be capped. That's only my humble opinion.

Now to the important stuff....I loved it!!!! I like the way you write as well as what you wrote. It just sounds like you're talking to me. The piece is original. I haven't read many works that make me feel like I'm just talking to the writer. I say you've got a real talent. Your piece is virtually mistake free and was as close to perfect as one can get. I hope to read more from you. Good luck and God bless!
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Review by GroovyStella
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I think that is the best Christmas poem I have ever read. The words flowed smoothly and it was well put together. It's a delight and I know others will love it too. Welcome to WDC. Keep on writing. Good luck and God bless!
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Review of My Life Alone  
Review by GroovyStella
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I did enjoy this and I think others will too. I'm not sure of the meaning. Why you feel that you could possible face life alone. However, I think that is a plus for me because I like it when a reader has the chance to see something as their own situation. For example: I am getting ready to go through a divorce so naturally I worry about being alone. Maybe that's why I didn't see your reason clearly. Anyway, I think it has a "ok I'm throwing my words down the way they come to my head" feel and I love it. Keep on writing my friend. Welcome to WDC. Good luck and God bless!
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Review of IMPRISONED LOVE  
Review by GroovyStella
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I really liked this piece. It's raw and emotional. Her pain is palpable. Good job.
God bless!
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Review by GroovyStella
Rated: E | (4.0)
Love it!! so cute. lighter subjects are just feel good
God bless!
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Review of Kids  
Review by GroovyStella
Rated: E | (3.5)
I identifies with this story. I don't have a wayward son. He's only 12. But, I was a wayward daughter. I never understood what I was doing to my mother until I became one myself. And as my son is special needs and doesn't know he's old enough to be in trouble, I still worry myself to death over him. I was drinking and smoking pot by the age of 12. I stopped when I turned 21. Ironic huh? I became a Christian at 21. I fought a narcotic addiction. My mom has been my champion. She loves me no matter what I put her through. Now that I'm 40 and she is 64 she still worries herself sick over me and my siblings. The difference now is I have begun to worry about her too. Take comfort, your son may surprise you yet. I didn't go to college until I was 27! I was already a wife and mother. So from one mothers heart to another just trust your son to the one who gave him life. He can reach us when no one else can. God bless!
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