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Review of Itzpapalotl  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, ragefire2000!

I'm here to give your story, "Itzpapalotl" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This story left a chilling image in my mind. Maybe I've seen too many slasher films, but without any description beyond a possessed man, a cleaver and a family van, I was still imagining blood-stained walls and carnage.

I'm not familiar enough with Itzpapalotl to review her characterisation.

Suggested Improvements
In the second paragraph, the before Aztec.
Perhaps you can include a picture of Itzpapalotl?

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of Endless wants  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, His_Angel_01 , and welcome to WDC!

I'm here to give your poem, "Endless wants" , a Simply Positive Newbie review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Nice poem. I can see the image of someone dying, wishing they had more time to do things, and enjoy life.

Flow & Style
For the most part, it flows well, though some of the lines seem sound off.

Suggested Improvements
skys should be skies

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn

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Review of Bowling  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Review of
 Bowling  (E)
A Kyrielle poem for Day 2, Rhythm & Rhyme winter contest.
#1518084 by JACE


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
This sounds like an exciting though perhaps a somewhat disappointing night at the lanes. Splits and rare spares mar a perfect score.

The poem followed the form well, and was fun to read.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of The Ferris Wheel  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Review of
 The Ferris Wheel  (13+)
A Double Triquain Swirl poem for Day 1, Rhythm & Rhyme summer contest.
#1581814 by JACE


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I liked this poem about the different kinds of wheels and what may be the most fun. It had nice images and and feelings associated with the ride. Of course, who can forget about that magical kiss at the top.

Flow & Style
Very nice use of the form.

Suggested Improvements
None.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, T.J. Wrathe , and welcome to WDC!

I'm here to give your poem, "A Lovers Ramblings" , a Simply Positive Newbie review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This is simply a beautiful poem to the one you love. It has heartfelt emotions and imagery.

Flow & Style
Nice flow and rhyme.

Suggested Improvements
None.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn

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Review of Lonely Road  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello, ℰ𝒯𝒞．．． , and welcome to WDC!

I'm here to give your poem, "Lonely Road" , a Simply Positive Newbie review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Nice poem about having a life altering event make you change your ways. Is there a reason for block letters?

Flow & Style
I think the flow would be improved with the use of some punctuation.

Suggested Improvements
Even if you don't use punctuation anywhere else in your poem, I suggest using apostrophes to spell words like I'm correctly.

Thanks for sharing.

--Wyn

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Review of Defiance  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Review of
Defiance  (E)
A fallen oak provides a lesson in not giving up.
#1585947 by 🌕 HuntersMoon


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
If we look to nature, we can often find the answers to our problems. The title fit the poem well. The oak is known as a magestic tree, with its wide limbs and strong trunks. They are often uprooted during severe storms, yet can still be found everywhere, standing proudly and strong.

Form & Style
Excellent form and style, with an even pacing.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of The Ringmaster  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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The Ringmaster  (E)
Life is a carnival - complete with thrills, triumphs, and disaster. (Form: ZaniLa)
#1584001 by 🌕 HuntersMoon


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Life is like a circus. That's how I read your poem, anyways. In a way, it is. There's the fascination and anticipation of things to come, good times and fun, boredom and waiting. Sometimes, there is tragedy too. Through it all, can there be someone ultimately directing the show?

Form & Style
Perfect form, rhythm and rhyme.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of Secret Admirer  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hello, Stephhhhh! !

I'm here to give your story, "Secret Admirer" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Wow, what a chilling story! I liked how you relayed Michelle's thoughts and feelings, how she took every little action as something more than what it really was.

Character & Plot
Told from Michelle's point-of-view, we get a good look in to her delusions. The plot moved well, with no slow spots.

Grammar & Construction
This is where the story bogged down for me.

Your first sentence is missing the in front of cracks and desolate.
to fill my insides
Having fill two sentences in a row as a descriptive word is repetive. How about welled up inside me?
blond hair,making
Space after the comma
making sure my thick coats of the lipstick didn’t
Once again, repetitive. You're already talking about lipstick in the previous sentence. You can shorten the sentence to making sure the thick coats didn't.
crooked, teeth
Don't need the comma.
would most defiantly be
Do you mean definately?
The thought of her monotony made my stomach churn. Her long brown hair; her petite curves; her tedious sense of style; her laugh.
I think you can replace the period after churn with a colon, and the semi-colons with commas, since it's a list, rather than a stand alone sentence.
heard a loud buzz, opening the ‘employee entrance only’ door.
Did the buzz open the door? How about heard a loud buzz as the 'employee entrance only' door opened.
My heart beating harder for him
Beating should be beat.
trying to appear detached
Period after detached.
before you left baby
Comma after left.
he was face me
Face should be facing.
long as I have too
Should be to.
so that I the front desk
Remove I.
shadows from were I sat
Should be where.
I starred at their lips dance
stared and lips'
buried in the miracle of
Do you mean middle?
You cant stay though
cant should be can't.
to my loves first turn
love's
“Your so beautiful.”
You're


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Stephhhhh! !

I'm here to give your story, "Don't Fear The Reaper" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Great imagery in describing Anna's confinement and overall situation. The beginning makes me wonder about her psychosis. Why was she in a strait-jacket? What happened to her hair? Did she cut it off then try to commit suicide? None of that information is important, but it unanswered questions let my imagination wander.

It all leads to the appearance of the angel and the question of whether he was real or a delusion. I like how it's left unanswered as well.

The story flowed well, without any slow areas. The pace seemed to be frighteningly fast after the angel appeared. Maybe it was just my desire to read what happens.

Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Beck Firing back up! !

I'm here to give your story, "My Love Affair with Mr. Coffee (r)" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
If our appliances could talk, what horror stories can they tell us. I enjoyed the humour of the story. The coffee pot was suitably fed up, and it showed with the drasatic action taken to demand better treatment.

Grammar & Construction
Nothing seems amiss here.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of Gnome Sweet Gnome  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello, Beck Firing back up! !

I'm here to give your story, "Gnome Sweet Gnome" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
I thought this story was absolutely hilarious. Imagine coming home, only to find your house being taken over by creatures most people believe don't exist!

Grammar & Construction
Two weeks ago she pulled a prank I was sure was again blocking my entrance to the house.
This sentence is confusing. I understand the jist of it, but read as it is, it's two sentence fragments put together.

A couple missing commas in the second paragraph.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of Pet Store Friends  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Beck Firing back up! !

I'm here to give your story, "Pet Store Friends" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
As a beginning, I think this flash is enough to pique a person's curiosity. I know mine is.

What I Liked
That it's told from the dogs' point-of-view. If you do decide to expand this, I'd love to see what adventures they go on, and how you describe it.

Grammar & Construction
Janie sat close to her owners feet
Owners needs an apostrophe.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of She Walks  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! !

I'm here to give your poem, "She Walks" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This is a tragic love story that is very believable. There is great detail and imagery. It's easy to imagine a young woman looking out the window, waiting for her love to arrive.

Flow & Style
The free verse flows well. The last line ends the poem with a haunting reminder.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of She Walks  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! !

I'm here to give your poem, "She Walks" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This is a tragic love story that is very believable. There is great detail and imagery. It's easy to imagine a young woman looking out the window, waiting for her love to arrive.

Flow & Style
The free verse flows well. The last line ends the poem with a haunting reminder.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of She Walks  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello, Nikola~Loving Her Gracie Girl! !

I'm here to give your poem, "She Walks" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This is a tragic love story that is very believable. There is great detail and imagery. It's easy to imagine a young woman looking out the window, waiting for her love to arrive.

Flow & Style
The free verse flows well. The last line ends the poem with a haunting reminder.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Sticktalker !

I'm here to give your poem, "55 Word Story Contest" , a Helping Hearts Review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Wow. If this is really an account of what Pliny saw, then I guess it's good to know things really haven't changed, no matter what the time period.

I think combining your second, third and fourth sentences into one would make it flow better.

Thanks for sharing!


--Wyn

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Sticktalker !

I'm here to give your poem, "A Lil Wind Blew Today" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Winter winds do seem to play havoc on a person's body, especially for the person with problems that can be triggered by the slightest change in barametric pressure. The poem is not nonsense. It's really easy to relate to.

In the last stanza, I don't think you need inside before core. It sounds repetive.

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of At Duffy's  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Joy !

I'm here to give your poem, "At Duffy's" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Written as a response to a poem about a vacation that could have been, this poem is able to stand on its own, even without the link to the other.

There are things we want to do, such as go on a trip, but circumstances prevent it. Our favourite local dining spot might not be gourmet quality, but then, it doesn't have to be as long as we enjoy ourselves.

Each free-verse stanza read like little paragraphs, focused on it's own thoughts.

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of Waning  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Review of
Waning  (13+)
Regrets, I have a few.
#1579553 by romance_junkie


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I can easily imagine what it is that gives such great joy, yet causes such regret. There is a great deal of emotion in this poem, heavy-hearted sadness.

Suggested Improvements
The way the poem flows, I don't think it's necessary to capitalise every line. I think it would flow more smoothly without it.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of why so sad  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Review of
 why so sad  (13+)
a minor confrontation
#1579910 by romance_junkie


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Nice poem and scene. I can see the woman drowning her hurt and sorrows with alcohol, getting back at whomever it was that pushed her to that point. Is the narrator someone she just met at the bar, I wonder. I can imagine her pouring her story to this person she just met, and is flirting with, trying to regain her own sense of self.

Suggested Improvements
I'm not sure why the lines and stanzas are separated as they are, but it's a bit disconcerting.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of The Waltz  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the EBB Love Fan Package. The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters. I'm thrilled you are receiving this honour!

Review of
The Waltz  (E)
forgiveness in a dance
#1553185 by romance_junkie


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
What a beautiful story told in verse. The woman is described with such clarity, I had no trouble imagining her in my mind's eye. I see a woman who will not be confined by societal bounds, even with her asking for forgiveness. The love of both is reaffirmed with a dance.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of Behind The Door  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, 🌕 HuntersMoon , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  as part of your "Invalid Item"  win.

Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the EBB Love Fan Package. The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters. I'm thrilled you are receiving this honour!

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Behind The Door  (E)
What lies within the dark corner of a poet's mind? (Form: Trijan Refrain)
#1564149 by 🌕 HuntersMoon


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I like how the chaos of thoughts and words take on a life of their own inside a mind.

Flow & Style
Very rhythmic and almost lyrical with the repeating lines.

Suggested Improvements
releases darkness unconfined
This line sounds contradictory. Unconfined darkness would not need to be released. How about lets run the darkness unconfined.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of CONQUEST  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Joy !

I'm here to give your poem, "CONQUEST" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Awesome poem about tenacity. The mountain could very well be a person perceived as cold, distant and uncaring. All that was needed was someone who would not give up.

Flow & Style
It starts a bit slow, but quickly picks up pace.

Suggested Improvements
In the fifth stanza, I think up can end with a period, a when capitalised.

Thanks for sharing!


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Joy !

I'm here to give your poem, "Ballad of the Wind" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Beautiful poem. The wind is given character, as is the apple. The kiss of the wind, with its results, is like a tragic love story. Tragic is the apple missing the harvest, but then, perhaps it was never fated for harvest at all.

Flow & Style
I enjoyed the gentleness of the flow.

Thanks for sharing!

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