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Review of Reflections  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, 🌕 HuntersMoon , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  as part of your "Invalid Item"  win.

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Review of
Reflections  (E)
Bubbles gliding on a summer breeze bring back memories. (Form: Villanelle)
#1579389 by 🌕 HuntersMoon


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
It's rather interesting, what things can bring memories from the deepest corners of our minds into the light. Some good, some bad, we are allowed to relive those moments, until they are locked away again.

You make the form seem so easy, sculpting the words so they come full circle. My one stumbling point is this line, Thoughts of you recall when the world was bright. Thoughts you recall of?

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of A Future Bright  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, 🌕 HuntersMoon , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  as part of your "Invalid Item"  win.

Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the EBB Love Fan Package. The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters. I'm thrilled you are receiving this honour!

Review of
A Future Bright  (E)
I pray that I will see the light again. (Form: Decuain)
#1582477 by 🌕 HuntersMoon


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I think the words were beautiful, and the picture as well. It makes me think, without us as proper caretakers, what flowers will remain for us tomorrow. What of anything, really, will remain?

Flow & Style
Very nice flow. I'm not sure about some of the declaimation, though. Mirrors is one of the words.

Other than that, excellent poem. Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of In the City  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Joy !

I'm here to give your poem, "In the City" , a Helping Hearts Review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Wow. Very interesting choice of words to describe life in a big city. You do make a good point, though. How often do storefronts display their wares in a gloomy way. Signs are bright and cheery and made to be attractive to people, claiming that it's needed. But a city is a cold place, if you're alone.

Very nice poem, that didn't seem to stumble or stall in any line or stanza.

Thanks for sharing!


--Wyn

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Review of THUNDER SPIRITS  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON !

I'm here to give your poem, "THUNDER SPIRITS" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This poem was emotional and heartfelt. The desire for peace and vengence is a strong one for a people who's had everything taken away from them. To regain a stolen birthright is a dream any people who have suffered have.

Flow & Style
The poem was nice and rhythmic. The rhymes sounded unforced. I hit a snag (once again) with the last two lines.

Thanks for sharing!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON !

I'm here to give your poem, "WEPT FOR A DREAM DESTROYED" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

It was such a terrible time in this country's history. Promises made and broken, government sponsered genocide. Greed and racism left a stain and wound that even now, has still not been removed.

Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON !

I'm here to give your poem, "A PRAYER TO THE SPIRITS" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Such a beautiful prayer and dream! The desire for peace and unity transcends all peoples.

Flow & Style
The poem flowed well, rhythmically.
The rhymes sound unforced. My one quibble is rhyming again with been.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of Hunted  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Dawn Embers , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  as part of your "Invalid Item"  win.

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Review of
 Hunted  (18+)
for the 55 word contest
#1580485 by Dawn Embers


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

For a mere fifty-five words, you are able to create a scene that can be out of a horror movie. It engages the senses of sight and sound. There is action and mystery. This little bit would make an interesting story.

Starting it off with Moonless sounds a bit odd. It's missing the in front of it. Changing to expose to exposing can help maintain the word count.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of GO AWAY?  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON !

I'm here to give your poem, "GO AWAY?" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Interesting poem about a relationship. Sometimes, we can't stand the one we're with, and others, we can't live without them. Do we want to really end the relationship, or do we want to try and make the best of it?

Flow & Style
The poem was very easy to get in to. It was rhythmic and steady. The conversational nature of the poem allowed the fifth line of each stanza to add to the poem, rather than detract from it.

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of FOLLOW ME  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON !

I'm here to give your poem, "FOLLOW ME" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
To be able to travel to such a place would be a dream! A world with faeries and unicorn, where it is always happy and peaceful... I'd definately never want to leave.

Flow & Style
Very nice rhythm and rhyme.

Suggested Improvements
Only one minor quibble. Because of the second line of the second stanza, I think the rest of the poem should be in quotes.

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of GODDESS  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON !

I'm here to give your poem, "GODDESS" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Simply beautiful poem in honour of the goddess. It speaks to her strength and nurturing.

Flow & Style
Very nice rhythm and rhyming.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of Kidnapped  
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello, Jessica , and welcome to WDC!

I'm here to give your poem, "Kidnapped" , a Simply Positive Newbie review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Initial Impressions
Wow. This was certainly a sad and depressing poem. The ending was completely unexpected.

Other than the girl's age, there was nothing to connect me emotionally to the girl. What were some things about her? Parents? Friends? A favourite teddy bear?

Flow & Style
For the most part, the poem flows well.

Suggested Improvements
You don't need commas at the end of every line.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn

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Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
Hello, 123996 , and welcome to WDC!

I'm here to give your "The War Nobody Sees"  a Simply Positive Newbie review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Initial Impressions
You speak of a war, but are very vague about it. Be more specific. What problem are you trying to address? Drug war? Gang war? Racial/ethnic tensions?

Everything is lumped into one, big paragraph. You have run-on sentences and fragments. There are sevaral spelling and punctuation mistakes.

Take some time to proofread this again. If you want people to listen, you'll need to make it more readable first.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn

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Review of You Bleed Me Dry  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello, damon8, and welcome to WDC!

I'm here to give your poem, "You Bleed Me Dry" , a Simply Positive Newbie review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This poem is filled with emotion: sadness, pain, condemnation. The feelings are easy to relate to.

Flow & Style
Although written in free verse, the poem flowed well.

Suggested Improvements
Third line, comma after questions.
Fourth line, Let's just be friends should be in quotes.
I think you should forego the comma at the end of each line, and use proper punctuation instead.
Or if you want to keep it as is, the latter part of every second line can be split off to make a third.

--Wyn

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Review of Evening Meander  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, fyn !

I'm here to give your poem, "Evening Meander" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
The other poems of your's I've read all have a deeper meaning, yet I find myself struggling to find this one. You use very descriptive words to describle things we often see at night: bloated fish belly for the moon, panning for gold for stargazing. It all leads to the last line, making me wonder if the speaker, in his contemplations, ended up falling through the ice.

I think the third stanza, you need commas after sky and grasses. Last paragraph, remove the period after glass.

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of Missing in Action  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, fyn !

I'm here to give your poem, "Missing in Action" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This is a sad, tragic poem, to which I can clearly relate. When people we hold dear disappear, we feel the weight of that emptiness their departure leaves behind. We struggle to find answers. Where did they go? What is it that made them go? The loss of a person leaves a rippling effect that spreads beyond them.

There are no improvements I can suggest.

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of Primal Sense  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, fyn !

I'm here to give your poem, "Primal Sense" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

This is an interesting and thought provoking poem. We are often told to look at things from the perspective of other people, but we are rarely encouraged to look from a non-human perspective as well. Perhaps we would care more for the planet that sustains us, or the animals around us if we do.

Excellent poem. Thanks for sharing!


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Review of Storm Music  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, fyn !

I'm here to give your poem, "Storm Music" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Perhaps I'm reading too much into it, but I thought this poem was an excellent analogy of the chaos that can be our thoughts and emotions. Things that burden us can affect how we see and hear and feel. Once that is released, the world becomes alive for us once again.

Flow & Style
There is no rhyming or rhythm. Every line produces a thought and image of some kind.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of Knock, Knock  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, aralls!

Congratulations on winning my package for the "Invalid Item" . Here is review 5 of 5.

I'm reviewing your poem, "Knock, Knock" . This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This is my last look through your dark poetry folder on this trip through your port. I must say, some of the images have been disturbing. *Bigsmile*
Very scary, being chased by such a monster.

Flow & Style
I like how the monster's actions are separated and bolded. They stand out more, heightening the effect.

Suggested Improvements
Breath imprisoned inside innocent chest.
This line feels out of place. The first and last stanza are about the person hiding in the closet. The three in between describe the monster.

I've really enjoyed this trip through your port. Thanks for sharing your talent with us!

--Wyn

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Review of Night Terrors  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, aralls!

Congratulations on winning my package for the "Invalid Item" . Here is review 4 of 5.

I'm reviewing your poem, "Night Terrors" . This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Wow. What a gripping poem! Such horrible dreams can make one wish to never need sleep again (though I wouldn't wish sleeplessness on anyone either). It's sad that for some people, there is no respite in rest, denied even peaceful slumber.

Flow & Style
I think for this peom, the lack of rhyme adds to the feelings of terror and chaos.

Suggested Improvements
A couple of the lines ending with periods can probably have commas instead.
In the last stanza, I think a comma should go after face.

Thanks for sharing!


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Review of Voodoo Madness  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, aralls!

Congratulations on winning my package for the "Invalid Item" . Here is review 3 of 5.

I'm reviewing your poem, "Voodoo Madness" . This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
I'm really enjoying my trip through your dark poetry folder. The poems I've read so far are delightfully chilling.

This poem is told with quite a sinister voice. Though I wonder if the victim deserves it, slandering and lies being a pet peeve of mine. *Wink*

Suggested Improvements
In the last stanza, I don't think you need a comma after gulp.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of Hunting Spirits  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, aralls!

Congratulations on winning my package for the "Invalid Item" . Here is review 2 of 5.

I'm reviewing your poem, "Hunting Spirits" . This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
This poem really sends the imagination on a journey! I can see two possible stories this poem creates; an amusement park funhouse gone awry, or an ill-fated ghost hunter. Awesome images of terror, doom, and hopelessness.

Flow & Style
The rhymes sounded unforced and easy. It took me a few readings of the poem to catch the rhythm of some of the rhymes.

Suggested Improvements
The pierce of fang
My one minor quibble. I kept thinking that this may read better as the piercing fang, or the pierce of fangs.

Great poem. Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, aralls!

Congratulations on winning my package for the "Invalid Item" . Here is review 1 of 5.

I'm reviewing your poem, "Sweet Terror, Play Me Well" . This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
To me, this poem is about imminent death and the terror faced by a hellish possibility. It engages the senses, from the lack-of-comfort providing bells, to the nuseaus stench of the dead. The fear is made physical by touch and taste as death draws near. I really enjoyed the sensory encompassing quality of this poem.

Flow & Style
The short lines build on each of the senses, one at a time. Rather than make the pace of the poem quicker, it intensified it.

Suggested Improvements
None at all.

Great poem. Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn

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Review of Released  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Legerdemain !

I'm here to give your, "Released" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

I thought this was a very straight to the point poem about love lost and being callously discarded. The imagery of being on a pedestal while loved, as well as a ship left to derelict when it is over is very appropriate. It also seems like love is objectified, to aquire and discard at whim.

Lots of thoughts packed in so few words. Thanks for sharing!

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Review of delicate hands  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, romance_junkie , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  as part of your "Invalid Item"  win.

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Review of
 delicate hands  (18+)
an exploration into the unknown
#1575498 by romance_junkie


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I liked the poem, and how it tells of action and movement, without being blatant; very erotic. The off-handed remarks in parenthesis gives the poem a conversational tone, making it seem like the teasing build up of foreplay.

Suggested Improvements
The punctuation, especially comma placement, seems inconsistant.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of Misdirection  
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello, romance_junkie , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  as part of your "Invalid Item"  win.

Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the EBB Love Fan Package. The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters. I'm thrilled you are receiving this honour!

Review of
 Misdirection  (13+)
it's just a little bit of misdirection
#1563144 by romance_junkie


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I liked the dark quality of this poem. Love can be hurtful, and people as well. We don't told what the indescretion is, but it's not required, as people can fill in the blanks from their own personal feelings on the matter.

Flow & Style
I like the lyrical quality of this. It moves at a brisk pace. There were some parts, though, where I had to pause and reread to get the rhythm back.
Rhyming down with down in the first verse makes it sound weak. The same goes for the near rhyme of down and around, and non rhyming hollow and sorrow.

--Wyn - missing III

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