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I love to do reviews! I can get lost for hours reading all the amazing work from everyone here! I am honest when I review, I love to offer advice or suggestions, sometimes another set of eyes can be a big help!! I know that I always appreciate another opinion or help so I just want to offer the same to others!!~
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Spotting ways to change up just a couple of words and make the flow even better. As well as noticing ways of making the writing stand out even more with adding text color or placement.
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Poems
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Review of She Was New  
Review by Jen~
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (3.5)
This poem showed a woman who has been so broken yet overcame it and let herself be healed from the inside out! This was written with emotions and the reader can feel them as they hang onto each word!

Well written, you captured the readers attention with a amazing story!

Write On!


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Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Such a very eye catching poem. The picture, placement, color and font are just simply perfect for this poem. It shows how someone can go from being so lonely to finding that one person who changes them. This was well written with a very smooth flow! Truly a sweet poem about friendship and the feelings it brings.

Write On!


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Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is something that I can 100% relate to! I suffer from mental health issues and you described a part of it very well. Some days it is a huge struggle to even get up, and to even think about having to do something can cause you to panic...it is a battle that you seem to always fight yet never win.

Your writings capture so much meaning and emotions in a few short lines and that is talent!!

Great Job!

Write on!

I will try to stop raiding your port soon Ha Ha!!~


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Review of 28 Years  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was an extremely emotion provoking poem. It made my eyes tear up reading how you felt, how you were compelled to go there. You walked away a different man because you let a lifetime of regret finally go. This was well written, easy to read, hanging on to every word. Very intense and deep.

Great Job!

Write On!


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Review by Jen~
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Well you for sure left the reader hanging on to each word and wanting more!! Wanting to know what he does, what choice does he make...it's an amazing thing as a author to know that you left your reader wanting more!! That is awesome! I love the story line and how you are so detailed in the descriptions of what is going on through his mind. Interested to see how it turns out!!

Good Job!~

Write On!~


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Review of The Old-Lady  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (3.0)
This was a very intriguing story line here that you are writing about. I can for sure see what story you are telling, however I do have a few suggestions.

There are a lot of sentences that can be combined, instead of one or two shorter sentences you can change up or add a word and it will make it flow better. Also I noticed that you referred to her as the "imaginative" friend and I think that if you used "imaginary" it would read a lot easier.

Other then that it was a really neat story, pulling the reader into a ghost story and leaving them wondering if ghost are real or not, are they something "imaginary" that our minds make up? Or do we truly have spirits and angels that walk among us...hmmmm....

Great Job!!

Write On!!~


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Review of Echoed cold  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was so deeply written with emotions flowing from the words. You are able to capture the readers attention and draw them in and have them hanging onto every word. I love how your poems tend to be semi short yet have the most powerful messages!

Another great job!~

Write On!~


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Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very interesting view on rough times and how we approach how to overcome them. I liked that you ended it with beautiful beginnings begin because that is so true! We are all offered new beginnings and it is how we deal with it that decides weather we learned from the past hardship and can move on. Great expression. Easy read with a smooth flow!

Great Job~!

Write On!~


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Review of Sleepless  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Such an amazing story, at first thinking it is about 2 lovers so happy and in love...which it still is...just with a sad ending. You expressed the emotions between them well, the love the beauty and the heart break of what is happening.
I love the twist at the end! Well written, flows well and has a great story line!

Write On!


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Review of Demented  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow! So intense and I was hanging onto each and every word! Wanting more! Which is exactly what you want yo do as a author...leave them wanting more! Well written with a powerful message and expressive emotions. Easy to read, flows smoothly!

Great Job!

Write On!


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Review of Fragmented Minds  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I loved this! I believe that mental health illnesses are overlooked and labeled and judged by society. I suffer from some myself, not this exactly, however you were able to explain the chaos that happens in the minds of people like this. It was very well written, loved the way you spaced things, still easy to follow, flows well. Great Job!!

Write On~


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Review of Randoms by Rach  
for entry "Busy Busy Busy" 
Review by Jen~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I can 100% relate to what you are saying~ This place has given me hope and a feeling of belonging! I want to write all the time now to and I get so inspired by all of the amazing people here and their awesome writings! Getting involved may feel chaotic but I am sure you will do great!!

Write On~


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Review of The Lake  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I simply loved this! It was full of fear, determination, fight power and will. Losing their daughter forced the father to seek revenge, something I am sure that any parent in this situation would feel.
This was well written and I was literally hanging onto every word...wanting more! Which is exactly what we as writers want to do!

Great Job!

Write On!!


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Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Ha Ha! As a parent I can so relate to this. My kids are older now and don't dress up or go trick or treating but oh my do I remember the days of standing in a crowed store searching costume after costume, as they rejected one after another! Talk about stressful!!

This was well written, flowed smoothly and had awesome humor in it! It for sure grabs the readers attention, perhaps because so many can relate so well!!

Great Job!!

Write On!~


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Review of Sounds of youths  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello! This is #3 of 3 reviews that were gifted to you!

I literally giggled out loud as I read this. I have 3 children, 2 girls and 1 boy, ages 18, 15 and 12. So I know well the sounds of not just boys but children in general! Ha Ha And as I get older I realize that all the bangs, slams and bumps that irritate me now,I will miss when they are all moved out and silence takes over.

This was well written and easy to read because the words flowed so smoothly. My only suggestion is to add text color, play around with the font size and style and placement of the poem. It really will make it stand out even more. Just a suggestion though, I have read several of your writings and enjoy them very much just as they are. Adding color or changing cosmetics of the poem is just a way to make it a even better read, eye catching!!

Great Job!!

Write On!~


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Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello!~ This is #2 of 3 reviews that were gifted to you!~

Being a WDC Power Reviewer myself, I very much enjoyed this little poem. In just 9 lines you were able to sum up the group, it's activities and all the reviewing that is done! Very cute and well written.

I have only one suggestion, perhaps add some color, center it, maybe play with the font type...cosmetic things like that really do just add the final touch to it and make it even better!

Just a thought though, it is awesome as it is!!

Great Job!!

Write On!~


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Review of Hello Little Boy  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, this is #1 of 3 of the reviews that I gifted to you!!!!

Very well written poem showing the fear then joy of a lost little boy. Innocence of a child is so sweet and pure, the love they have for their mother is unconditional and forever. This was a perfect expression of something that all parents fear happening,losing their child. The panic and heart stopping fear must be overwhelming, and then when you find them again, overwhelmed with relief and happiness.

Great Job!!

Write On!~


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Review by Jen~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I loved this story! You could sense her anxiety and her desperation. It had humor and a lighthearted flow to it. I truly was hanging on and wanting more!! Wondering what will happen to her next!! Always want to leave the reader wanting more and you did!!

Another great job on a well written piece of work!!


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Review by Jen~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello! I just read your poem and wanted to give you my feedback!! *Reading*

*Geek* Why I liked this~This was very deep with emotion and the reader can truly feel the pain that is being expressed. The reader can FEEL it because they are drawn in at the very start! I write dark poetry and I express a lot of detailed emotions as well, it is a release of the mind to put it into words.




*StarStruck* My favorite part was~I liked it all honestly! I did really enjoy this line:

I dread losing you and I dread when you're gone.

It is something that we all have felt at some point in life.




*Martian*Advice or suggestions~My personal opinion is to remove the periods at the end of sentences, keep question marks and any commas. Removing the periods will make it flow better. With the periods it is very stop and go type reading. Just a thought!!~





Great Job!!~ *ThumbsUp*

Write On!!~ *PenV*

~Jen~


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Review of Gaia  
Review by Jen~
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello! I just read your story that you asked me to read and wanted to give you my feedback!! *Reading*

*Geek* Why I liked this~I loved the details of nature and of his surroundings. You gave such detail that the reader feels as though they are there, seeing the deer, feeling nature on them, consuming them and the truly free spirit of the man.






*StarStruck* My favorite part was~When you wrote of the meaning of words and how words are used to describe things, and sometimes we cannot even find the right words! I love words, I love that you can draw the reader in with them, make them feel the emotions you are expressing through the power of words!!






*Martian*Advice or suggestions~I found a few lines that I think could use a change or so to make it flow better. I did notice that there are a lot of very short sentences one after another at times. If you just added a word or comma, you could maybe blend some of the sentences together to make it less so "start and stop" reading. Here are the lines I noticed:



I'm surrounded by mind, speaking to me in languages I have yet to learn.
(I'm surrounded by my mind, speaking to me in languages I have yet to learn)


My walk is becoming a journey. I should return home. But what is home but a word which I can write on this page?
(My walk is becoming a journey, perhaps I should return home. Yet what is a home,other then a word on which I write on this page)



Great Job!!~ *ThumbsUp*
Other then the couple of suggestions that I made I did not see anything else! Well written!!

Write On!!~ *PenV*

~Jen~


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Review of "Women"  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful and mesmerizing to read..the flow is smooth and the beauty of how you describe women is heart touching and said with so much RESPECT! It is truly wonderful to hear things like this. You have a way of grabbing the reader at the first couple of words and pulling them in....then BOOM..your hooked LoL

I will be raiding your port if you don't mind!!

Loved this poem!!

Great Job!!

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Review of Mother Nature  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This was a very sweet poem about the love of a mother. I love that in these 8 lines you manages to grasp the readers attention and instantly make them remember their own mother. It stirs up feelings and that is what we as authors want to do!

Great Job~

Write On!~

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Review of Roller Coaster  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This makes me think of being bi-polar...Up...Down...never knowing when you will change or for how long it will last. It is going to bed and not knowing who you will be when you wake up..the UP you, or the DOWN you..

Well Written! Easy to read, flows smoothly!

Write On!~

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Review of Sad Faces  
Review by Jen~
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This was such a good poem! I really like it and found it was easy to follow, hanging on to each word! Sad that she wants to leave this life because she feels she would be happier...sadly this is not something new!

My suggestion is to play around with some spacing, color, font and placement and once you add that you will be surprised how much it changes the reading of the poem!!

Great Job!

Write On!~

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Review by Jen~
Rated: E | (5.0)
I truly enjoyed reading this...you are able to keep the reader hanging on, word after word, and wanting more! That is what we as writers want...to leave them wanting MORE! This was great, flowed smoothly.

I think that playing around with changing the font, color, placement and spacing would make this whole thing just come together even more!

This was my favorite line:

Leave your mark. Remember the marks left before you. And if you think you've got it tough, think again.

So very true!!

Write On!~

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