Thanks so much for your entry in day one of "Invalid Item"
I'm a sucker for Acrostic and the senses that you brought to it had me warming my hands and smelling the cold moisture in the air. Each word was chosen with care and I so appreciate the thought that went into it. You my friend are a wordsmith!
I saw no errors and thought you used the prompt brilliantly. Wonderful job.
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This months form is the Fibonacci:
How is the Fibonacci set up as poem?
Line 1: 1 word
Line 2: 2 words
Line 3: 3 words
Line 4: 5 words
Line 5: 8 words
Line 6: 13 words...
Use of prompt & form.
Great use of the form and prompt!
Content & Imagery.
This was a sweet ride! Love the red and blue font. Were you aware that you can use the image? It is shareable. You've created a fast paced read full of fun.
Suggestions.
I saw no errors. I have no suggestions for improvement except maybe the use of the image. I think it would round out the feel of this fun poem.
At the end of the day this is your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Thank you so much for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" , this review is not the final judging. There are other judges and the reviews will all be tallied.
This months form is the Fibonacci:
How is the Fibonacci set up as poem?
Line 1: 1 word
Line 2: 2 words
Line 3: 3 words
Line 4: 5 words
Line 5: 8 words
Line 6: 13 words...
Use of prompt & form.
Great use of prompt and form.
Content & Imagery.
This was a fun read. It had me grinning like a loon! You were spot on with the insanity of young children. Great care was given to placement and the use of the image set it off.
Suggestions.
I have none. You've created a fun filled poem and I saw no errors. Good job!
At the end of the day this is your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
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First Thoughts
I love the way you have your port set up. I feel like I'm getting ready to go on a cruise!
Over All
This is a fun and easy way to skip across your port and find all sorts of good things. I hope you enjoy your mini raid and find something useful in the reviews. I'll be checking out some short stories, some poetry and whatever else that catches my eye. So...let's get started, shall we?
Thank you so much for sharing your work with me. I've enjoyed the visit to your port and I will be back soon.
Kaya
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Thank you so much for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" , this review is not the final judging. There are other judges and the reviews will all be tallied.
This months form is the Eintou:
The Eintou is built up in this way:
line 1: 2 syllables
line 2: 4 syllables
line 3: 6 syllables
line 4: 8 syllables
line 5: 6 syllables
line 6: 4 syllables
line 7: 2 syllables.
Use of prompt & form.
You used the form and prompt beautifully.
Content & Imagery.
Your imagery was hopeful. I did feel that the feeling was thrown off by cuddles. I think you could have used a different word there. For some reason it just doesn't fit that well for me.
Suggestions.
I saw no errors. Great care was given in the form of alignment and use of the image.
At the end of the day this is your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
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This months form is the Eintou:
The Eintou is built up in this way:
line 1: 2 syllables
line 2: 4 syllables
line 3: 6 syllables
line 4: 8 syllables
line 5: 6 syllables
line 6: 4 syllables
line 7: 2 syllables.
Use of prompt & form.
I thought you followed form and I could see the use of the prompt.
Content & Imagery.
I liked the direction you took with the prompt. An affirmation that each life is important. Your imagery was spot on and it left me feeling refreshed.
What stood out for me.
The form is short so I won't pick one thing, I would have to paste the entire thing if I did.
Suggestions.
I found no errors. I loved this positive little poem.
At the end of the day this is your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Carla, this little poem is chock full of personification! I loved the whole forest scene you created. You did a great job with this and it followed the lesson to a T. I can't wait to see what you come up with for the next lesson.
Hello, I will be reviewing you work, "Progression" [13+]
What I liked!.
I've never been surfing, never seen anyone surf in real life, so this was really interesting. I thought your imagery was helpful in building the tension in the story. I think you have the bones of a really great story. I do have some suggestions though.
What could use some work.
}Okay, first thing...you have almost the exact same sentence in the first and second paragraphs.
He hadn’t told anyone where he was going.
and He had not told anyone he was going out that afternoon.
I would suggest either taking one of these out or doing some serious rewording. Also, both sentences are passive and I noticed that about 50% of your story is written in a passive voice. I think stronger sentence structure would improve the 'feel' of this story. I think for this story to be effect you need to draw the reader in, make him or her part of the experience.
Some areas that need a little 'fixin'.
watching some one else drop down the face and race to the
This read someone. One word.
It relaxed his instinct.
Honestly, I just didn't get this sentence at all.
His numb mind experienced clarity unknown to him.
I would think that since he surfs at least twice a day he would know about the clarity, don't you think? Just a thought.{c}
Overall impression.
This was a narly story about a boy and some rippin' waves dude! I think you need to like...pump it up bro...maybe some awesome 'showing' and not 'telling.'
Oh Carla, I'm so glad you are taking these classes so I can read your poetry! Your alliteration was and the meter was smooth. You did a really good job with this hon. I would suggest maybe using some color to give this toe tapping poem some punch!
I really enjoyed this sweet poem describing the color 'Yellow.' It was a peaceful read and I enjoyed it. I would suggest that you capitalize Corn Puffs as it is a brand name. Your imagery was refreshing. I always find it interesting when different people complete the same assignment. Good job.
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First Thoughts
Anyone who reads my work will find that I am a huge fan of trees, so this one was right up my alley. Like you, I love Cottonwood Trees. There is something magical about all of those seeds drifting along in the wind. This poem really took me back.
Suggestions
None, except maybe some color to enhance this nature friendly treat.
Over All
I loved this sweet poem which features my favorite thing...trees! Good job!
Thank you so much for sharing your work with me. I've enjoyed the visit to your port and I will be back soon.
Kaya
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First Thoughts
Oh Carla, I loved this! It reminds me of this old black and white cartoon where the Owl is playing the fiddle for the Hoe-Down and all of the critters are square dancing.
The meter was smooth and nothing sounded forced, which is in my book.
Suggestions
My only suggestion would be to add some color. This is such a fun poem with such great imagery, I think a splash of color would really give it a nice punch.
Over All
This is an adoreable poem full of dancing faries and singing bullfrogs. I really did love this, good job!
Thank you so much for sharing your work with me. I've enjoyed the visit to your port and I will be back soon.
Kaya
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First Thoughts
No way could I pass by this folder without giving it some stars! I love each and everyone of the stories in this folder, of course, I'm a huge fan of all things history, so this was right up my alley.
Suggestions
I have none, I like it just like it is. Well...except that you need to write more history shorts!
Over All
This is a great folder full of wonderful historical/comedy shorts. I would suggest to anyone who has a love for funny, historical mockumentaries to check this out.
Thank you so much for sharing your work with me. I've enjoyed the visit to your port and I will be back soon.
Kaya
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Hi Dave! This review is part of "The Official Mod Review Blitz!" [E]. I meant to come back and review this before now, but I forgot. This is a neat way to find out how other folks here on WDC spend their time. Thank you so much for being such a wonderful member of our little home away from home.
Congrats on the day 5 win! It was most deserved. I loved the whole story you painted. The images were vivid and for a bit I was part of the Knight Pumpkins Brigade! I'm a sucker for light verses dark, especially when light triumphs! Good job hon!
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This months form is the Nonet:
The Nonet is nine lines worked like this:
9 Syllables - First Line
8 Syllables - Second Line
7 Syllables - Third Line
6 Syllables - Fourth Line
5 Syllables - Fifth Line
4 Syllables - Sixth Line
3 Syllables - Seventh Line
2 Syllables - Eighth Line
1 Syllables - Ninth Line
Use of prompt & form.
You used the form and prompt perfectly.
Content & Imagery.
I love the way you wrote this speaking from the soldiers POV. You're words were soulfull and heart felt. I could feel the frustration and desperation. Good job!
What stood out for me.
I’m deathly sick of the things I see
Their country takes a piece of me
I loved these lines, very vivid.
Suggestions.
I have none, good job!
At the end of the day this your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Thank you so much for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" , this review is not the final judging. There are other judges and the reviews will all be tallied.
This months form is the Nonet:
The Nonet is nine lines worked like this:
9 Syllables - First Line
8 Syllables - Second Line
7 Syllables - Third Line
6 Syllables - Fourth Line
5 Syllables - Fifth Line
4 Syllables - Sixth Line
3 Syllables - Seventh Line
2 Syllables - Eighth Line
1 Syllables - Ninth Line
Use of prompt & form.
You used the form and prompt clearly.
Content & Imagery.
I felt you did a good job with your imagery. I like the idea of describing the soldier in battle, how their minds are focused. Good job.
Suggestions.
I would think about the word 'And' in the third line. I think that has to be a better way to word this and knowing that you are a creative poet, I think you can make that more visual.
At the end of the day this your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Thank you so much for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" , this review is not the final judging. There are other judges and the reviews will all be tallied.
This months form is the Decastich form:
Deca means ten. So give me a poem containing ten lines.
No meter required, just ten lines in a stanza.
Use of prompt & form.
I can see the use of the image, but you did not follow form, so it won't be elligable to win.
Content & Imagery.
I can see where you trying to go, but I don't think you reached it as smoothly as you think. The imagery was a bit vague.
Suggestions.
No one has ever knew
The hurt I go through
This should read No one will ever know
I think you did an okay job with this poem, but you could have stretched yourself with your word choice.
At the end of the day this your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Thank you so much for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" , this review is not the final judging. There are other judges and the reviews will all be tallied.
This months form is the Decastich form:
Deca means ten. So give me a poem containing ten lines.
No meter required, just ten lines in a stanza.
Use of prompt & form.
You used the image and followed the form well.
Content & Imagery.
The imagery was pretty good, but I felt that it was a little vague.
Suggestions.
Run a spell check, you have misspelled words.
Longing to leave the stage for real world,
You need a (the) between 'for' and 'real.'
At the end of the day this your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Thank you so much for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" , this review is not the final judging. There are other judges and the reviews will all be tallied.
This months form is the Decastich form:
Deca means ten. So give me a poem containing ten lines.
No meter required, just ten lines in a stanza.
Use of prompt & form.
Wonderful use of the image and you followed the form well.
Content & Imagery.
I felt your imagery was very thoughtful and your use of repeated wording lends to that thoughtfulness. The idea of wanting perfection fits the image...well, perfectly
Suggestions.
I have none, great write.
At the end of the day this your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Thank you so much for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" , this review is not the final judging. There are other judges and the reviews will all be tallied.
This months form is the Decastich form:
Deca means ten. So give me a poem containing ten lines.
No meter required, just ten lines in a stanza.
Use of prompt & form.
You used the prompt and followed form well.
Content & Imagery.
I loved the haunting feel you created. There was a lot of feeling in just ten lines. It seemed to be very thoughtful.
Suggestions.
I would suggest maybe adding a colored font or maybe just a differnt type of font.
At the end of the day this your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Thank you so much for entering your poem in "Invalid Item" , this review is not the final judging. There are other judges and the reviews will all be tallied.
This months form is the Decastich form:
Deca means ten. So give me a poem containing ten lines.
No meter required, just ten lines in a stanza.
Use of prompt & form.
You followed the ten line from and prompt well.
Content & Imagery.
The battle of the sexes lives on. Your imagery gave me a giggle.
What stood out for me.
Women, you are multi-faced,
Your minds must be multi-paced!
SNAP! Great closing lines.
Suggestions.
Is not a big hazard.
This line has a 7 count, not 6.
At the end of the day this your work and I am just putting in my two cents. Take what you can use from it and toss the rest. Thank you so much for letting me share your creation!
Oh my, the stories you could tell. I loved the whole compressed time idea, I have a marriage that was just like that. I remember getting married, sort of...but the rest is fuzzy. Isn't it wonderful the way our minds can compartmentalize? I'm so glad that you found your pink thumb file, but don't you think that you were meant to missplace it? If you hadn't you would have never gotten 'in touch' with your handwritten stories.
I saw no errors and the story itself was very entertaining.
Kaya
You've said a mouthful sister! I couldn't agree with you more. I love John McCain's VP pick! I'm tired of canidates that have never had to do without, that have had everything handed to them their entire life. What do they know about the working middle class? What do they know about working all your life but not having a thing to show for it?
I'm tired of government managing my life for me. I'm tired of paying in taxes only to have them go to people who have a hundred children and no job. I'm just tired. Okay, enough soap-boxing.
You're thoughts are right on the mark and your information is up to date. You did a great job and I thank you for it.
Kaya
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I'm a sucker for Acrostic and the senses that you brought to it had me warming my hands and smelling the cold moisture in the air. Each word was chosen with care and I so appreciate the thought that went into it. You my friend are a wordsmith! 
I saw no errors and thought you used the prompt brilliantly. Wonderful job. 
Kaya
Unacceptable! Poor little manila folder...with no one to love her...I shall make it all better. 
I've enjoyed the visit to your port and I will be back soon.
Some areas that need a little 'fixin'. 
This is a neat way to find out how other folks here on WDC spend their time. Thank you so much for being such a wonderful member of our little home away from home.